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Posted 3/10/08 , edited 3/12/08
note: I do not own the characters (if only I wish )

hope you all enjoy...


sakura: 17 yrs. old
syaoran:19 yrs. old
tomoyo: 18 yrs. old
eriol: 19 yrs. old

CHAPTER 1: the unforgettable past
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"please syaoran!" tomoyo shouted, syaoran stop "are you just going to leave sakura?" tomoyo added

"sakura is a strong person" syaoran reply, but before syoaran could walk away, he froze
"sakura" tomoyo said, sakura embrace syaoran tight, not wanting to let go. they were in a long silence and sakura's tears showed.

"syaoran, please why?" sakura whispered "SYAORAN ANSWER ME!" she shouted

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"sakura! sakura! sakura wake up!"
"what?"
"you were having a nightmare again" it was touya, sakura's big brother
" a nightmare?" she replied
touya sigh "you better dress up, tomoyo is here"
"Oh my God!" sakura screech

later, sakura and tomoyo were walking in the park

"don't you think its a sign?" tomoyo said
"what sign?" sakura asked
"you'd been dreaming about the past, maybe its a sign that syaoran is finally going back home here"
"I don't care anymore about the past and especially syaoran" sakura said with a voice of denial
"but what if he showed up"
"that would be none of my business" sakura said with an angry voice

"OUCH" sakura bump into someone
"HEY, WATCH IT!" sakura shouted
"I'm so sorry, are you alright" the young man asked

he was good looking and he was wearing a strange clothing

"what do-" sakura was halted when tomoyo "we were sorry also, my friend here is a little hot today and-"

"you don't need to apologize, my name is eriol" eriol introduce himself

"nice to meet you, my name is tomoyo and my friend here is sakura"

"I'm sorry, I guess i was a little to hot" sakura apologize

eriol smile

"hey eriol! what's going on?"

sakura and tomoyo heard a young man's voice

"nothing really, just meeting new friends" eriol replied "let me introduce you to them"

the young man showed himself

"syoaran!" tomoyo and sakura sid in unison, they were both surprise and also with syoaran

"you know them syaoran?" eriol asked



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to be continue...

my first ever fanfic....
I'm really sorry, I'm not really good in english and I guess I've got of wrong grammar here

so what do you think? just reply and tell me any comments or any suggestion for me to continue the story..

I'm also sorry if its too short
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Posted 3/10/08

angel_prophecy wrote:

note: I do not own the characters (if only I wish )

hope you all enjoy...


sakura: 17 yrs. old
syaoran:19 yrs. old
tomoyo: 18 yrs. old
eriol: 19 yrs. old


------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------"
"please syaoran!" tomoyo shouted, syaoran stop "are you just going to leave sakura?" tomoyo added

"sakura is a strong person" syaoran reply, but before syoaran could walk away, he froze
"sakura" tomoyo said, sakura embrace syaoran tight, not wanting to let go. they were in a long silence and sakura's tears showed.

"syaoran, please why?" sakura whispered "SYAORAN ANSWER ME!" she shouted

--------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------

"sakura! sakura! sakura wake up!"
"what?"
"you were having a nightmare again" it was touya, sakura's big brother
" a nightmare?" she replied
touya sigh "you better dress up, tomoyo is here"
"Oh my God!" sakura screech

later, sakura and tomoyo were walking in the park

"don't you think its a sign?" tomoyo said
"what sign?" sakura asked
"you'd been dreaming about the past, maybe its a sign that syaoran is finally going back home here"
"I don't care anymore about the past and especially syaoran" sakura sid with a voice of denial
"but what if he showed up"
"that would be none of my business" sakura said with an angry voice

"OUCH" sakura bump into someone
"HEY, WATCH IT!" sakura shouted
"I'm so sorry, are you alright" the young man asked

he was good looking and he was wearing a strange clothing

"what do-" sakura was halted when tomoyo "we were sorry also, my friend here is a little hot today and-"

"you don't need to apologize, my name is eriol" eriol introduce himself

"nice to meet you, my name is tomoyo and my friend here is sakura"

"I'm sorry, I guess i was a little to hot" sakura apologize

eriol smile

"hey eriol! what's going on?"

sakura and tomoyo heard a young man's voice

"nothing really, just meeting new friends" eriol replied "let me introduce you to them"

the young man showed himself

"syoaran!" tomoyo and sakura sid in unison, they were both surprise and also with syoaran

"you know them syaoran?" eriol asked



------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
to be continue...

my first ever fanfic....
I'm really sorry, I'm not really good in english and I guess I've got of wrong grammar here

so what do you think? just reply and tell me any comments or any suggestion for me to continue the story..

I'm also sorry if its too short


Its so nice
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Posted 3/14/08
its a good story ^_^, keep up the good work
Posted 3/17/08
it sounds good =)
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