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Part of a story.... Please read and comment
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DISCLAIMER: This is my original story/novel.. NOT A FAN FIC. Have fun


John felt the cold sweat rushing down his cheeks. No. He stopped and turned left as he passed by Sigmund Xerialis' Statue. No. Please. Not her. Up ahead of him the cloaked figure held a limp body and dropped it. It was her. No doubt about it. No. Please. The cloaked figure disappeared in the darkness which seemed to have embraced him and his blood-stained scythe. John rushed to the limp body on the ground and knelt in the pool of blood. It was her. No doubt about it. Her red hair was stained with blood and John held her tight. Her face was white and blood was dripping from her mouth. She suddenly opened her eyes. John could here sirens of the Ambulance. Her eyes were full of sadness and tears. Nevertheless, its green shade mesmerized him. She raised her bloodstained hand and put it in his face. She spoke.
"I'm so....happy." She said.
"Rose, no." John said."Don't talk they're coming to get you."
"Happy.... you're the last....person.... I..." She said as her hand fell from his face to the ground.
Happy memories with her. That was in his mind right now. Her wit. Her beauty. It was all gone. She's gone.
"Rosette!" A voice shouted.
Imaro, Rosette's fiance came rushing down to them.
"What happened?" He asked.
He looked down in horror as John closed Rosette's eyes. John stood up.
"No." Imaro said, trembling.
John gave him a blow to the right side of the face. Imaro lost his balance and sat on the pvement, a hand on his right cheek.
"IDIOT." John yelled in fury."You left HER HERE."
''She told me that she'd stay!" Imaro answered back."It was a perfect~"
"WAS." John yelled. "Damn it."
Tears flowed from his eyes. He could'nt believe it. His childhood friend is dead.


He sat on the Hospital lobby looking at the wall clock. Half Past Midnight. White and Red Roses were her favorite. She was a professional chef and nagger. A very outspoken person. Nurses came rushing out from the ER again.
"What?!" The Head Doctor yelled in surprise. "3 more?!"
A series of stretchers came passed in the lobby. 2 were covered in bloodstained blankets. 1 wasn't. It carried a familiar looking brown haired Girl. After the stretchers was Max, looking pale faced and his expression was blank.
'' What the hell happened?" John asked.
Max just looked at him blankly and he walked on.
"No way." John said."Eondrei and... Miriam and Mrs Toniko?"



DISCLAIMER: This is my original story/novel.. NOT A FAN FIC. Have fun.

Guys, if u want me to write the continuation(which is full of fighting) just tell me

I put the link on my profile

Link to the continuation:

http://www.crunchyroll.com/forumtopic-186541/Part-of-the-Story-2-Please-read-and-comment.html
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Posted 4/30/08
from what anime is this? =]
or is it a fanfic? =]
Posted 4/30/08
very emotive.......

its written well, but its not my kind of story
Posted 4/30/08
ne ne, hahas... is this a fanfic?
hmmm, imma like to know what happen next pls XD
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23 / M / the beautiful cit...
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Posted 4/30/08
dude thats deep....
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21 / F / in front of the c...
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Posted 4/30/08
sugoi .. this is soooooooooo fantastic . please continue . ^ . ^
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23 / F / The Netherlands
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Posted 4/30/08
Yes its really good. It really cought my attention
I dind't understand all the names but still the story was understandeble and deep
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Posted 4/30/08
dude continuation pl0x!
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Posted 4/30/08
there is a group for this stuff( something like CR folklore society )
all the guys there are good at rating this stuff
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31 / M / Philippines
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Posted 4/30/08
nice work
so dont keep us hangin.. what's next...
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24 / F / phiLippinEs
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Posted 4/30/08
whats next?

its nice..

continue it.
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27 / F / in a dark box!
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Posted 4/30/08
kakoiii!:)
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27 / M / Malaysia
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Posted 4/30/08
Its a pretty good start, please do go on.
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Posted 4/30/08
What's next? please continue it...
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43 / M / philippines,angel...
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please dont continue it
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