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yeah im trying to make an anime about a city with people leaving with chains attached to their hearts and the chain comes out as a weapon and if the chain breaks while the weapon is out then the person dies so pretty much theres a boy names Crest who lives in the "ghetto" part of town outside the fortress(inside the fortress there a rich people with powerful chain weapons) and also there is going to be another main character but i don't know his/her name but he or she will be living inside the fortress as the enemy of the other main character but pretty much the people of the ghetto do many terrorist attempts inside the fortress out of anger because those people live in mansions and eat demon flesh ect... and the people of the ghetto live in poverty the have to steal food and fight for it some of them even cut their own chains.

The story begins inside the fortress with one of the noble men walking around the town saluting his fellow comrades while being surrounded by his body guards, but all you see next is one of the body guards putting his sword inside the noble mens chain and breaking it then the rest of the body guards attempt to kill the assassin but he quickly flees back into the ghetto with a handful of money but before that he see a family eating dinner through the window and he jumps in kills the wife and children and grabs everything and flees, as soon as the father walks in he sees his family dead and the man who killed them jumping out of the window. The father ran ofter the man all the way into the outskirts of the fortress the man pulled out his chain but it went down his legs then his jeans all of a sudden ripped revealing his weapon are on his legs he jumped in mid and kicked the guy then the guy pulled out his chain weapon which was a regular katana the thief was spinning his katana around using the chain and he threw it at the men, the father quickly reacted and instantly stepped to the right, next to the chain while he was watching the chain slowly passing next to him the father was angry for the loss of his family members so he caught the chain and brought the sword back to him and stabbed the thief several time with no remorse then he ended it with the father kicking the thief into the air then threw his sword in between each chain slowly breaking them until it stabbed him in the heart the father dropped to the floor crying for the death of his family.
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Just one thing, you are in the middle of the battle saying the guy the guy, Say, the figure, and the old man. So it is more distinct. Cause i got a little confused. And why would they cut their own chains? The idea is really good though, what do you need help with? I would be happy to help
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Also, the details are really descriptive, i rlly like it, just need to work on having it flow a bit more together and less complicated, but dont get me wrong, it is rlly rlly good.
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well characters abilities names for characters and the name of the anime aswell and i was going for the oncept of breaking their own chain so they would die
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Interesting story. But did everyone in that city have chains?
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yeah everyone is born with a chain its like their life
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khadar747 wrote:

yeah im trying to make an anime about a city with people leaving with chains attached to their hearts and the chain comes out as a weapon and if the chain breaks while the weapon is out then the person dies so pretty much theres a boy names Crest who lives in the "ghetto" part of town outside the fortress(inside the fortress there a rich people with powerful chain weapons) and also there is going to be another main character but i don't know his/her name but he or she will be living inside the fortress as the enemy of the other main character but pretty much the people of the ghetto do many terrorist attempts inside the fortress out of anger because those people live in mansions and eat demon flesh ect... and the people of the ghetto live in poverty the have to steal food and fight for it some of them even cut their own chains.

The story begins inside the fortress with one of the noble men walking around the town saluting his fellow comrades while being surrounded by his body guards, but all you see next is one of the body guards putting his sword inside the noble mens chain and breaking it then the rest of the body guards attempt to kill the assassin but he quickly flees back into the ghetto with a handful of money but before that he see a family eating dinner through the window and he jumps in kills the wife and children and grabs everything and flees, as soon as the father walks in he sees his family dead and the man who killed them jumping out of the window. The father ran ofter the man all the way into the outskirts of the fortress the man pulled out his chain but it went down his legs then his jeans all of a sudden ripped revealing his weapon are on his legs he jumped in mid and kicked the guy then the guy pulled out his chain weapon which was a regular katana the thief was spinning his katana around using the chain and he threw it at the men, the father quickly reacted and instantly stepped to the right, next to the chain while he was watching the chain slowly passing next to him the father was angry for the loss of his family members so he caught the chain and brought the sword back to him and stabbed the thief several time with no remorse then he ended it with the father kicking the thief into the air then threw his sword in between each chain slowly breaking them until it stabbed him in the heart the father dropped to the floor crying for the death of his family.


Interesting. Where does this "Crest" come in? He's nowhere to be seen.
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Posted 4/27/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:


khadar747 wrote:

yeah im trying to make an anime about a city with people leaving with chains attached to their hearts and the chain comes out as a weapon and if the chain breaks while the weapon is out then the person dies so pretty much theres a boy names Crest who lives in the "ghetto" part of town outside the fortress(inside the fortress there a rich people with powerful chain weapons) and also there is going to be another main character but i don't know his/her name but he or she will be living inside the fortress as the enemy of the other main character but pretty much the people of the ghetto do many terrorist attempts inside the fortress out of anger because those people live in mansions and eat demon flesh ect... and the people of the ghetto live in poverty the have to steal food and fight for it some of them even cut their own chains.

The story begins inside the fortress with one of the noble men walking around the town saluting his fellow comrades while being surrounded by his body guards, but all you see next is one of the body guards putting his sword inside the noble mens chain and breaking it then the rest of the body guards attempt to kill the assassin but he quickly flees back into the ghetto with a handful of money but before that he see a family eating dinner through the window and he jumps in kills the wife and children and grabs everything and flees, as soon as the father walks in he sees his family dead and the man who killed them jumping out of the window. The father ran ofter the man all the way into the outskirts of the fortress the man pulled out his chain but it went down his legs then his jeans all of a sudden ripped revealing his weapon are on his legs he jumped in mid and kicked the guy then the guy pulled out his chain weapon which was a regular katana the thief was spinning his katana around using the chain and he threw it at the men, the father quickly reacted and instantly stepped to the right, next to the chain while he was watching the chain slowly passing next to him the father was angry for the loss of his family members so he caught the chain and brought the sword back to him and stabbed the thief several time with no remorse then he ended it with the father kicking the thief into the air then threw his sword in between each chain slowly breaking them until it stabbed him in the heart the father dropped to the floor crying for the death of his family.


Interesting. Where does this "Crest" come in? He's nowhere to be seen.


Crest name is changed to Albert i dont know if i should have just kept it crest so i might make a poll or something

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khadar747 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:

Interesting. Where does this "Crest" come in? He's nowhere to be seen.


Crest name is changed to Albert i dont know if i should have just kept it crest so i might make a poll or something



Crest is cooler. Call him Crest.
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i am with 8th, Crest i think is cooler
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