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Kouta_XIII wrote:

A writer's greatest strength is their ability to string along words together, and create something that can be enjoyed by the people reading it. The source often comes from life experience, emotions, or the imagination, as long as you know what you're trying to write, you can create an infinite amount of things.
But one thing is true for all writers: you can't write alone, you need two to create a story...one to write, the other to listen...
So without further ado, here's a poem...
X__x;;
Again, I'm more of a story writer, not a poet...
Also I can't rhyme for crap... >_>

-Memories turn to rage-

I hate the way you smile at me.
So full of lies, and hidden truths.
We're no different, you're wearing a mask just like mine.
You are the enemy
That has been revealed to me!
When I trusted you, you betrayed me.
Left me out here to bleed, and die!
The laughs we shared, I don't remember.
The promises we made, I don't remember.
What we had...you don't remember...
You can't trust what you see.
Even now, I wear the mask to hide the demon inside.
I have become a weaver of nightmares, when my time comes
I will descend into hell.
Where I won't remember anything...
I'm still holding onto my hatred...the darkness slowly overtakes me.
And I become a demon that you created with your words.
You are my enemy.
The enemy I hate the most.
The enemy I want to see fall.
............
You try to use your venomous voice on me?!
I have grown immune to it....your words...can no longer reach me...
Can you hear me now?!
I throw away all the memories we once shared...
I cast off the chains you threw on me, remove the blade pierced through my chest...
You probably think you have a good reason to have stabbed me?
Take it to the grave, your venomous voice won't reach me anymore.
........
I'll never trust your words again, you will only betray me again...
Farewell, my first, and last love.....
The next time we meet, I will have thrown away our memories...
==================================
There...
I feel like I screwed up in so many ways. I really suck at poetry.
They'll probably end up seeing this someday, but I don't care.....
I don't need someone who stabs me in the back...



you really are a lot better in story telling... stories I mean... but it wasnt bad. Maybe a little too filled? Still I believe you have the potencial to write poems. Just dont force them out. Wait for them to come to you, like you wait for your stories. They end up perfect you know

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Posted 9/26/08

elanra_moonlight wrote:


Kouta_XIII wrote:

A writer's greatest strength is their ability to string along words together, and create something that can be enjoyed by the people reading it. The source often comes from life experience, emotions, or the imagination, as long as you know what you're trying to write, you can create an infinite amount of things.
But one thing is true for all writers: you can't write alone, you need two to create a story...one to write, the other to listen...
So without further ado, here's a poem...
X__x;;
Again, I'm more of a story writer, not a poet...
Also I can't rhyme for crap... >_>

-Memories turn to rage-

I hate the way you smile at me.
So full of lies, and hidden truths.
We're no different, you're wearing a mask just like mine.
You are the enemy
That has been revealed to me!
When I trusted you, you betrayed me.
Left me out here to bleed, and die!
The laughs we shared, I don't remember.
The promises we made, I don't remember.
What we had...you don't remember...
You can't trust what you see.
Even now, I wear the mask to hide the demon inside.
I have become a weaver of nightmares, when my time comes
I will descend into hell.
Where I won't remember anything...
I'm still holding onto my hatred...the darkness slowly overtakes me.
And I become a demon that you created with your words.
You are my enemy.
The enemy I hate the most.
The enemy I want to see fall.
............
You try to use your venomous voice on me?!
I have grown immune to it....your words...can no longer reach me...
Can you hear me now?!
I throw away all the memories we once shared...
I cast off the chains you threw on me, remove the blade pierced through my chest...
You probably think you have a good reason to have stabbed me?
Take it to the grave, your venomous voice won't reach me anymore.
........
I'll never trust your words again, you will only betray me again...
Farewell, my first, and last love.....
The next time we meet, I will have thrown away our memories...
==================================
There...
I feel like I screwed up in so many ways. I really suck at poetry.
They'll probably end up seeing this someday, but I don't care.....
I don't need someone who stabs me in the back...



you really are a lot better in story telling... stories I mean... but it wasnt bad. Maybe a little too filled? Still I believe you have the potencial to write poems. Just dont force them out. Wait for them to come to you, like you wait for your stories. They end up perfect you know



Heh. I tend to overkill way too much...
Sometimes it's a good thing, but other times, like for poems/songs/etc, it's doesn't always turn out right...
I'm gonna try again in a little bit.
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Posted 9/26/08 , edited 9/26/08
Okay, lets try this again.
Sorry once again, I don't do this sort of thing often....
Though someone once told to me:

"Aren't poets, novelists, artists, and song writers practically the same thing?"

However my response was... "Though we seem to be birds of a feather, we're all VERY different."
So without further ado, lets try this one more time...
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Okay, this wasn't too bad I guess, I cut it down quite a bit, and the ending phrase was tough to come up with...

Too bad there's a difference to how I hear it in my head and how it comes out in words...
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Kouta_XIII
[-Unbreakable chains-]

~Do you really hate me that much?
To have taken me out of the darkness...Only to slice out my eyes?
Leave me blind and stumbling?
Lost in which direction to run to?
Craving the warmth you once showed to me...?

Just like you, I feel like a hero but I feel like a devil.
Just like me, You still think about memories past
Just like you, I love and hate the life of solitude.
Just like me, You'll laugh in the face of sorrow.

I am the one you left behind, bleeding and searching.
It's the strength that is born from heartbreak that surrounds me...
The mountains I could move! I'd give it all away in an instant.
The strength you gave me was more than I could've ever hoped for...

Just like you, I feel like a hero but I feel like a devil.
Just like me, You still think about memories past
Just like you, I love and hate the life of solitude.
Just like me, You'll laugh in the face of sorrow.

I just wanted to be by your side until the end of my days.
All I ever wanted was to be the one to hold you when you cry.
To be your knight when the world turned against you.
To share my fading memories with you...

Can we reverse our fate
Or has the damage been done?
Our story isn't over yet
Even if I don't belong by your side, I want to believe...
That my place is there


Yep. This one is definately a great improvement! I really like it. In a sense, it's more of a song then a poem. The "lyrics" are well thought out and everything connects together so there's no stray lines. It's sweet and tragic with a hint of hope and wistfulness. There's also words that tell of betrayal of trust while the betrayed still want to be with the one who betrayed them.
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This is one of the longest poems I've ever written. This is inspired by a story a friend of mine wrote. I'm not sure if it's good though. Well, here it is:

My Mask

What's the truth and what's the lie
My laughter is fake as is my smile
My words confuse those who try to know me
My masks, my precious masks
My shield, my barrier against pain

Those words you spoke to me
Oh so long ago
They are forever embedded within me
Never to be forgotten
Why are you so cruel
To let me love you
Only to break me so completely
That I can no longer love

I can only wish for what I don't have
Wishing for peace without pain
Wishing that you'd disappear from my memories
Wishing for freedom without you
Wishing that I can be truely happy

I still see your cold eyes
You cold gaze
Freezing me to the deepest parts of my soul
I became afraid
Of people and of you
It hurts so much to remember
The emptiness within me
Why does it hurt so much

Simply wishing to feel needed and loved
Now that I've placed my perfect masks
Now that I'm broken and still like an unwanted doll inside
Now I only wish that someone can break them
Now my masks are my anchors

My masks, my precious masks
My masks, my barrier against pain
Until someone can break them
Until someone can set me free
Then I can love again
Then I'll be free
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SilveenFox wrote:

This is one of the longest poems I've ever written. This is inspired by a story a friend of mine wrote. I'm not sure if it's good though. Well, here it is:

My Mask

What's the truth and what's the lie
My laughter is fake as is my smile
My words confuse those who try to know me
My masks, my precious masks
My shield, my barrier against pain

Those words you spoke to me
Oh so long ago
They are forever embedded within me
Never to be forgotten
Why are you so cruel
To let me love you
Only to break me so completely
That I can no longer love

I can only wish for what I don't have
Wishing for peace without pain
Wishing that you'd disappear from my memories
Wishing for freedom without you
Wishing that I can be truely happy

I still see your cold eyes
You cold gaze
Freezing me to the deepest parts of my soul
I became afraid
Of people and of you
It hurts so much to remember
The emptiness within me
Why does it hurt so much

Simply wishing to feel needed and loved
Now that I've placed my perfect masks
Now that I'm broken and still like an unwanted doll inside
Now I only wish that someone can break them
Now my masks are my anchors

My masks, my precious masks
My masks, my barrier against pain
Until someone can break them
Until someone can set me free
Then I can love again
Then I'll be free


actually i like this poem its nice ... if u ask me to write a poem i can never do one

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bluechihuahua wrote:


SilveenFox wrote:

This is one of the longest poems I've ever written. This is inspired by a story a friend of mine wrote. I'm not sure if it's good though. Well, here it is:

My Mask

What's the truth and what's the lie
My laughter is fake as is my smile
My words confuse those who try to know me
My masks, my precious masks
My shield, my barrier against pain

Those words you spoke to me
Oh so long ago
They are forever embedded within me
Never to be forgotten
Why are you so cruel
To let me love you
Only to break me so completely
That I can no longer love

I can only wish for what I don't have
Wishing for peace without pain
Wishing that you'd disappear from my memories
Wishing for freedom without you
Wishing that I can be truely happy

I still see your cold eyes
You cold gaze
Freezing me to the deepest parts of my soul
I became afraid
Of people and of you
It hurts so much to remember
The emptiness within me
Why does it hurt so much

Simply wishing to feel needed and loved
Now that I've placed my perfect masks
Now that I'm broken and still like an unwanted doll inside
Now I only wish that someone can break them
Now my masks are my anchors

My masks, my precious masks
My masks, my barrier against pain
Until someone can break them
Until someone can set me free
Then I can love again
Then I'll be free


actually i like this poem its nice ... if u ask me to write a poem i can never do one



Thanks ^_^
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Posted 9/28/08

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Kouta_XIII
[-Unbreakable chains-]

~Do you really hate me that much?
To have taken me out of the darkness...Only to slice out my eyes?
Leave me blind and stumbling?
Lost in which direction to run to?
Craving the warmth you once showed to me...?

Just like you, I feel like a hero but I feel like a devil.
Just like me, You still think about memories past
Just like you, I love and hate the life of solitude.
Just like me, You'll laugh in the face of sorrow.

I am the one you left behind, bleeding and searching.
It's the strength that is born from heartbreak that surrounds me...
The mountains I could move! I'd give it all away in an instant.
The strength you gave me was more than I could've ever hoped for...

Just like you, I feel like a hero but I feel like a devil.
Just like me, You still think about memories past
Just like you, I love and hate the life of solitude.
Just like me, You'll laugh in the face of sorrow.

I just wanted to be by your side until the end of my days.
All I ever wanted was to be the one to hold you when you cry.
To be your knight when the world turned against you.
To share my fading memories with you...

Can we reverse our fate
Or has the damage been done?
Our story isn't over yet
Even if I don't belong by your side, I want to believe...
That my place is there


Yep. This one is definately a great improvement! I really like it. In a sense, it's more of a song then a poem. The "lyrics" are well thought out and everything connects together so there's no stray lines. It's sweet and tragic with a hint of hope and wistfulness. There's also words that tell of betrayal of trust while the betrayed still want to be with the one who betrayed them.

..........
*Quiet evil laugh*
-Insert ominous theme music in the background, moving camera angle, insert evil light from nowhere-

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Posted 9/28/08

Kouta_XIII wrote:


SilveenFox wrote:


Kouta_XIII
[-Unbreakable chains-]

~Do you really hate me that much?
To have taken me out of the darkness...Only to slice out my eyes?
Leave me blind and stumbling?
Lost in which direction to run to?
Craving the warmth you once showed to me...?

Just like you, I feel like a hero but I feel like a devil.
Just like me, You still think about memories past
Just like you, I love and hate the life of solitude.
Just like me, You'll laugh in the face of sorrow.

I am the one you left behind, bleeding and searching.
It's the strength that is born from heartbreak that surrounds me...
The mountains I could move! I'd give it all away in an instant.
The strength you gave me was more than I could've ever hoped for...

Just like you, I feel like a hero but I feel like a devil.
Just like me, You still think about memories past
Just like you, I love and hate the life of solitude.
Just like me, You'll laugh in the face of sorrow.

I just wanted to be by your side until the end of my days.
All I ever wanted was to be the one to hold you when you cry.
To be your knight when the world turned against you.
To share my fading memories with you...

Can we reverse our fate
Or has the damage been done?
Our story isn't over yet
Even if I don't belong by your side, I want to believe...
That my place is there


Yep. This one is definately a great improvement! I really like it. In a sense, it's more of a song then a poem. The "lyrics" are well thought out and everything connects together so there's no stray lines. It's sweet and tragic with a hint of hope and wistfulness. There's also words that tell of betrayal of trust while the betrayed still want to be with the one who betrayed them.

..........
*Quiet evil laugh*
-Insert ominous theme music in the background, moving camera angle, insert evil light from nowhere-



Hahaha. When I saw the pic, it fitted so well that I just bursted out laughing! Light is awesome!!!
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My War Is Won

This is my war, the war of my soul.
What can i say, this is my path and the only way.
I Betrayed my soul, and gave in to the darkness.
Hell reaps my life away, while i stumble and fall.
My weakness takes over, as i stay there and cry.
What could i do an weak boy like me.
So it may be or so it may seem.
My life is my life bring it back to me.
Your lethal ways, are bad as can be.
Whats left for me is to take it all away.
One knife, One Thrust should set me free.
With these hands of blood i smile away.
Finally it can be only my wife. my children, and me.
Dear Lord please forgive me for the life i lost.
The Life You Gave to me.
So as you can see my war is won.
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for those who think a poem is only small there are books written by Ellen Hopkins and its a story written with poetry (its about drugs though)
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Love
Love can be either filled with gracious memories
or horrid Memories
They can either bloom
or wither
But even if love hurts you...
just overcome it with a smile and move forward
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i wrote this for a friend of mine who had a really bad life, i know its bad. i'm sorry...


Lies

What is the reason behind our lies
Is there a meaning to why we humans fight
If you could help a childs sorrowful life
Will you be the savior to mine

Are you unable to speak the truth without telling a lie
All i see is everyone starting to cry
I don't feel any sorrow
Most of us cannot find our purpose to life

For my mistakes, i recieved marks of rage
All i did was say that you lied
I wonder why
Why is it that some people can't see within their own lies

Open your eyes
We are humans, we make mistakes
Are you able to swear on your life
Your not telling me another lie
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To live is to kill.
To kill is to live.
Living is killing.
Killing is living.

What will you do?
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The Way it Always Is
by me

I sit on my rooftop,
Gazing up at the stars.
Listening to the faint tinkling
of my music box
and hoping that somehow,
tomorrow will be
different, from the way it always is.
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