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Posted 4/12/08 , edited 4/12/08
The all-consuming shadow,
slowly makes its way towards me.
The darkness I see within,
can never be explained.
Madness grips my mind,
killing every bit of sanity left.
My vision goes blurry,
as the shadow slowly consumes me....

--thanks for adding me up... here's a little something, it's kinda short but i think it's good... now i wanna know what YOU think 'bout it... I also have my own blog, just message me if you wanna know the site ^^ the blog is made up of poems and short stories which I hope you'll like ^^
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Posted 4/12/08 , edited 4/12/08
short but cool, i love it
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Posted 4/12/08 , edited 4/12/08
i love it 2, but i agree with tak it is a little short
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Posted 4/12/08 , edited 4/12/08
I think that this is a great start of a poem. Something makes me wonder about the rest? Try writing this down, and then adding a few stanzas. Practice makes perfect and if you continue to write short pieces, you should remind yourself to add them into another composition. Makes things much more clearer. Other than that this was wonderful!
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Posted 4/13/08 , edited 4/13/08
hey tnx for the comments.... i intended on making it short coz it's just an intro... i'll try posting more poems with greater length in the future... again tnx for the comments ^^ some of my works are also found in www.tornlight.blogspot.com <-my own blog ^^
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Posted 4/13/08 , edited 4/14/08
oh and if ur gonna be visiting my blog pls leave some comments within ^^
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