Post Reply A Brothers Feud, By: CharAznable
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Posted 4/28/08 , edited 9/11/08
This is something I came up with for a story im fiddeling around with. Pardon if my grammar or spelling sucks, I tend to have to do a LOT of proof reading.

PART I



PART II



PART III


PART IV



FINALE!

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Not bad. Some stuff here and there need inprovement.

Try to break the huge paragraph down abit.
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XP i do tend to have runon sentances...
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Yeh. Nothing microsoft word cant fix ^____^

What about mine? What do you think?
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i havnt read it yet, i simply copy pasted this from notepad, twas o nthe phone with Devry so i'll go read it now ^_^;;
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Tis a good job you did there marble man. KUDOS! ^__^ An intense battle indeed and can't wait to read the next part. *whispers* You might want to work on the spelling there bucko.
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PART II

As the intense black fire neared him the onyl thing Cyrus did to defend himself was raise his left palm as if to grab ahold of the ball. However as he did this the sleeve of his coat slid back, revealing a beautifully crafted gauntlet of mythril silver, the ball collided with his palm and crashed over him, bringing a smirk to the face of julias for a breif moment before Cyrus came flying out of the explosion right at Julias without a scratch on him. He raised his rifle likea sword and went to bring the rather long bayonet he ahd on it down apon Julias' head. However, shocked as he was Julias still retained the sense to raise his rapier up to block the attack,pushing off sideways to the right to force Cyrus away from him. This only let Cyrus rebound once mroe at him, forcing Julias to launch backwards onto the rooftops, barely parrying a stab from Cyrus in the process.
"You underestimate me Julias..."
Cyrus said coldly as he pushed the advantage and forced Julias into a melee fight where he was FAR superior to his brother.
"And you overestimate yourself..."
Julias said as he blocked and parried attack after attack, their movements allmost a blur with how fast they fought each other. Even though they were enemies they were blood relatives and instinctivly could read each other. The fight seemed allmost godly in its intensity as they battled apon the roofs.

Julias finally was able to get an elbow in, staggering Cyrus just long enough to leap back an launch another spell. This time sending what seemed like thousands of daggers of ice launching themself at Cyrus but he simply focused his energies into his rifle and fired as he brought the rifle up in a diagonal slash to the upper right, dragging a stream of flame into crescent moon shape that completely sheilded him from the attack. "YOUR GONNA HAVE TO DO BETTER!!" Cyrus said as he directed the flame with his rifle to launch like a spear at Julias who countered as well by summoning a large orb of watar which doused the flame as it reached him. It then poured to the ground as Julias with his other hand seemed to throw something, a baseball sized orb of electricity streaking at cypher who this time rolled to the right, ending up on the edge of the roof as the orb connected with the roof and exploded into a violant torrent of electricty streaking out in all directions. Cyrus wasted no time in launching from his position at Julias before the roof could collapse from beneath him.

END OF PART II
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