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All of us have waited for this time. where our poems r finally matched up with some of the best of the best poets this world has ever known. This time we shall compare our poems to that of legendary Sergei Yesenin. I'll start with one of my best poems. heres my poem Regret

I regret what I've done
I regret what I've said
Now deep in my soul
I feel as if I'm dead

I'm sorry
For everything I've done
For making you beat
The sad, lonely drum

For ruining your life
I'm sorry for that too
Right now I feel
Like such a fool

Now I lost my voice
And my eyes show despair
My heart is broken
And will never be repaired

Now heres a poem from Sergei called The Golden Grove

Alone, I am standing in the bare plain,
While the cranes are carried far away by the wind;
I am full of thoughts about my joyous youth,
But I regret nothing from the past.

I do not regret the years squandered in vain,
I do not regret the lilac blossom within my soul.
In the garden, a fire of rowan-berries is burning,
But it cannot warm anyone.

The rowan-berries in clusters, will not be scorched,
The grass will not grow yellow and perish.
As the tree gently lets fall its leaves,
So I let fall melancholy words.

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Posted 4/6/08
nice . if it means anything at all i liked yours better
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Takumoto wrote:

nice . if it means anything at all i liked yours better


thanx tak^^ but i think sergeis is better. sure he is a little crazy but he opened open a world of poetry russia has never seen b4 and i want to do that with my poetry.
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Posted 5/8/08
Both have the same idea but where it lacks is description wise in which how it carries throughout the poem I'm just going to look at both and really don't mean anything at all, just pointing that out.

The poem you made is good, it's very simplistic and draws in the reader easily.
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Posted 5/8/08
Hmmm emotions wise I'd prefer yours more as it shows more of the writers emotions. The second one was good too but it visualizes things from nature to make it as though time was going by and how the writer remembered what hes done and such. overall i prefer the 2nd one but yours wasn't far off from it. Hope you write more poems =]
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Posted 6/15/08
U know honestly i liked Urs but sergies had more sense of imagination and more description which gave the poem its strength of structure so try to be more descriptive and try to compare situations, analyize and place things with others things maybe then u'll have quite a masterpiece so imagine and let all the expressions emotoins and descriptions come out maybe someday u'll be better than Sergie..i wish U all the best ^-^
Posted 7/14/08
here the poem
my own thoughts

everytime that me met the world is still the same
how much i care for u as friend
it is easier to let go the pain

the dreams that i dreamth thought they were real
it didnt turn real wished they would turn to reality
even though it wont happen
no matter how much i think it it ok
it not ok to push other away
i didnt want them to get involved or get hurt
these dreams i have are fake and not real
the dreams are things are not real compare to reality
every day we have to face the world that is evien with sadness
we always try to find a light shine through the path road
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