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Posted 5/3/08 , edited 8/28/08
My episodes are long enough that they exceed the word limit on posts. Additional Episodes will be posted in new posts, so please go through the thread to find more episodes.

Episode 1

Messiah



Episode 2

Prisoners of Body



Here are my episodes as pages. I will leave the stories in spoilers for now, because they make quoting passages from them easier.

http://www.crunchyroll.com/user/The_8th_Sin/pages/urdumkeit
Posted 5/4/08 , edited 10/29/08
Wow, nice story... really creative... hmm you're right I didn't know what was going on in the beginning.... two stories... mixed it was kinda confusing but very thrilling .... I like it! Nice job whit the cliffhanger.
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wow! now that was good! I havnt read a story like that before! iv seen one a bit like it but that was ages ago so its pretty origional! and yeh even though it was a bit confusing at the begging I somehow understood it so I applaud you for maiing me undersatnd something as complex as that lol! even though it was a bit longer than most of the instalemnets on here I didnt really mind because it flowed nicely! good work!
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Posted 5/4/08 , edited 10/29/08

RihgisKhan wrote:

Wow nice story... really creative... hmm you're right I didn't know what was going on in the beginning.... two stories... mixed it was kinda confusing but very thrilling .... I like it! Nice job whit the cliffhanger.


Sorry about the beginning, it was just too cool of an idea to not use. Nothing of the sort will happen again.
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Posted 5/4/08
That was really really good. Well structured and it flowed really well. Cant wait for the next one!
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Posted 5/5/08 , edited 10/29/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:


RihgisKhan wrote:

Wow nice story... really creative... hmm you're right I didn't know what was going on in the beginning.... two stories... mixed it was kinda confusing but very thrilling .... I like it! Nice job whit the cliffhanger.


Sorry about the beginning, it was just too cool of an idea to not use. Nothing of the sort will happen again.


it was a pretty damn cool idea! I use it a lot in my writing too but not many writers can pull it off which you did with aplomb lol!
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Posted 5/5/08
I've finished 2 1/2 pages already! At this rate, assuming they are all around the same length, I will be finished by Thursday.
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Posted 5/5/08
This was a good story, I can't wait to read more
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By the way, are my episodes too long? I would hate to think that adding more details is actually making my story worse.
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Posted 5/12/08 , edited 5/12/08
when you said you hav etow followers! you where wrong because iv loved this story from the begging so you have at least three probably more and growing! I loved the latest chapter! The chapters are a bit long but im used to that now and I think making them shorter would ruin it and kill the story
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Posted 5/12/08
Hooray! Okay then; I'll write them at this length from now on!
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What do people think of Wadec?
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Posted 5/12/08
I've only read the first episode, it was very interesting. X3 keep it up, I liked it. ^_^ I'll read the other chapter maybe tomorrow.
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Posted 5/12/08
Wow! your story is really good. I can't wait for ep three. I also write manga and am posting episodes of my first one at my group as an experiment. Eventually I'll post it here. If you like you can go to Anime Generation and see if you like it. Don't freak out about the way it is set up or the grammer-spelling errors, its not on purpose, I lost a bet with one of my friends and now I can't corect anything for a month other than papers from work. But I really liked this story, its very interesting!
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Posted 5/12/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:

I've worked nearly a week on episode 1, and I'm finished at last. This is my first time trying a project like this, so I hope my story will be thrilling. Without further ado, here's episode 1!

Episode 1

Messiah



Episode 2

Prisoners of Body



How was it? Please give any comments and feel free to discuss anything about the story here.


This is a nice story. Is this a mystery with action? It's good and it really have suspense.
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