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Is this a good anime storyline?? My original... Plz read
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Posted 3/14/08
missing something... thinking to short of action more dialoge something missing umm exmample like not just action but the surroundings to describe the story a little bit better
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32 / F / under Haruka's be...
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Posted 3/15/08
I think it's pretty good! ^-^
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Posted 3/15/08
You should give out the part 2.
It's making me feel that feeling when waiting the latest episode of an anime.
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29 / M / In the "Throne of...
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Posted 4/10/08

sakuraLsasuke wrote:

need more suspense


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Posted 12/21/09
I'm moving this to fan fiction.
Posted 12/21/09
It needs less descriptions of the characters, lacks in a good storyline as it has almost no speaking and the story doesn't develop well. I found it troubling that one of the main characters was near death for 3 times just in the few lines you wrote. The shadow uber scythe guy, lessen him, really. You don't want a kind of shadows and wolves and whatever you think of next to be all in one character, it feels like "Yeah, he is the abnormal super guy who will bring the story to the end. In overall, I liked the wolves part, but that's because I like wolves... Good job.
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Posted 12/22/09
It's good as a story and I can imagine some of it but the end is kinnda confusing to me...Iwould of wanted him to get away from the danger whitout help...
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23 / F / Canadabada
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Posted 3/11/10
I don't get it. What's the storyline? Where's the plot? I don't care how your characters look, I want to know why/what you're writing.
Posted 5/31/10
wow cool, its sounds good on words and you can continue in an interesting way. But in manga if it carries on like that it might get boring. you'll hav to make it interesting. but its really good.
you can do things like, 'someone woke from his dream or something and all is related to some cool, cutting stroies like yours', etc

but don't do whatever i told you, do what ever you like
a fantastic opening
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