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ahahahaha X*D omg the dog story xD a bit sad when you read it through carefully T_T (I mean the second post, and the third is just funny XD)
Posted 7/27/09
aw. just when i was in the mood to crit someone so badly it`d be nothing but fail, i has no story above me -_-' no rankings, lucky eh.

i`ll half ass a story now

a girl who has been punished by her parents into living alone, mostly because she`s shy and inexperienced and they wish for her to become independent in a rather harsh way without thinking how she`d feel, they dump her at a vacant apartment they own. she lives in isolation, is naturally beautiful but covers up all of her beauty and whatever that makes her a woman, including her hair only leaving her face. she rescues one of her male classmates from a fatal gang fight and takes care of him. during his stay, he likes her only as a friend, until he sees her true feminine beauty etc etc

ahhhhhhhhhh cliche crap. i`d written some kind of story like that for my english language assignment. -_-' it turned out good, this totally ruined the essence.
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Anime name : Adventure Formula

Once upon a time there was a boy not just any ordinary boy a boy who was looking for adventure. on his way to "adventure" he met a very strange person along the way he was very powerful and mighty helpful so he tagged along as they leave they're boring Village Kakasi they follow in a deep forest with strange monsters the boy finds a blade picks it up and swings the strange person is too strong for the boy and and says he needs work he leaves him in the forest all alone for him to survive the boy didn't know what he felt scared sad or lonely so.. something worse happens a terrible meteor comes hitting the sky! he goes running away from it but hes too late it hits and something glowing appears he searches the area and finds a little creature.. his adventure starts a bigger one later he finds the strange person and says aww you haven't got stronger i see ill make that happen tehee.. and that's the story of.. The boy: Goshi Strange person: Bakul and Little Creature : Jilisk

Episdoe 1 :Adventure or Terror
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i Hope u like it
this is my story called: Rock Angels enjoy


“Mom… no mom we just got to see each other. I don’t want to part… wait who are you. No get back I don’t want a kiss… what a gun, no… no get back AHHHHHHH!”
I am 14 years old; my mom died giving birth to me. My dad works all the time (From 6:30 A.M. to 9:30 P.M.) I have no friends and moved to Japan 2 months ago. My name is Brianna. I am 4 foot 3 shortest in my school. My hair is light brown and it goes to my ankles. I have a great singing voice but I am too scared to share it. I have a boring life. The boy of my dreams is Top Class Train age 15. His hair is short aqua blue, 5 foot 5, smartest and strongest boy in our school. But I don't think he knows I’m alive. The top girls in my class are Tess; 14 years of age, second biggest boobs in school, 5 foot 2, best painter in school, awesome on the drums, middle neck fire red hair; and her twin sister Ally; 14 years of age, biggest boobs in school, 6 foot 3, best gymnast in school, prefect on guitar, middle back brick red hair. One day I was walking home from school alone when it started pelting rain. I ran as fast as I could the nearest tree. That’s when Train walked by with an umbrella. “Do you need help walking home in this rain, Brianna?” he asked his voice like an angel. “If you have the time” my voice a whisper. We walked, in silence, under the umbrella, looking like a couple, all the 5 blocks to my home "Thank you” was all I said as I ran inside. My heart almost burst out of my crest. Not only does he know I was alive he also knows my name. As I somehow walked up the stairs I heard "Please run to Star Watchers Park" I jumped then looked around. No one inside, no TV on, no one outside. Then I heard it again “Please run to Star Watchers Park”. I know where the park was and it stopped raining so I ran as fast as I could to the park. There I saw Tess and Ally waiting for something to happen hunched over trying to chase they breath. They saw my and rushed over to me. “Did you ...hear that... voice...too?" Tess said out of breath. I nodded then there was a flash of light. Out of nowhere a beautiful women with pink short hair in a long white gown came to us flying with her feathered angel wings and said "I am Sarah and I am God” stunned all we could do was stare at her. Then she gave us each a magician hat. Mine was pink with a white stripe, Tess had white with a black stripe hat and Ally had a black with pink stripe hat. Then she was gone. We heard a wicked laugh the made my skin craw from behind us. We all turned around to see a handsome man with long, shoulder length, midnight blue hair and was about 6 foot 5 by the looks of him “Well I guess I know who our biggest threat is 3 little girls. But you with the brown hair…” black puff of smoke he was gone the behind me holding me whispering close to my ear “Your pretty cute for a brat” He turned me around, bend down and gave me kiss on lips. I tried to pull away but he was to strong. In mere seconds of seeing him he was kissing! He loosened his grip just long enough that I could escape. “Who...Who are you?” Tess demeaned an answer because she saw I was at a lost of words. “I am Clint. I was sent by my lord to see and destroy our greatest threat but I guess there is none.” He laughed so hard I though he was going to fall over. Sarah voice told us “You must fight him.” “What? How, we’re just normal teenage girls and you want us to fight him?” Ally said a little too loud. “You…You have to fight me? Is that what your peruse god wants you to do?” This time he was in tears as if he had heard the world’s funniest joke. “Please you must. The world depends on you. Please just hold your hats out in front of you with the opening facing the sky hurry.”We all did at the same time.” Good now raise your other hand straight up to the heavens and say ‘Its Show Time!’ Hurry” we held our hands up and said “It’s show Time!” Flash of pink and I was seeing music notes fly around and like a second nature I was flip and turning around the notes till I said “Fighter for God, Pink Rose!” Tess was painting on her outfit with a few spins and twirls. She came out and said “Fighter for God, White Rose!” Ally had her gymnast ribbon rapping it around herself and doing cart wheels. “Fighter for God, Black Rose!” “Together we are the Rock Angels! We are at earth’s service to protect and fight for it. We are here to keep demons and devils like you off our beautiful Earth!” We stood there. I saw our uniforms where top of the shin length, elbow shelve length, gloves with the finger holes cut out, rose vines raped around our legs with pink roses for me, white for Tess, and black for Ally and our hats were floating like halos above our heads. All our dress were white with white bows at our chests and our color rose. I rubbed my eyes to see if it were true then I felt like I was flying. I looked behind me and saw a pair of huge feathered white angel wings on my back. “So I guess you are our threat. To bad I would have love to have made you my bride, Brianna, *sigh* oh well. Demons of the darkness hear my calls; help me make these angels fall, fall, FALL!” Clint’s chant hade brought a rumble to the ground and a monster red and blobby come out. It kept saying “Kwimoshm” so I guess that was its name. “Please Brianna, Tess and Ally each of you do the first thing that comes to your mind.” I saw in my head myself taking off my hat holding it opening facing up and twirling three times while I said ‘one, two, three!’ each time I twirled. I opened my eyes to see I was flying with Tess, playing on a floating drum set, and Ally, playing on a guitar. I was holding a mic and I could feel my throat getting ready to sing.
“Today was the worst day I went through hell, I wish I could remove it from my mind, Two months away from you but I couldn’t tell, I thought that everything was gonna be just fine, The postcard that you wrote, with a stupid little note, It smelt like cheap perfume, and it didn’t smell like you, There is no way you could get around it, Because you wrote,
I wish you were her, You left out the E, You left without me, And now you’re somewhere out there with a, Hey hey psycho babe, hate you why are you guys so lame, Everything I gave you, I want everything back but you,
My friends tried to tell me all along, That you weren’t the right one for me, My friends tried to tell me to be strong, I bet you didn’t think I would see, The postcard that you wrote, with a stupid little note, Something wasn’t quiet right about it, I want to see you cry like I did a thousand times, Now you’re losing me now, Because you wrote
I wish you were her, You left out the E, You left without me, And now you’re somewhere out there with a, Hey hey psycho babe, hate you why are you guys so lame, Everything I gave you, I want everything back but you,
The postcard that you wrote, with a stupid little note, It smelt like cheap perfume, and it didn’t smell like you, There is no way you could get around it, Because you wrote,
I wish you were her, You left out the E, You left without me, And now you’re somewhere out there with a, Hey hey psycho babe, hate you why are you guys so lame, Everything I gave you, I want everything back but you,
I wish you were her, You left out the E, You left without me, And now you’re somewhere out there with a, Hey hey psycho babe, hate you why are you guys so lame, Everything I gave you, I want everything back but you”
In the middle of the song Kwimoshm melted away and Clint was screaming in pain. I swear I heard him say “This isn’t over. You hear me! This isn’t over Rock angels.” Then another puff of black smoke and he was gone. “Did…did we just do that?” Ally questioned “Yes and I am proud of you all. I will entrust earths protection in your hands. To help you get along someone is waiting at your homes to meet you. Good luck and remember I will be over you the whole time. Thank you.” “W…wait. How do we change back to normal? And how do we save the earth, do we just sing to fight or is there more?” Tess said them all too fast for me hear. I had a million questions running through my mind and wanted an answer to just one ‘how do we save the world?’ “Just think of your normal body and you will be back to normal. Thank you so much again. Good bye.” Flash of white and she was gone again. We all stared at the place she had been then Tess had changed back. “I…I’m normal again.” Tess was still amazed by what had happen just like the rest of us. Ally was next she was back to her normal self. I thought of my normal self was last to change back. “I don’t believe that was real but it was.” Ally was at a lose of words and turned to me. “I think you have an amazing singing voice, Brianna. And I think we should hang out more don’t you?” I was happy that I finally had friends. “Okay. Let’s have lunch tomorrow at school together.” “Good bye. See you at school tomorrow.” Tess said with a sparkle in her voice as she started ran home with her sister hats in hand. As I walked home after all that happened that day I was wondering what that person was and what they would look like when I get home. So I ran as fast as my short legs could carry me all 17 blocks home. And up the stairs and sitting on my bed was a small, like 5 inches tall, was a little girl with dark red eyes, short light gray hair, white angel wings and was wearing a cameo top and a pair of black jeans. She saw me flew up to me and said “Hello Brianna, I am Hannah and I am here to help you with your new mission. Just if you wanted to know I am the opposite of you because I am sporty, a tomboy and outgoing fighting sprit. Please ask me any questions you have about your new life and I will answer them the best I can okay? Oh one more thing I can sense when devils and demons are near.” “It’s nice to meet you Hannah and I was wondering what do I do with you while I am at school?” I asked because I thought it would be rude to leave her alone for 6 hours Monday to Friday. What if Clint attacked while I was at school? “Only you, Tess and Ally can see us so you can bring me to school. I think you should get some rest you have had an amazing day so good night” she yawned as she went to my old doll house and made herself at home. “Good night” I said as I drifted of to sleep.

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here is another story please enjoy
It is called: Demon School


In the small town of Rosario there was a school, but it was no ordinary school it was a school of humans and of … demons.





“Hannah, Alex, Treyanna! Good Moring how are you? I missed you all so much this past year. I had so much fun living with him and he said he loved me and I love Tra…” I want to rewind the story so you better understand it. Hi I am Julianna Williams. I am 5 foot 5, love to eat and love twilight, anime, and manga, I have short light brown hair and I am in the 7th grade. I will tell you a story of love, hate, betral, and of losing your way and being found.
One day as I was walking down the same sidewalk, I always see the same car leave the same driveway. I walked to school on that one gloomy day in March in the small town of Rosario. Everyday I see Jalato the orange, black and white cat and say hello to her. Every time I enter the school fence I say I am entering prison than I raced to the class to see my 3 best friends in class. “Hi you guys. Whatz up Alex, Hannah, and Treyanna?” “Finally you came. You are always late. If I had to walk as far as you I would be here soooo much earlier than you.” This is Treyanna a “prefect at everything she does” girl, is probably 4 foot 8 has short Blondie hair and loves the color pink. “Treyanna you don’t even now how far see has to walk.” And this nice friend is Alex Ages she maybe 4 foot 9½, is a bookworm like she reads at inhuman speed and has short curly brown hair. “Alex that’s mean but true, now I will make I face no one has not laughed at.” And this other funny friend is Hannah Gammon she is 5 foot 3½ and has dirty Blondie hair to her shoulders but she usually has it up but she looks good with it down. “Sorry but I woke up late because I wanted to sleep in then I saw it was gloomy out side and I was so happy so I hurried here.” The bell rang and Treyanna ran back to her class across the hall. “Bye see you guys at lunch, ok?” And she was gone. “Ok class today is the day you all have been waiting for.” Mr. White said and everyone was a buzz talking about the day. “Hannah, Alex what’s happening today?” I asked since I haven’t been here at the beginning of the year. “That’s right you don’t know. Well, at the school every year on a gloomy day like today the night kids come and are put into random classes and then the pick what kid they want to have stay at their house for a year.” “WWWWWWWWWWWWWhat, a year with someone you don’t know!!!!!!” I yelled. “Yes that’s right Julianna and in a few minutes their will be coming so be on your best behavior” Mr. White said from behind me. “Yes sir, sorry sir.” I felt my face getting hot as people in the class laughed at me. “Mr. White here are the night class students staying with you and your class for the day.” Some one had never seen before was bringing them to our class. “Ok class lets start the lessons for the day.” Mr. White tried to quite them when I looked back to see them and they were all inhumanly beautiful and one of the boys, who looked like a 8th grader with dark red eyes and black hair with Deep red on the tips, on his head, looked at me and smiled. I turned blushing then tried to listen to the teacher. “Ok class, have a fun recess.” As I went to my locker to get my snack a few girls from the night class came up to me and leader of the pack said, “You think that you can steal the prince from us? We will crush you!” Wha...what are they talking about? Do they mean the boy who smiled at me? “I have no clue what you’re talking about but I don’t care you Ugly, Old HAGS!” I pulled my lower eye lids down and stuck my tongue out at them. They all gasped and one boy from the night kids laughed at them. “Your really funny.” He said after he was done laughing. He had long brown hair in every direction and dark eyes that looked black. “My name is Mike. It’s nice to me you.” “Hi I am Julianna and these are my friends Alex, Treyanna and Hannah. It’s nice to meet you too.” I look at everyone and smiled. This is great I already have a friend in the night and I think Hannah likes him ‘cause she’s blushing. At recess we hanged around talk and laughed. “There’s the bell let’s go guys.” Alex was happy because we had dance class for some reason. “Ok, everyone the night class students will be joining us for gym today so please help them if they need help.” “Ok!” Everyone was happy for dance for some reason but me so weird. In the change room the “Prince Groupies” Were looking and glaring at me and my friends. “Ok, today we are dancing the mambo N. 5 so let’s go over the steps for those who still don’t get it.” The music started and we danced, loved it so much Hannah was letting the song flow through her and mike was noticing. “OK, get changed and head back to class for lunch. “Yes sir.” “Alex you looked all stiff when you were dancing and you were having no fun” Treyanna as bossy and mean as ever.” “But I was having fun, right Yukki?” Yukki (Yukki in English means princess) is a girl in 6th grade from the night class she has light red hair with dark blue eyes who loves to read like Alex and is going to take Alex for the year. “Yes, you were.” “Alright that’s too much talking. Let’s Go Eat LUNCH!!!” Everyone laughed but they all hurried. “Let’s eat.” As we ate Hannah was getting closing to Mike and the same with Mike. They look so cute together. As we ate the boy from earlier came up to me and asked “May I have lunch with you?” His voice was like a god so sweet but it sounded lonely. “Sure! My name is Julianna it’s nice to meet you.” He was very nice. “Thank you, my name is Train. Please excuse the girls from earlier.” We laughed and talked till lunch break. “Remember class, that it’s a half day today and the assembly is after lunch. The school has told your parents and they are packing for you. Have a fun recess.” Mr. White left for his lunch. “I can’t wait till after lunch. Hannah I think I know whose going to pick you.” Her face got all red “Shut up. I know whose going to pick you.” Her eyes went to Train. “Ok, fine I’m sorry Hannah.” 5 minutes later the bell rang and we headed to class than straight to the gym. “Students the night class students will be called by grade to pick you starting with eight grade.” After about ten people Train went up to the mic. And said “Julianna Williams Mr. white’s grade 7 class, would like to stay with me for a year?” Everyone in my class looked at me, waiting for my answer. I walked up to him and the mic. Than answered, “Yes, I will.” The girls from the night classes all gasped and the “Prince Groupies” glared at me. After about half the 7th grade was picked Mike went up to the mic. “Yo, Hannah G. will you live with me for a year or what?” Hannah was red when she said “Yes” “That’s great” Mike wrapped his arms around Hannah necks and gave her a kiss on the cheek. “Wild!!” Some girls said from the N.C. I am guessing that he has a fan club as well. With a big goofy grin he and Hannah went to his seat. After that everyone had been called even crystal (Because the kids who didn’t pick or the kids who didn’t get picked were put into 2 different hats then picked) and it was time to go home. “Hey Hannah, everyone in the fan clubs hate us now.” All evil glaring eyes were on us and a chill went down my spine when I felt super evil glares pointing at me. “Well, that was a good show you put on Mike, very entertaining.” Hannah was getting into Mike’s car and they left for her house. “Shall we go, Julianna?” He is so polite and kind yet his voice sounds just a bit sad and his eyes look lonely. “Yes! Let’s go.” As we drove to my house I thought if my mom sees that I’m staying with a boy she won’t allow it. “Um… Train, I just thought if my mom sees you and you tell her I am staying with you for a year she won’t allow it.” “Don’t worry. My kid sister will go to meet your mom and everything will be fine ok?” “Umm hmm.” I went up to the door and mom was waiting for me. “Mom, this is Rose, she is the one I’m staying with for a year. Is that ok?” “Yes it is. I will miss you so much.” She hugged me and the driver got my bags and put them in the back, than we drove away. As we drove we went up a road to the forest I have never seen before and it went up, up and up higher into the forest then we stopped. “I am sorry but, we have to walk from here. The driver has a cart to take your luggage so don’t worry.” Train looked at me and gave me that awesome smile. “Umm Hmm” I nodded then we went down the stone path to a huge mansion on a hill in the middle of all the trees. As he opened the maids all lined up on both sides and said, “Welcome home, sir.” “Welcome to your new home.”
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You're my favorite poster in the forum as of now. That was beautiful.
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This is a story I wrote my self, and one of my friend started to helped me, correcting my errors and help me making original sentences

you can read the story there:

www.crunchyroll.com/user/vinette/pages/Sreizer

I edit it Each time I add a good part to it on word

There will almost always be another part added to it each day... almost each day... I accept any comment that would help me get an idea about my story
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I can give it a 8, because my attention span doesnt let me read the whole thing. I like the style of writing, but sometimes I wonder things like "i said" or "he asked me".

For suggestions, I dont have many, but if there are only 2-3 people that are talking, readers can guess who is saying what, so in some situations, you can say stuff like



...and in this situation there are 3 people. 1 is a suited man, another is a main character, and the last is the girl. Since the main character is the only one talking in this exerpt, you can tell that the next person to talk is probably going to be the man right? So i was able to show that the main character was the person that was talking without using I said, I replied, etc.

Of course, you dont need to follow what I said.

Anyway, good luck with your story.
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Well, I can't thank you enough for the advices. I really like being helped in any ways. So, I'll try to make it more interesting, too.

But, really, thank you!
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No problem.

"An artist can only be called an artist when someone accepts it"

I would rate the other few hundred stories, but my eyes would be...out of order by 144.
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I have characters that i draw and as soon as i get my scanner up and running again i'll post pics. of them, but ill tell you about them and give you a little back history.

Chi-Chi
Age: 15
Sex: F
Type: Neko, um for those who don't know, a neko character is part cat but mines never have fur just ears and tails. [[mostly becaise i suck at fur :sweatingbullets:]]
Sexual orrientation: Unknown, she is unsure, so i guess you could call her bi?
Characteristics: Strong willed, Stuborn, Does what she wants when she wants, dense, i guess she's kinda slow.....
Story: Im still thinking of her story, but.....
She is not human or part human as a matter a fact...

Hitsharu
Age: 17
Sex: M
Type: Just a normal human i guess.
Sexual orrientation: Straight but, comeon it wouldnt be fun with out a few gay thougts every now and again <3
Characteristics: Mysterious, a "ladies man", homophobic, caring, sweet, noisey??
Story: His mom kicked him out hen he was 15 and now he works and a Bakery as a waiter...Ho do him and Chi-Chi fit together? Well i guess you'll just have to find out :P

More Character info coming soon. Check my profile and add me! tell me about your characters! We can act them out <3 Oh and PLEASE any yaoi fans contact me!!!!!!!!!!!! I'd love to put our characters together and make a yaoi!!!!!

Edit:

Oh uhhh i forgot the link to my page
so uh yeaaaaaaa : http://www.crunchyroll.com/user/Chibi_fanatic7896

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Story Princess


I was just a normal girl reading books to little kids in my little town, than the stories happen to me.





“Ryan! Look out, behind you. Ryan NOOOOO!!!!” I guess I’m on my own for now on. What is this… tears, but I must keep fighting. “Sorry but you all have to wait for tomorrow for the ending.” “No Fair! Please keep reading Miss. Madison.” The kids at the orphanage are always like this when I read to them. “Sorry I have to go but, I promise to be here by 6 to read the ending to you all ok?” As I left for home on my skateboard I saw that a new girl about 6 or 7 with sliver, curly hair and big red eyes was entering the orphanage and meeting Mrs. Paterson. As I rode passed the mirror shop I saw the same old 14 year old me with short boy cut brown hair with a red stripe (Because a red stripe in your hair means you have a boyfriend, but I use it to keep away the guys), hazel eyes with my camo top and blue old jeans. When I got home to our little house on the hill that over looked the ocean and town, “I’m home everyone.” “Madison, good can you put the Jake and Emma to sleep then you can have your dinner ok.” “Come on guys. I’ll read you a story ok then you have to go to sleep.” “Sis, can you read the little mermaid to us.” Emma and Jake love that story “ok, in the blue ocean there lived a mermaid… and she and the prince lived happily ever after the end. Good night Jake, Emma.” I tiptoed out and went down stairs to eat tonight is my favorite chicken stir fry with white rice. “Mom is my dinner ready?” When I got to the kitchen my food was done but mom…mom was... There was blood ever where and I went to see if mom was still alive. “Mom…mom, please your ok right? You can still live right. MMOOOMM!!!” With mom gone and dad had left a long time ago me, Jake and Emma were put into the orphanage the next day. “I’m so sorry to hear about your mother, Madison. But the kids will be happy that you’re here.” Mrs. Paterson always looks at the bright side of things. We still go to the same school and go to the house in a week and get the stuff we need and can go back and live when I turn 16. “Jake and Emma are going to have a hard time to adjust, so can you tell the kids to give them some room for a few days?” “Oh, yes. I will so don’t worry about it.” Mrs. Paterson is always so nice. “Ok, everyone. Who wants to finish yesterday’s story then starts a new?” “YYAAYY!!!” “OK… and Ann and Ryan lived together and fought for the king and queen. Ok, what story should we read next?” “Can Sarah pick? She came yesterday when you left.” She got up and went to the book shelf, came back and gave me ‘Magic Life’. “Ok here we go. There once lived a princess in a magical world. She lived a happy, normal witch life until one day, on her sixteenth birthday; an evil wizard came and put a spell on her. The spell sent her to our world, turned her into a doll, made it so she couldn’t use magic and to turn back to normal she has to meet the prefect man for her and get a kiss from him. When she was in the human world she was sent to a mountain ‘Where am I? What’s with this outfit?” She was dressed in a black dress with sliver bows with a top hat and sliver shoes. She ventured down the mountain and when it got close to night she found a little ditch to sleep in. In the Moring she woke and found that she was being carried by a boy with brown hair, with a pair of jeans and a long black shirt. “Can you put me down please? I can walk on my own.” The boy was amazed that what he thought was a doll was talking but he put her on the ground. “Hello, I am Princess Madison.” “Wow Miss. Madison that’s so cool that you are in the story.” I smiled and continued “From the Magical kingdom. And you are?” “My name is Ryan and I’m from Japan. Nice to meet you.” Ryan some how believed her and she told him all about the cruse and the wizard that put it on her. Then they got to near the bottom with a straight hill that went to the water. “Watch, I wouldn’t get wet.” And Ryan slipped down and got soaking wet. There were stairs and Madison was half way down when she heard an evil laugh. “Look out Madison!” Ryan yelled. “HAHAHA! So princess I came to stop you from going back.” Her eyes were filled with fear. She ran as fast as she could down the stairs and ran towards Ryan but before she got to him the wizard came in front of her. “Good bye, Princess forever.” He charged a magic energy ball and was getting ready to fire. Ryan ran to her, grabbed her and dogged the attack just in time. “So it looks like you meet a friend on the way. I guess I’ll get rid of him first.” The evil wizard was going to kill Ryan! “Hey, Madison, I love you” Ryan said before he kissed her. Madison had turned back to her normal shelf. She and the wizard had a huge battle but she won. The royal guard found her after that, Ryan went with her to the Magical World and they got married. Then they lived happily ever after. “Yay that was great Miss. Madison!” “Thank you and thank you Sarah, for picking such a great story.” “Everyone it’s time for dinner” Mrs. Paterson made dinner, we ate then 2 hours later we went to bed. When I woke up I was in a fancy bed with a silver roses and curtains. Then there was a knock on the door, “Princess Madison please hurray or you’ll be late for you birthday party.” I got out of bed and was thinking ‘Th…there’s no way this is real. I read a story just like this to the kids at the orphanage.’ I pinched my self and Ow, I am not dreaming so I decided to go with the story. I got dressed and went out of the room then down the stairs. “Hello, Madison your friend are waiting for you in the lobby.” My mother the queen said. I went to the lobby to greet them then a black gust of wind came and it was the evil wizard. “Hello princess. Happy 16 birthday and good bye.” The wizard magic spell hit me and I changed to a doll and was sent to a different world. When I got there I was on a mountain just like the story and started to make my way down it. Half way down it was getting dark so I found the ditch and sleep there for the night. When I work up I was in Ryan’s arms as he carried me down the mountain. “Hey, can you put me down. I am capable of walking on my own.” “AHHHH! The doll talked.” “I will let you know that I am NOT a doll, I am Princess Madison of the Magical Kingdom and I’m here because an evil wizard put a curse on me. The only way the curse can be broken is by a kiss from the man I am meant to be with.” “Well, I guess anything is possible if a doll can talk, right Madison?” As we walked we talked and laughed about stupid things. Then we got to the stairs and the hill. “Hey, watch this I bet you I wouldn’t get wet when I go down this hill.” He slide straight down and got soaking wet. I laugh really hard then realized that the wizard is going to come any moment now so I rushed down the stairs but it was too late. “My my, princess you are in quite a rush there.” My eyes were filled with fear. Then I basically flow down the stairs and ran as fast as I could to Ryan, but the wizard was too quick for me. “You’re too slow princess and now its time to say good bye.” “Look out, MADISON!” Ryan ran to me, grabbed me and just missed the wizards attack. “Oh, I see you made a friend, princess. I guess I have to get rid of him first.” “Hey, you know something Madison, I love you.” Ryan then gave me a kiss and I turned back to normal right before his attack and blocked it. “So, you are back to normal. I guess I’ll have to finish you off like this.” The wizard thinks he’s going to bet me but I wouldn’t let him because I have to win for Jake, Emma and Ryan. Just by thinking about them I got a burst of energy and defeated the evil wizard then the guard came. “Princess, are you ok? I’m glad we found you and that you’re safe. It’s time to go back to the castle.” “Wait, we have to bring Ryan with us. He’s the one who turned me back and… and I love him.” The shocked guard just nodded and then transported us back to the castle where Ryan was knight and proposal. Just as I said yes I started to faded away back to my world. “Madison!” Ryan yelled and grabbed a hold of my before I went back and he came with me. When we got back we were at the cliff by my house. “Hey, Ryan? Would you mind staying in my house and look after till I’m 16?” With him there I don’t have to worry about the house or where he was going to stay. He just smiled and gave me kiss. “I will wait forever for you.” I left for the orphanage and it was 8 when I got back. “Miss. Madison where did you go? We were all worried.” “Sorry, I went to watch the sun rise. Come on let’s go have breakfast.” I rushed them in and waved good bye to Ryan. I know something weird is going to happen today. But I’m ready and waiting.
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Okay.....For now, i can give it a 7-8, only because its sort of hard to read. If you could switch it to the normal story format, i could give it a more acurate raitng.

Also, instead of just posting, can people please rate the one above them like they are supposed to?
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