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Posted 3/21/08
Abuse

She looks like an angel,
from the heavens above.
She made the wrong choice,
when it came down to love.

What made her think,
she was fine just this way?
When he tore her apart,
made her cry every day...

He tightened the grip,
on her wrist and she screams.
She just tries to wake up,
as if it were one of her dreams.

He loosens his grip,
but we know he's not done.
He won't even wait,
before he has some more fun.

"Please let me go",
she pleads to her death.
You could tell was scared,
from the shake in her breath.

He pushes her down,
to the floor where she rest.
Unconcious for hours,
blood drips from her chest.

just in a while,
when she woke up in shock.
she thought she was dreaming,
but looked at the clock.

Her parents would kill her,
she wasn't on time.
Yet he would kill her,
if she mentioned this crime.

she kept living life,
as if nothing occured.
Her vision still weak,
her grammar quite slurred.

he calls to explain,
she picks up the line.
He says "sorry,
I had a little bit of wine"

She accepts what he says,
but fails to believe,
that he still left a stain,
on the right of her sleeve.

poor little girl,
why can't you just see?
He has hurt you so badly,
you can't be set free.

So she brightens her eyes,
and she looks in his face.
"I need some time,
I need some space."

"You can't hurt me,
cause soon I'll be gone."
"You won't see my face,
after tonight at dawn."

"You never really loved me,
you weren't there on my side."
"I hope your happy,
I am going to commit suicide."
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Posted 3/22/08
please let me know wat u think
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Posted 3/23/08
That was a great poem =] i loved it but its pretty sad as well since there are some truths to it. =]
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Posted 3/24/08
thanks. Personally i can only write sad stuff sometimes.
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Posted 3/27/08
thoughtlessly I lived as ease and nature taught,
And spent my little life without a thought,
And am amazed that Death, that tyrant grim,
Should think of me, who never thought of him.

yes death is an emotion itself but is suicide more humane than murder.
is hurting someone mroe justified than causing your own pain ?

sorry dealing with loss is just as hard as loss itself
Posted 3/28/08
Wow, that was really good. I really did love it Emily :] Your great. ^^
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Posted 3/28/08
yush emmz rocks
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Posted 3/28/08
Hey great poem, very realistic. The rhyme scheme compliments the theme of the poem. Very emotional, and very true. IT sucks that ppl still stay with those who abuse them. I guess they don't have enough will power to do so. But killing herself just makes it worse. She should kill him. LOL
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Posted 3/29/08
OUCH THAT WAS AWESOME
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Posted 3/29/08
thanks it kinda came from my own expirience, but no I am still alive.
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Posted 6/15/08
i liked this poem even though it was pretty sad but suicide wouldn't ease her pain niether killing him..and trying to forget wat happened is just out of the question pain and abuse like that leaves a stain that can never be rubbed off..how sad and uncaring of this guy to blame wine rather than his own sudden whims and actions!..please do rite another poem where he gets runned over by a truck and dies a painful death bcUz he certainly deserves it more thn that helpless girl and the endind\g U just had wasn't satisfying to me (dnt get me the wrong way) i jsut want to witness this jerks death but the poem was all perfected which is realy great..
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Posted 6/20/08
thanks all 0_o
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