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Post Reply "Urdumkeit" by The_8th_Sin
Posted 5/25/08 , edited 10/29/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:


RihgisKhan wrote:


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Hmm... I didn't liked the 3rd episode that much I'll give her something like 4/5 rating ... but I thought... oh I fell kinda bored.. maybe I didn't wish for the story to go that direction... the suspense and mystery are dead now... Well I'm still a fan I'll keep reading hope it will get more exciting like first 2


Huh? How are they dead? Not necessarily disagreeing with you, I just want to know what you mean.


Umm.... I'm really bad whit the details.. and I can't really find the right words to describe you... the story isn't that thrilling as in the 1-2 chapter... I was thinking you could put some twist? But I know it's really hard because I don't know do you have a plot line for Urdumkeit, you know, like how will things roll or you just have a beginning without an end you know it's difficult to write like that, I advise to made an end first not just fill out an empty chapter... Sorry don't ask me why I didn't liked 3rd episode that much... and I said that much, not completely... So yeah if I could rate chapters I would rate in as it follows 1st Messiah , 2nd Prisoners of Body , 3rd A Safe Place . Sorry. But I still love your story but don't except from me and other fans that everything is awesome


Wait, do you mean a twist in the plot each episode? I don't think I can pull that off. If you meant twists in the plot in general, I've got plenty of those, although, rather like Samurai Champloo, the story is for the most situation based, rather than quest based. In other words, for the most part, the good guys won't go out to achieve something, they just are trying to survive. That aspect of the anime will change soon though.

The reason you didn't like Urdumkeit 3 is because it was a non-action episode. It was necessary to include it for the sake of the story working, and there was no natural way to include an action scene in the episode.

By the way, I do have an end in mind. I swear.


Yes, the reason marked red. I get it. I don't mind it weren't action.
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Posted 5/25/08 , edited 10/29/08

RihgisKhan wrote:



Interesting. So, what you mean is you want the story to have more direction, than just survival? You want the main characters to have a goal?
Posted 5/25/08 , edited 10/29/08

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Interesting. So, what you mean is you want the story to have more direction, than just survival? You want the main characters to have a goal?


Yes. At first it seems like a survival. But after certain time they should have a goal, something to push them forward. Not just the willingness to survive the island.
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Posted 5/25/08 , edited 10/29/08

RihgisKhan wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


RihgisKhan wrote:



Interesting. So, what you mean is you want the story to have more direction, than just survival? You want the main characters to have a goal?


Yes. At first it seems like a survival. But after certain time they should have a goal, something to push them forward. Not just the willingness to survive the island.


Please, don't worry. They will have a goal.
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once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.
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once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.


nig·gle (ngl)
intr.v. nig·gled, nig·gling, nig·gles
1. To be preoccupied with trifles or petty details.
2. To find fault constantly and trivially; carp. See Synonyms at quibble.

Thank you for forcing me to look up a word.

In any case, I can imagine what the niggle was, but would you mind telling me in your own words?
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atelier7 wrote:

once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.


nig·gle (ngl)
intr.v. nig·gled, nig·gling, nig·gles
1. To be preoccupied with trifles or petty details.
2. To find fault constantly and trivially; carp. See Synonyms at quibble.

Thank you for forcing me to look up a word.

In any case, I can imagine what the niggle was, but would you mind telling me in your own words?


i was just wondering why a half-starved girl traumatized by a, er, cheerfully carried out decapitation would still find it easy to trust a stranger in the woods..
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Posted 5/29/08 , edited 5/29/08

atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.


nig·gle (ngl)
intr.v. nig·gled, nig·gling, nig·gles
1. To be preoccupied with trifles or petty details.
2. To find fault constantly and trivially; carp. See Synonyms at quibble.

Thank you for forcing me to look up a word.

In any case, I can imagine what the niggle was, but would you mind telling me in your own words?


i was just wondering why a half-starved girl traumatized by a, er, cheerfully carried out decapitation would still find it easy to trust a stranger in the woods.. :)


Let me remind you that Solem is an eight year old boy. Eve is to naive too suspect an eight year old boy of anything.
Posted 5/29/08
Cool story... Am not really into action but I really liked this one.

I hope to read more about it.
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Episode 4

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The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.


nig·gle (ngl)
intr.v. nig·gled, nig·gling, nig·gles
1. To be preoccupied with trifles or petty details.
2. To find fault constantly and trivially; carp. See Synonyms at quibble.

Thank you for forcing me to look up a word.

In any case, I can imagine what the niggle was, but would you mind telling me in your own words?


i was just wondering why a half-starved girl traumatized by a, er, cheerfully carried out decapitation would still find it easy to trust a stranger in the woods.. :)


Let me remind you that Solem is an eight year old boy. Eve is to naive too suspect an eight year old boy of anything.


i guess that makes some sort of sense... though believe me, people do not act that way. we will swindle, cheat, betray and kill to live.

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excelent as usual
you have a way with words
one of my faves on here
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Posted 6/2/08

atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.


nig·gle (ngl)
intr.v. nig·gled, nig·gling, nig·gles
1. To be preoccupied with trifles or petty details.
2. To find fault constantly and trivially; carp. See Synonyms at quibble.

Thank you for forcing me to look up a word.

In any case, I can imagine what the niggle was, but would you mind telling me in your own words?


i was just wondering why a half-starved girl traumatized by a, er, cheerfully carried out decapitation would still find it easy to trust a stranger in the woods.. :)


Let me remind you that Solem is an eight year old boy. Eve is to naive too suspect an eight year old boy of anything.


i guess that makes some sort of sense... though believe me, people do not act that way. we will swindle, cheat, betray and kill to live.



Are you saying that Solem is unrealistic character?
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Posted 6/3/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

once again, brilliant. you've pulled me down deeper the rabbit hole. there were a few niggles here and there, but it was interesting.


nig·gle (ngl)
intr.v. nig·gled, nig·gling, nig·gles
1. To be preoccupied with trifles or petty details.
2. To find fault constantly and trivially; carp. See Synonyms at quibble.

Thank you for forcing me to look up a word.

In any case, I can imagine what the niggle was, but would you mind telling me in your own words?


i was just wondering why a half-starved girl traumatized by a, er, cheerfully carried out decapitation would still find it easy to trust a stranger in the woods.. :)


Let me remind you that Solem is an eight year old boy. Eve is to naive too suspect an eight year old boy of anything.


i guess that makes some sort of sense... though believe me, people do not act that way. we will swindle, cheat, betray and kill to live.



Are you saying that Solem is unrealistic character?


no, i'm saying the girl is on another level of naive....
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Posted 6/3/08

atelier7 wrote:

no, i'm saying the girl is on another level of naive....


I really don't think that she's so naive that it's unrealistic. It's all very well to say that we would be suspicious of everyone we meet, but we are talking about a story, and it is real to her. I don't think our minds would be used to assuming the worst of humans, living in the societies we live in.
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