Episode 3, "a little help"
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Posted 3/31/08 , edited 4/5/08
I put the story in the spoiler so the page isnt as crammed. :D


Posted 3/31/08
you have doned the scene when Rin helps Yyuusei even funnier, "'ain't you a little short to help me" (to bad I didn't think of that because I frogot that she was short hehe ) ....anyways that was good I'm glad I was a little of help... still need to be finished... If you need more facts I will be glad to help
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Posted 4/1/08
good job keep it up cant wait until next episode
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Posted 4/1/08

pillona wrote:


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pillona wrote:

gr8 job, u gettin better each epi ^_^ just be careful of punctuation and try 2 use a wide vocabulary, or at least try not to use one word too often. i new at this 2 but i hav a friend who h8s it wen som1 does even the smallest mistake. i luv the storyline so far, keep it up! we're rootin 4 u!


>If you want, you can edit it for me. . lol, just kidding, i doubt you would want to do that.


i could if u want, just need 2 do it tmrw tho ^_^


>>lol, yeah, that would be cool. lol.
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Posted 4/2/08
Can't wait for the next.. funny part when Yyusei says rin is short
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Posted 4/2/08

animejoy95 wrote:

Can't wait for the next.. funny part when Yyusei says rin is short


>Haha, i thought so too. It wasnt my idea though. I cant claim credit. Cloud Chaser and RighisKhan put that part in.
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Posted 4/5/08
ha lol thats funny and cool! yeh I read this a while ago but only just felt like commenting
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Posted 4/5/08
You're definitely improving, though this episode should have been broken up into paragraphs like you did chapter 4. And that was a little funny when he mentioned she was a bit small, he didn't actually ouright say she was short, just small, good way of putting it.
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Posted 4/6/08
how bout for the chapter name: a little help (little as in Rin)
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kungpowshorts wrote:

how bout for the chapter name: a little help (little as in Rin)


Thank for the idea, =)
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Posted 4/11/08
whoooooo!!!!!!!!! i win!!!!!!!!!!!!whooooo (me happy!) i made the name!!!woooo
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