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This is my attempt at starting a story. The genre is probably fantasy and more specifically horror/thriller/supernatural fantasy.

This is literally spur of the moment so I haven't thought up many main characters of anything like that. I'll probably add more detail as time goes by but for now all I know is that I'm hoping for an anti-hero (please see this article if you require an explanation of what that is http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Anti-hero).

The period of the story is contemporary for the very first part but it could later link back and end up being the end of the story in one of those weird twisty ways that some stories do. So if anyone does continue this story feel free to go to which ever period in any country.

Any currently mythological creature can be used (with reference info if possible but not necessary). Also new creations are very welcome.


Alright here goes...



Myths and legends have since the beginning of time been how mankind explained the strange and eerie happenings on our world. But with the onset of the 21st Century, massive advancements in technology, 2 World Wars and the ability to map and manipulate DNA, mankind feels it no longer needs the superstitions. Ritual, religion and form are fast becoming outdated and outmoded concepts but the powers that be are unhappy at being forgotten, and so they decide that on the back of the old they will forge....

The New Mythology


The body lay in the alley way half hidden behind an old dumpster that looked as if it needed to be carried away itself. The plastic bag in which the body of the man had been contained had split open, when trying to move the dumpster one of the refuge collection workers had pulled it viciously out of the way. It was then that the naked body of the man who seemed far too tall and powerful to have ever been in it in the first place had tumbled out. Dazzling blue eyes wide open and a silent scream forever imprinted on that handsome face, the body slid out of the bag. His chest carvity torn open and emptied the body lay on the alley floor looking upwards in pain and screaming. Silently screaming.

The stench of bodily fluids, excrement and vomit mingled together in the air which eddied through the alley way and hit Eridanos full in the face as he stepped out of his car. His hair was dark and messy, flopping over his forehead and around his face. He hadn't even had time to comb it that morning. His clothes were clean and well made but he still managed to look completely tatty somehow.
He'd woken late, roused by the ringing of his mobile telling him to get to Drake Street where another grusome discovery had been made. "This is the third body in as many weeks." his editor had informed him. "This sort of thing will sell lots of newspapers, and if you can find out what's REALLY going on, your name will be up in lights." So he'd gone.

Right now the idea of having his name up in lights, wasn't all that appealing. He felt like crap, absolute crap. He hadn't been able to sleep properly for well over a month now. Each night he was haunted by a dream which caused him to wake up panting and covered in perspiration but he couldn't for the life of him recall what he had seen.
Black shadows like smoke floated about in his mind obscuring the images he so badly wanted to remember and his head felt as through sharp claws were digging themselves into his brain every time he tried.
Wearing dark glasses to hid his painful sleep deprived eyes from the bright rays of late morning sun, he dragged himself over to the entrance of the alleyway where the public were gathered, the police having cordoned off the area. Taller then most of the other people there Eri was able to see what was happening. The body had been placed in a body bag but it hadn't been fully closed, he couldn't quite see the face, one of the policemen was obscuring the view from that side of the alley.
Feeling a bit dizzy Eri but his hand to his head to wipe away some of the cold sweat that had gathered on his forehead. He swayed backwards almost falling over was able to correct himself. As he lowered his hand his eyes immediately fixed on the face of the corpse. He gasped and then before he could stop himself he vomited. He knew that face. He knew who had been murdered this time.

Mythological Reference: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eridanos_%28mythology%29
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so eridanos have some special powers or what, like his powers is connected to death... eridanos is the river of hades right??
does the antagonist seeks out the guts of people, or is he an immortal that eridanos cannot possibly kill??
and the antagonist is waiting for eridanos for years to come along and discover his powers..

can we profile the leads first??
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dblx wrote:

so eridanos have some special powers or what, like his powers is connected to death... eridanos is the river of hades right??
does the antagonist seeks out the guts of people, or is he an immortal that eridanos cannot possibly kill??
and the antagonist is waiting for eridanos for years to come along and discover his powers..

can we profile the leads first??


Well as I said this was simply a spur of the moment thing (as can be seen by the numerous errors). I haven't thought about it at all. This is basically the product of about 45mins. I was hoping other people would expand upon it.
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WOW..... i'm not really into writing these type of story. I tryed, but failed.
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lirg123 wrote:

WOW..... i'm not really into writing these type of story. I tryed, but failed.


same here!!!! lol i'm more into romance comedy XD i like writting those kind of stories, everytime my friends read them, they giggle.. XD its actually good, when you hear ur friends giggle about aomething you did =D
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That not what i meant. I mean i not really into detail story.
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OK....so isn't anyone going to continue the story? I thought the point of this group was to do just that. I don't mean to sound like I'm preaching but practice makes perfect.
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OK....so isn't anyone going to continue the story? I thought the point of this group was to do just that. I don't mean to sound like I'm preaching but practice makes perfect.


Well... i need more info for me to do that.
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Phoenasia wrote:

OK....so isn't anyone going to continue the story? I thought the point of this group was to do just that. I don't mean to sound like I'm preaching but practice makes perfect.


Well... i need more info for me to do that.


Concerning what?

Eridanos is just a character at the moment he's not necessarily the main protagonist. As is pretty much blatantly stated in the piece of prose, he is a scruffy report who has been sent to the scene and recognizes the murder victim.

A way to continue the story might be to suggest who the person is and how Eridanus knows him.
Also there have been three murders in three weeks and Eridanos has been having strange dreams for a month (which is four weeks, incase that wasn't obvious). It might be an idea to explore that coincidence.

I've already said that the dead man was handsome, tall and powerful looking. He's been gutting and dumped a plastic bag. Since Eridanos knows or at least recognizes him whilst it isn't mentioned that anyone else does, it suggests that he is not a celebrity or anything like that, so he could be a friend, family member, work colleague, etc.

I also said right at the beginning of the story, in my introduction that people are beginning to see mythology and religion as outdated but "the powers that be" (obviously supernatural beings) are unhappy at being forgotten and are creating a new mythology. That stated, the fact there are two other victims and it was suggested they were all killed and dumbed in the same way might bring to mind some sort of ritual murder.

With all the information and possible continuance links given I'm not sure how much more is needed to give ideas.

Also as I mentioned what I wrote doesn't have to be the beginning it could be nearer to the end of the story. Why not go back and write about something seemingly unrelated and see if others can link it up? Part of the point of doing this sort of story writing activity is to challenge others to write something good.
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a body that was bathing in unspeakable gore. the fluids, yes the fluids from a ripped out abdomen is pouring out an indistinguishable mixture decaying guts and blood that seems to be blended together in some kitchen appliance. Witnessing this horror, Eri isn't terrified, not even a twitch. He thought it bluntly and realized that the dream haunting him for a month is now right in his own face... Eri stepped back, confused thinking that is just a wild coincidence or is he really connected to it somehow..

Eri looked at the corpse for a minute and recognized a mark on the hand. A tattoo of chinese character of a tiger "hu". he knew that he saw this mark from elsewhere other than his reoccurring dream but somewhere in his past, but he never seem to remember. An old acquaintance of my Dad or a beer buddy of my brother... Eri kept repeating to himself. Then it hit him, a memory of the past accident that he had. An accident that has been a puzzle for him ever since.
He only remember an empty bridge with a man of tall stature wearing white suit holding a lance. This guy threw the lance at him and for sure it him, Eri fell unconscious. When he came through, a man was sitting by his side laying his hand on Eri's chest. his hand was glowing and its warmth brought Eri back to life. Eri then was still out of it and fell unconscious again but the only thing he can remember is that tattoo.

Eri is now terrified, he shivers right down to the spine. confused on how he was connected to this event, he ran frantically out of the alley forgetting everything what he came there to do. he ran and ran, and at the street post, he stopped and caught his breath. a voice suddenly spikes goosebumps through his body.it sound as if it was from a dry throat of an old hermit who was stuck inside a well for years. Eri twitched and looked around him but nobody was around. what makes him more scared is that the voice said " Can you escape death? can you escape me? "

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The buzz of the crowd of curious and mildly horrified onlookers didn't cease for a minute as Eri rushed back to his car hoping to put as much distance between himself and the disturbing corpse as was physically possible. The bright sun seemed to have disappeared suddenly, the entire scene becoming dark and foreboding. Even as he had turned away the alleyway had become a dark and ominous hole. Like a gapping mouth even those behind the police tap which cordoned of the area seemed to have been swallowed by the darkness.
He didn't know what he was going to tell his editor, he hadn't managed to find out anything not even speaking to a single policeman or member of the crowd. Where had that terrible voice come from? It didn't seem as though anyone there had even noticed his arrival. Shoving his key in the ignition, Eri was just starting his car when something caught his attention from the corner of his eye. From the corner of the alleyway a dark shadow seemed to be sliding along the wall. Thinking it was probably just the shadow of some cloud passing overhead, Eri turned the key in the ignition and started his car.
Looking into his rear view mirror to make sure the road was clear he saw something that made his heart skip a beat. It he had needed to use urinate at the time he would probably have soiled himself from the sheer shock and terror or what he was seeing.
Staring back at him from the mirror was a horrific face. Bright red eyes, pasty white skin and ridiculously elongated canines, the face seemed to be smiling. It's lips were covered in a thick sticky looking red liquid, a little spilling down one side of the mouth the person or thing had gorged itself on some juicy fruit. Eri felt as though he was seeing the personification of pure evil, he was unable to tear his eyes away.
Eri just stared at that terrible face, that held him mesmerized. The lips started to move and it seemed that the man in the mirror was trying to speak. A strangely old and rasping voice was emitted from the face which looked ageless despite the terror it invoked.
"Can you escape death." the man asked, looking directly into Eri's eyes and pausing for a moment to lick the droplet of blood from the corner of his mouth. Can you escape me...again?With that the man leaned forward as if moving closer to a camera. But instead of stopping at the surface of the rear view mirror the head became distorted and began to squeeze through coming through the mirror into the real world.
Eri opened his mouth to scream but no sound came out. He had to get out of that car. Pushing the door open so hard that it also came back and smashed into him as he lept out, Eri rushed back towards the alleyway. He needed to get a policeman over there quickly. Whatever the hell that thing was, must be out for his blood.
Stopping short as he ran round the back of his car and onto the pavement facing the alleyway, Eri felt his bowels loosen and excrement he didn't even know was inside him came sluttering out into his underpants.
The corpse, the corpse with it's innards ripped out was standing right in front of him completely naked amongst a sea of bodies that must have been the police and everyone that had been at the scene.
Unable to comprehend, unable to decide what he should do, Eri did the only thing he could do. He fainted.


In the bedroom of his apartment Eri woke up. It was 2 o'clock in the morning and everything was completely dark. What the hell was that dream he thought as he lay in his bed, not wanting to move. It had been so realistic, he was almost sure it was real this time.
Knowing that he probably wouldn't be able to get back to sleep, Eri got up and decided to have breakfast. He was fed up of looking like utter crap everyday. Maybe if he actually got himself organized he could get a woman. He was just about to open the door and head down the hall to the bathroom when he heard a loud crash coming from the direction of the kitchen and a burst of what sounded like a man swearing.
Who the hell was in his apartment. Don't tell me I'm being robbed he moaned silently to himself, that's all I need.
Tip toeing back to his bed Eri felt around until his hand rested on the handle of his bedside draw. Pulling open the drawer he took out the only thing it contained. A small handgun. Making his way silently back to the bedroom door, Eri opened it as quietly as he could and slide out into the hall. He made his way cautiously towards the kitchen. Luckily for him his living room and kitchen were open plan and the door of the living room had been left open. He was able to sneak in, and get close to the intruder who seemed to be eating his food and was totally unaware of the approach of his soon to be captor.
Eri raised the gun "Alright turn around slowly." he screamed meaning to sound brave but sounding like a frightened school boy instead. He wasn't sure what to do or say in this situation.
The man began to turn, moving slowly just as he had been ordered to do. As he turned Eri felt as though he as back in his nightmare. It couldn't be. He must still be dreaming. He raised one foot and stamped on his own toe to wake himself up.
He didn't awake, his foot just hurt and he realised he probably had not been dreaming earlier because the corpse was standing in his house now. Eating out of his fridge and wearing his clothes.
"What the hell is going on?!" he shouted but before the previously dead man could answer Eri had shot him.

Dropping the gun, which he had never fired at a person before Eri stared on in shock as the man he had seen dead and gutted in the alleyway looked first down at the fresh bullet hole and then up at him with a vague look of annoyance on his face. "Do you mind?!." he said as he gave Eri a look of utter disgust. "I've only just healed myself."

That was how Eridanos met Chemos.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chemosh


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Eridanos: Main character (for the time being)
Ellal: Main Antagonist -- According to my research Ellal is evil personified, the character should be based on that. (Man in the mirror). Has a split personality. When he's good he's very good but when he's bad he's horrid.
Chemos: Demon but not outrightly evil for the time being.
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Chemos, a man wearing a beige silk coat and blue undershirt is now covered with blood gushing out of his right shoulder from that bullet wound. The same man with the innards cut of and dazzling blue eyes is now standing in front of Eri's eyes. Eri froze up like a day old bread left at the table counter, he blew off such emotionless face and obviously a numb freezing body to the bones. It was precious!! Eri's dumbshot reaction from what he said earlier made Chemos smile and burst into laughter.

" I've just healed myself and now a bullet wound!? Aw man! you don't how to give a guy a break do you?!" Chemos sarcastically said smiling

Eri's auditory nerves sends signals to his brains and slaps him back to reality from where his mind has wandered off. Eri reaffirms his awake and try to utter words but it seems his tongue muscles are still frozen up from the shock rendering him speechless. Chemos then grasps his right shoulder with his hand and it started to glow. It was the same hands that Eri saw from his incident. Eri was still struck dumb from what is he seeing right now. Tissues and flesh and blood and bone started to reconstruct as if the bullet wasn't there in the first place. The tattoo swirled around Eri's head and confirms it, he was the same man from long ago.

A cool breeze entered the dining room from the kitchen window and though Eri is in his boxers, the cool wind wasn't enough to send chills to Eri's already frozen up body. Chemos had already finished fixing himself and walked towards Eri and patted his arm as though he was waking him up. Eri just stared at Chemos and now shocked how real the man is. Eri is now awake and felt the wind was cold, he put on a shirt and pants and closed the windows. Eri now entertained the intruder as a guest and offered him to sit and explain the how, the why, the what and the who questions.

" I'd better tell a story first before i tell why am i here." Chemos answered

Chemos started his tale and Eri eagerly listened. His tale was of the old and dark ages. The time in which seeing a gutted person's abdomen was daysight and people's heads are auctioned off in shopping spree. warlocks and witches are a formidable occupation at that time. the time that wasn't recorded in history.

" Actually, Chrono the father of time, ripped out of the timeline and threw it at a limbo or something..." Chemos said as though it was a half joke

Eri frowned and clutches his mouth with his hand trying his best to understand. Chemos continues his tale. It was a time that the power of the dark are strong and rampant. beings of unspeakable horror and terror flooded the land with the blood of innocents which they bluntly kill for fun. Demons as such were free to roam the land of the living due to the fabric between the realm of the damned and the land of the living was thinning, Hell was breaking loose..
All of these happen due to Lucifer's weakening state. One of Lucifer's power was to keep the demons in Hell but at that time it seems to be leaking out of him. As you know, Lucifer had to keep the balance else the Golden City in the Sky would erase him from existence itself. Many had intentions to slay Lucifer and takeover his power , but there was one true evil that nearly succeeded him and the utter destruction of the world would've come true. To prevent the coming armageddon, the Order of Holies sent out a group of paladins to hell and help Lucifer regain his strength up.

" You're father was one of the paladins that marched down to hell and I was a lieutenant of Lucifer that time and guarded him."

The one true evil was about to slay Lord of Hell on his knees and takeover the power but a paladin shielded Lucifer and drove the one true evil away from hell.

" You're father was the Divine Inquisitor, the Champion of Paladins and more importantly he saved Lucifer"

Eri's father healed and revitalized Lucifer back to his old self and thus the fabric was brought back to normal, but the events have transpired and lives have been lost, even though Lucifer got his power back they cannot be undone. Then the Lord of the Underworld fortified the fabric to a more tangible lock. He made sure that if his power were to weaken again the fabric won't be affected. Chono appeared in the Underworld due to Lucifer's summoning, and asked a request...

" Turn back time and take us with you, to prevent the former me from weakening..."

Chrono wasn't against it neither he was with it but he just let history give the answer. Chrono then envelops us in a sphere and we watched everything outside moved ridiculously backwards in fast speed. We move a century back and thus the whole dark ages was erased from history and remained a myth, Lucifer's power never waned. Lucifer then opens the gates and sent back the champion among the living but before he did that he asked Chrono another request;

" Champion take this as my parting gift.." Lucifer passed down the power, the key to the fabric, within the champion's blood,
" I don't want to be burdened with such power anymore.. take it." Lucifer ordered

Chrono then hid your father somewhere in time at Lucifer's request and fortunately it was this era. Chemos speaking

Eri struck dumb on what he heard, he started to scratch his head as if it were ambiguously for him to comprehend.
both anxious and curious on what does it have to do about him since his father died already not to long ago

" Then... Why are you here? " Eri asked in confusion
" Ahh yes, I'm here to warn you." Chemos smiled answering
" Warn me about what?! " Eri exclaimed
Chemos replied saying
" The one true evil is coming after you... He's after your father's blood.."



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