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Well i wrote this because usually when i have so many things in my mind, it feels like if i need to get it all off of my chest. so writting always helps. ^____^ hope you guys like it.

Something inside me keeps me trapped at night.

Anything would help, with a little push from sight.

The light flickers and reflects through the glass,

So much to go through, as that little energy ball expands.

The room cuts out the breathable air,

"What keeps me here?" Is what I ask while playing with a strand of hair.

There are things questionable, to me and to God,

A battle and war that is yet to be fought.

"You can't stay in the past, you must focus on the present."

That keeps coming in and out of my head.

Pondering over and over again on decisions to make,

It drives me insane and I don't know what to take.

The yelling, the screaming, it helps not for me,

For it is something my eyes cannot see.

"I keep circling, when I should confront it directly..."

I fall and sit on the floor gracefully...

I put my hands ontop of my head,

As if maybe, just maybe, an answer might just fall on me instead.

"Closing your eyes might help."

I scoff, knowing how time will tell.

"Maybe if I let darkness consume me, everything will be taken off my chest..."

"If it was possible, I would take all your weight to let you rest..."

That voice was faint, yet familiar.

Darkness was already working and it continued...

"Who are you?" I tried to open my eyes, but the faint light was out of my grasp.

"Here... can you see it? Hold onto my hand..."

"But if I leave, all will come back... I want to stay here.

If I stay, I will have no more need to shed a tear."

"You might be correct, in certain aspects...

But have you ever considered you'll become just like an insect?"

The hand seemed to be reaching out more,

And I could see this glorious imminent glow.

"Why do you want to help me?

I'm nothing but a burden, or are you too blind to see?"

"I'm here to help you, and you are no burden to me.

If I can clearly see, then you can clearly see..."

And something unexpected happen...

That glorious hand reached out as fast as it could, pulled at my arm, and embraced as if I almost fell...

Gently, I felt a warmth on my chest.

And I saw the darkness leave, whilst what came was rest.

"My eyes feel heavy, but I now fear the dark..."

"Don't worry, nothing will lurk...

What I can promise you is this...

It's ok, you may fall asleep,

For I am here, our souls to keep.

I will not let anything happen for you are in my arms,

I shall protect you from anything and anyone.

So sleep for a good long while,

When you wake, I will still be here awaiting you with a gentle kiss and smile."

And with that, I let my eyes close and fall in a slumber,

Knowing that with him close to my side, light will conquer over darkness and I shall fear it no longer....

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Posted 2/21/08
A really nice poem ^^
I like it very much its makes you think "what was it that made her want to go into te darkness?"
so good job on this one
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Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^
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fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good
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fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.
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Posted 2/21/08

fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.


And that is so true
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Posted 2/21/08

Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.


And that is so true


^____^ CHA!!! hehehe. so have you written any good poems lately?
Posted 2/21/08
awesome poem! it has alot of depth
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Thanx!! Glad ya liked it. ^___^ I'm in the process of making another one, and this one might seem a little more..... hmmm..... it'll just have a bit more "oomph" to it. ^___^
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Posted 2/22/08

fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.


And that is so true


^____^ CHA!!! hehehe. so have you written any good poems lately?


mmmmm.....not really
I mostly send in old ones latley The school is ruing my inspiration to new poems xD
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Posted 2/22/08

Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.


And that is so true


^____^ CHA!!! hehehe. so have you written any good poems lately?


mmmmm.....not really
I mostly send in old ones latley The school is ruing my inspiration to new poems xD


Yeah, it seems school has been doing that to me as well. But I somehow found some inspiration lying around there, and now i'm back to writting stories and poems. If people love or like to read them, it also gives me motivation to continue to write.
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fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.


And that is so true


^____^ CHA!!! hehehe. so have you written any good poems lately?


mmmmm.....not really
I mostly send in old ones latley The school is ruing my inspiration to new poems xD


Yeah, it seems school has been doing that to me as well. But I somehow found some inspiration lying around there, and now i'm back to writting stories and poems. If people love or like to read them, it also gives me motivation to continue to write.


Yeah the same here ^^
Its more fun when you know that ppl like your work ^^
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Posted 2/22/08

Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:


Yamira wrote:


fullnarumetal wrote:

Thank you! It really does make you think. And there is sadness in it, but also that type of....mystery. ^___^


Yeah its all what a poem must have to bee good


But of course!! This is why it's fun to write poems.


And that is so true


^____^ CHA!!! hehehe. so have you written any good poems lately?


mmmmm.....not really
I mostly send in old ones latley The school is ruing my inspiration to new poems xD


Yeah, it seems school has been doing that to me as well. But I somehow found some inspiration lying around there, and now i'm back to writting stories and poems. If people love or like to read them, it also gives me motivation to continue to write.


Yeah the same here ^^
Its more fun when you know that ppl like your work ^^


^____^ That is true. I suppose it might be the same to others where they feel honored when someone compliments their work or would request for the writer to continue doing what they do.
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Posted 2/24/08
i love it imouto~chan! ^___^
its been so long.. without reading a poem that makes me think...
i really like it
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hahahahahaha, so sorry it made you think alot. It's just that i like to write long ones, better than short ones. hehehehe. but again, thanx!!! ^___^
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