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"Love contract" by yoyok121204
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know what? a lot of your conversations are awkward when you insert bits of information in them, or at leat they aren't phrased properly. and the way the story progresses is a bit stuttery; some plot devices seemed forced in. but other than that it's an enjoyable romp.
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I have been saving these stories up for quite a while, and I've just started reading them again. I'm on 16.
Posted 7/28/08

atelier7 wrote:

know what? a lot of your conversations are awkward when you insert bits of information in them, or at leat they aren't phrased properly. and the way the story progresses is a bit stuttery; some plot devices seemed forced in. but other than that it's an enjoyable romp. :)


umm. That's the reason why I put the words Raw. It means there's some errors in the chapters. If only someone would correct my errors just like 8th did in the first episode then I will remove the word Raw then. About the plot forced in is that the vampire sisters? Actually I did really do it in purpose. The two of them are the regular sub characters. I just shoved them in the story for a while but as the story goes all about them would be revealed just like in some animes.
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Posted 7/29/08

yoyok121204 wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

know what? a lot of your conversations are awkward when you insert bits of information in them, or at leat they aren't phrased properly. and the way the story progresses is a bit stuttery; some plot devices seemed forced in. but other than that it's an enjoyable romp. :)


umm. That's the reason why I put the words Raw. It means there's some errors in the chapters. If only someone would correct my errors just like 8th did in the first episode then I will remove the word Raw then.


I never realized that you were translating them! Cool! From what language?
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Posted 7/31/08
Hahahaha, that was a fun read...
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Someone animate or turn this into a manga!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted 8/7/08
hm... i wonder if i can draw it... not yet sure...
when time permits, i guess...
Posted 8/7/08

khaydi wrote:

hm... i wonder if i can draw it... not yet sure...
when time permits, i guess...


arigato khaydi~dono
Posted 8/7/08

yoyok121204 wrote:


khaydi wrote:

hm... i wonder if i can draw it... not yet sure...
when time permits, i guess...


arigato khaydi~dono


don't thank me yet.
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Posted 8/19/08
This is really good! I like it!
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Posted 8/19/08

narutosasukegal44 wrote:

This is really good! I like it!


do you read it?
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narutosasukegal44 wrote:

This is really good! I like it!


do you read it?


some of it. didn't have time to read all of it. It's about someone i know though.
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Posted 8/20/08

narutosasukegal44 wrote:


Rakensho wrote:


narutosasukegal44 wrote:

This is really good! I like it!


do you read it?


some of it. didn't have time to read all of it. It's about someone i know though.


I see
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Posted 8/20/08

narutosasukegal44 wrote:


Rakensho wrote:


narutosasukegal44 wrote:

This is really good! I like it!


do you read it?


some of it. didn't have time to read all of it. It's about someone i know though.


someone you know?
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Posted 8/21/08

blckfox7 wrote:


narutosasukegal44 wrote:


Rakensho wrote:


narutosasukegal44 wrote:

This is really good! I like it!


do you read it?


some of it. didn't have time to read all of it. It's about someone i know though.


someone you know?


*smiles* yeah, YOU!! *hugs*
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