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Posted 5/5/08 , edited 9/9/08
Please follow this link to see my manga ^_^ (Note: my avg rate is about 1-2 pages per week)
http://www.crunchyroll.com/user/momogoldfish/pages/fuyu+no+kaidan1

EDIT: Please endure my very bad panellings and drawing in chapter1 and 2, till u get to the copyright infringements, action and complementary psychotic females ^_^

(Sample from Chapter 3)


(Sample from Chapter 4)
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Posted 5/5/08
Wonderful. The story is interesting and not confusing to follow so far. Did you create the story yourself?
As for the drawing... I would recommend you to work on the faces and the panels
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Posted 5/6/08

aya_cool wrote:

Wonderful. The story is interesting and not confusing to follow so far. Did you create the story yourself?
As for the drawing... I would recommend you to work on the faces and the panels


I AM SORRY ABOUT THE PANELS! (Because everyone seems to have trouble with them, mayb I should number them...)

And yes the story is my own XD...but then the ideas have probably been recycled since the beginning of time XD
Posted 5/10/08 , edited 5/10/08

momogoldfish wrote:

Please follow this link to see my manga ^_^ (Note: my avg rate is about 1-2 pages per week)
http://www.crunchyroll.com/user/momogoldfish/pages/fuyu+no+kaidan1




I could see this story in a real manga. Keep practicing on the art though, and lineart too(how clean/tidy it is).
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yes mo panelling = ur no.1 problem XD as for art well unique style = goodness so heh... study teh sequences in the manga youve read hmm? XD
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Posted 6/16/08
No offence, but you need to work on your panels and faces . other than that, the story is pretty good
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Posted 7/14/08
the story is good but i agree w/ everyone else u need to work on ur faces..... (like im to talk though.......i suck....)
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Posted 7/27/08 , edited 7/27/08
Guess its time I feed my ego and reply to my dear readers XD

Thank you everyone 4 ur advice, I really appreciate them and will try to improve things as much as my limited abilities allows. (As you can see, I have tried simplifying my panelling and dialogue positioning so that while its not particularily attractive it is at least less convuluted)

I am glad everyone like my story so far, I am trying my best to not to fall into too many cliches unless they are too fun to resist ^_^

O and I need further advice as to how to improve my faces, so far the major problem is probably that they are too flat T_T. However since I am trying to develop my own style there mayb somethings that can't be changed.

Finally, read the explanatory page, its actually not that boring!

I think my ego's full now...will keep adding more pages in between studying etc. so stay tuned
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Posted 7/31/08
well i cant draw different poses but my drawing in characters are pretty good im pretty good at story writing too..... the story you made is good, understandable well any ways the bad points are these... i am not here too criticize its just my opinion...
but you pass!!!!!!!!!!!
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