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25 / F / a place in the world
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Posted 11/14/07 , edited 11/14/07
Hey peeps! Could you please go to this link to the first page of a manga I've been working on?
http://redtea-chan.deviantart.com/art/Rose-of-the-Moon-Page-1-69735003

I want to become a proffesional, so I need feedback! Feel free to flame it (if it deserves it), I need to toughen my skin.

note- this is all hand-made, no computer.

ALSO- I'm sorry if I'm accidentaly breaking a rule, I havent been on this forum in a while, (though I used to be a regular) and I am not up to date on the new rules. Thanks! ^^

NOTE- There is more than one page. CLICK on the "Gallery" link to see more!
http://redtea-chan.deviantart.com/gallery/

Posted 11/14/07
Hmmm..I just think you should study a few "How to draw manga" books. The page looks good, but the characters are kind of disfigured. Sadly that's all the advice I have to give ^^"

Sorry
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Posted 11/14/07
characters are disfigured ... but the story look awesome. i'm sure it'll turn out great if you keep working on it ^.^
Posted 11/14/07
creak

I agree... the chick at the desk?... WTF is up w/ her arm o_O;;
I'm sorry.... I mean, it's not all bad anyway... it's better than what I can do ^_^;;

*goes back to lurk mode*
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Posted 11/14/07
THANK YOU FOR REVIEWING! ^^ Its ok, I know the anatomy isnt very good. Ironicly, I happent to own 12 "How to draw manga"books. I also about 10 other drawing books of various titles and publishers.
Just asking, did you only read the first page? There are 17 pages, and the drawing get better as it goes...
anyhoo, thanks! ^^
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Posted 11/14/07
where do i see the 16 other pages?
btw the girl's arm on page 1 looks... not normal
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Posted 11/14/07
great artist
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Posted 11/14/07
hey i like it....
i have to admit, the hand looks kind a deformed, but hands are really hard to draw....
but everything else looks great. and the story is intersing, im on pg ten. my computers slowing down a little so im having trouble reading the rest....
so ummm
pros: art (except hands), way you set up panels ,and the backgrounds and sfx. looks really good. story
cons: some of the art could be better, also, you might want to redo the dialogue in photoshop or something...do you have a tablet??
sorry this is so long, im really bored
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Posted 11/14/07
Too sketchy
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Posted 11/14/07

ailina wrote:

hey i like it....
i have to admit, the hand looks kind a deformed, but hands are really hard to draw....
but everything else looks great. and the story is intersing, im on pg ten. my computers slowing down a little so im having trouble reading the rest....
so ummm
pros: art (except hands), way you set up panels ,and the backgrounds and sfx. looks really good. story
cons: some of the art could be better, also, you might want to redo the dialogue in photoshop or something...do you have a tablet??
sorry this is so long, im really bored


This is the kind of comment I love to read! Positive, but not sugar coated! Useful! thank you so much! I LOOOOOVE long comments! ^^
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Posted 11/14/07
Let's see...
the dialogue might need some re-doing
this is a coicidence that the main character is named Rosa and the manga is called "Rose of the Moon"
the background of the characters are good
and the knife on page 11... (i dunno what to say)
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Posted 11/14/07
actualy, the "Rosa, Rose" thing wasnt a coincedence. I did that om purpose. ^^
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Posted 11/14/07
I love this. Great job keep it up

Hmm, my recommendations...

-You NEED photoshop to do all text and outlines (It will look so much more professional)
-I'm not a fan of the character names

But your artwork is great and shows that you visualize things well, I want to see you improve your art over time so keep it up!
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Posted 11/14/07

killar wrote:

I love this. Great job keep it up

Hmm, my recommendations...

-You NEED photoshop to do all text and outlines (It will look so much more professional)
-I'm not a fan of the character names

But your artwork is great and shows that you visualize things well, I want to see you improve your art over time so keep it up!


Posted 11/14/07
ya you're drawings are pretty good.. x)
good job..=]
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