rate my anime ^-^
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12 year old Haku it's just a simple adopted child who had a regular life.So on a school trip to a muesume of ancient artifacts he was planning to confess his love to this girl.He gets the courage to go up to her ,but all of the sudden and out of nowhere an explosion happen and every one begins to run. Now it turn out that the explosions were made by this monters of some sort.Well while Haku tries to run he finds out that they chasing him while trying to protect himself with artifacts from the muesume he awakes a kudan named Nogard! Now Nogard it's from a different dimension and was sent here as a result from the war that they had from his dimension.Only the master of Nogard can only be the one to awake. So with that on Nogard's mind he acts quick and kills all of the monters,not knowing that he is saving Haku.Nogard does not know why Haku was able to wake him up in the fisrt place and findsout he is in a different dimension.After he finds out he wants to return to his own dimension with his master ,but the only way to do that is to find the other five legendary kudan's.So in order to pay Nogard back for saving his life Haku will find the kudan's return him home. Oh one more thing the kudan's are sealed in a weapon use by his or her previous master and only the descendant can relaese the kudan.
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Game Section?
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pretty messy plot.. save this awaken that. this skill that skill.. hmm.. u gunna find a easier name to remember for those things.. + the characters needs work.. so does the plot..

"find the other five legendary kudans"

hmm.. he cant be all 5 of the master's descendant.. right?


Oh one more thing the kudan's are sealed in a weapon use by his or her previous master and only the descendant can relaese the kudan.


Kudan.. hmm any specific history about them?.. what can they do?.. what powers do they have?..

Edit: oh.. if its ur first try.. i'll give u 15/100, it needs more work than that.. k?
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-20 because you can't put together coherent sentences.
Posted 8/31/07
-25 cause it also would'nt work very well a an anime
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I would suggest this be added here:

Create your own Anime Story
http://www.crunchyroll.com/showforumtopic?id=2338

If not, then added to the "Creative Works" section in general.
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um. ..that's pretty much the exact plot of the first volume of Amatsuki.
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Okay, the plot already sounds kind of complicated and the characters need some work. I mean, reading it as a real anime plot, me myself really wouldn't be that interesting.
Posted 8/31/07
1 for trying. It seems boring.
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lokita wrote:

um. ..that's pretty much the exact plot of the first volume of Amatsuki.


plagiarism eh?

anyways read the first couple sentences and got bored
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kris07 wrote:

I would suggest this be added here:

Create your own Anime Story
http://www.crunchyroll.com/showforumtopic?id=2338

If not, then added to the "Creative Works" section in general.


I agree

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