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Posted 3/28/08 , edited 3/28/08
I hate to show my aching
I prefer to be the rock
But inside I know I’m breaking
My façade left to mock
I’ve locked the world outside me
I’m the only one I let in
It’s a shame that no one can see
The amount of pain that I’m in
I smile on the outside
Just to make it easier for you
But deep down on the inside
I don’t know what to do
I can’t take this pain away
Not by myself at least
I try to hide my anger away
But it’s just like a beast
It tries to get loose
I try my best to hide it
But the results not what I choose
I can no longer fight it
I can no longer keep it in
I have lost, I let it win

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Posted 3/28/08
Wow Kagura I like this peice ALOT! Really kewl.
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Posted 3/29/08
wow!
this poem is amesing
Posted 3/29/08
thanx glad u guys like it
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Posted 3/29/08

kagura4 wrote:

I hate to show my aching
I prefer to be the rock
But inside I know I’m breaking
My façade left to mock
I’ve locked the world outside me
I’m the only one I let in
It’s a shame that no one can see
The amount of pain that I’m in
I smile on the outside
Just to make it easier for you
But deep down on the inside
I don’t know what to do
I can’t take this pain away
Not by myself at least
I try to hide my anger away
But it’s just like a beast
It tries to get loose
I try my best to hide it
But the results not what I choose
I can no longer fight it
I can no longer keep it in
I have lost, I let it win



Wow it was really good!! It bounced off a lot of emotion!! (There's another word beside bouce, but I can't really think of it right now.) It was so sad though...but all the same, really good!! Matched the picture PERFECTLY =] I also liked how it rhymed hehe =P
Posted 3/29/08

moonwarrior485 wrote:


kagura4 wrote:

I hate to show my aching
I prefer to be the rock
But inside I know I’m breaking
My façade left to mock
I’ve locked the world outside me
I’m the only one I let in
It’s a shame that no one can see
The amount of pain that I’m in
I smile on the outside
Just to make it easier for you
But deep down on the inside
I don’t know what to do
I can’t take this pain away
Not by myself at least
I try to hide my anger away
But it’s just like a beast
It tries to get loose
I try my best to hide it
But the results not what I choose
I can no longer fight it
I can no longer keep it in
I have lost, I let it win



Wow it was really good!! It bounced off a lot of emotion!! (There's another word beside bouce, but I can't really think of it right now.) It was so sad though...but all the same, really good!! Matched the picture PERFECTLY =] I also liked how it rhymed hehe =P


thanx again =3
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Posted 3/30/08

kagura4 wrote:


moonwarrior485 wrote:


kagura4 wrote:

I hate to show my aching
I prefer to be the rock
But inside I know I’m breaking
My façade left to mock
I’ve locked the world outside me
I’m the only one I let in
It’s a shame that no one can see
The amount of pain that I’m in
I smile on the outside
Just to make it easier for you
But deep down on the inside
I don’t know what to do
I can’t take this pain away
Not by myself at least
I try to hide my anger away
But it’s just like a beast
It tries to get loose
I try my best to hide it
But the results not what I choose
I can no longer fight it
I can no longer keep it in
I have lost, I let it win



Wow it was really good!! It bounced off a lot of emotion!! (There's another word beside bouce, but I can't really think of it right now.) It was so sad though...but all the same, really good!! Matched the picture PERFECTLY =] I also liked how it rhymed hehe =P


thanx again =3


You're welcome ^^
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