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Prologue:The Promise..

"Watch out!!" shouted the young Syuusuke as he jumped across the road and getting the girl away from the speeding car. He was now on top of the girl. She looked lovely to him. Her eyes were squeezed shut. "er.. are u ok?" he asked.

"mm yea im alright.. thx for saving me.." she said shocked by incident.

"oh im srry .." stuttered Syuusuke as he stood up blushing. "are u new here? i have never seen u around before."

"Yes you are right im new here.. My Family and I just moved in" said the girl pointing at her house. "I am also enrolled into that school nearby." She was a sweet little thing gentle and softspoken.

"Oh really!?" exclaimed Syuusuke with delight. "That means we are nextdoor neighbours and we attend the same school too!!" Syuusuke said jumping with excitement. He was a playful boy like all others and was very sporty.

"Thats great! So we can go to school and return together.." she said smiling lightly. "Oh im Sakuya, Fuji Sakuya. what is your name?"

"Im Syuusuke, Ryuzaki Syuusuke." he said proudly. The sun started to set turning the sky a brilliant crimson. "Its getting late i should be getting home soon lets go home."

At the gates of their houses they promised to go to school together the next day and both went in their own houses wearing a smile. Both of them couldnt sleep the whole night they were so excited about meeting each other again. It was love at first sight.

The next day they both met up as promised and went to school together holding hands. Both of them always played together at the nearby playgrounds although they both had different interests. Sakuya gentle and softspoken preferred to sit down and draw, whereas Syuusuke prefered to play things like catching and soccer. Even with these differences they still got along very well. This relationship lasted for 5 months..

One day Sakuya didnt meet Syuusuke outside their houses and Syuusuke went to school alone. Sakuyas parents had recieved a call from Sakuyas grandfather from Kyoto, notifying them about her aged grandmother being admitted in to hospital due to a heart attack. This news hurt Sakuya badly and her parents decided to move to Kyoto to allow Sakuya to spend more time with her grandmother..

Sakuya didnt attend school for the next five days as her family began preparations to move to Kyoto. It was her final day here in Tokyo. Syuusuke missed Sakuya badly and would wait for her at the playground till the sun sets only to go home dissapointed. On her last day, Sakuya went to the playground and saw Syuusuke waiting for her. Syuusukes eyes brightened up immediately after seeing her. However Sakuya was crestfallen. She explained everything to Syuusuke.

"So you see.. im sorry but I have to leave Tokyo."she said sadly.

"oh i see.. i will miss you.." Syuusuke whispered.

"I will miss you too.." replied Sakuya and they hugged. Just then the moving truck arrived and Sakuyas parents called for Sakuya.

"Coming!" shouted Sakuya to her parents. "bye Syuusuke.. lets go to Tokyo high school together when we grow up ok?" Sakuya kissed him on the cheek.

"Its a promise" said Syuusuke as she ran off to the truck. Then the truck drove off..

Then Syuusuke realised that Tokyo Highschool was the best highschool in Tokyo. "Its a promise.." he assured himself..


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ah!!!!!!!!.. so good!!...
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Cute....totaly cute! I lov such mushy stories! ( Oh yeah I am a mushy master!!...ups =))
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like the story.,Ü
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Chapter 1:Sakuya Returns

5 years later..

"Yes mom I have reached Tokyo already. Yes I will take care of myself you take care too ok? Tell dad, grandpa, grandma and my silly younger brother Tatsuya i love them. Love you mom take care bye." It was 6pm as a beautiful girl with hazel coloured shoulder length hair and blue eyes was talking on the phone while waiting for a taxi to bring her to the Tokyo Highschool dorms from the airport. Her beautiful features and her slim body turned many heads. Calm and composed, she did not bother about the others but continued to make phonecalls. "Yes I am Fuji Sakuya and I have arrived in Tokyo already." said Sakuya to the Tokyo Highschool administrator while getting on to the taxi. "Tokyo Highschool please, thank you." "Yes I am on my way already. Ok i will meet you there thank you." replied Sakuya as she hung up.

"I've missed this place..", thought Sakuya as she looked out of the windows. "I wonder if he is also enrolled into Tokyo Highschool.."

After a 15 minute ride, Sakuya reached the school and after settling with the administrative matters, she took her room keys and went straight to her dorm. "So school will only start next month huh.. looks like im the only one here for the moment.." Sakuya thought as she walked down the carpet floors of the corridors. Entering the room at the corner she couldnt help but notice the beautiful sea view from the balcony. After gazing at the amazing sunset she unpacked her things neatly and layed on the bed totally exhausted. "I cant even remember his name.. I wonder if he still remembers mine.." Sakuya whispered to herself while desperately trying to recall the boy of her dreams. "I hope he remembers our promise.." as Sakuya fell asleep..

"Syuusuke, Yuna!! Dinner!!" cried Yumiko, to her younger siblings. "Hai! Onee chan!!" they shouted in unison. Yuna, Syuusuke's younger sister, rushed down to help Yumiko with the dishes. "Thank you Yuna.. Now wheres Syuusuke.. *sigh* ever though Otou sama and Okaa sama left for America he is still the same.. Syuusuke!! Come down for dinner!"

"Ok Im coming!"shouted Syuusuke as he rushed down to the dinner table.

"Itadakimasu!!" said the siblings together and they started eating.

"Syuusuke, are u still thinking about that girl?" teased Yumiko. "I cant believe you could forget her name."

"So what if I forgot? Fate will bring us together!" pouted Syuusuke who ate his dinner in a hurry to avoid anymore teasing. "thanks for dinner" he said as he walked back to his room.

Yuna started giggling."Onii chan is so funny!"

Back in the privacy of his room Syuusuke layed on his bed thinking about Sakuya. "1 month more.. and we will finally be able to see each other again.. it seems so far away.." sighed Syuusuke as he drifted off into deep sleep dreaming of their promise..


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ummm just like love hina i guess..... except to the lots of girls around the guy part at least..... pretty nice details..
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idk... maybe I'm biased because I love mushy stuff, but I think it's pretty good, I think you should add alot more detail, what you have is good, but if you add more it makes it better... ^_^
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Chapter 2: Misunderstood Love..

It was the last 2 weeks of the holidays.. Sakuya, still living at the currently empty dorms, had just been informed that her younger brother, Tatsuya, was going to transfer to Tokyo Junior High to be with his sister. He was arriving today and they would be living in the same dorm as the junior highschool and the highschool shared the same dorm. Tatsuya, handsome yet sensitive, was well built, sporty and pretty good at his studies as well, tough not as good as Sakuya's. Tatsuya has always lived in his sister's shadow and he wanted to get out of it. Sakuya was supposed to skip grades but she continued the normal stream studies so she could meet HIM. Good at almost all the things that she did and also a well mannered child Tatsuya had to meet up with these high standards that Sakuya 'set'. Annoyed by relatives who kept comparing him to his sister, he wanted to prove that he was just as good if not better at being an all rounded student. Blinded by ambition he couldnt see that his sister loved him dearly. Always leaving the best to her brother, Sakuya, being calm, composed and seemingly indifferent at all times, was misunderstood as the one who always took the best. Transfering to the prestigious Tokyo Junior High seemed to be the only way.

It was midnight and Sakuya was waiting for Tatsuya at the airport. Due to delays, Tatsuya's plane was going to be 2 hours late. As such Sakuya went to grab a bite at Starbucks. She ordered an iced latte and cheesecake and sat a a corner table. Sakuya was so tired that when she sat on the chair she felt as if her body was sinking into the chair. After finishing her food, she listened to classical music on her ipod but she was so tired that fell asleep. Then Tatsuya arrived. "I will be waiting for you at the aiport see you there Tatsuya!.. yeah right where the hell are you?"Tatsuya mumbled to himself.. A boy with short black hair walked towards the the taxi stand angrily. "I knew it! you never cared for me!" Tatsuya took a taxi to the school by himself. While in the taxi Tatsuya messaged Sakuya. It read,"I knew you wouldnt come for me.. all you ever told me was lie.. I hate you!"

Sakuya was awoken from the her phone's message tone. "Oh no.." she muttered and ran out of the airport to the taxi stand. Sakuya appeared very cool on the outside but insided she knew it hurt. "Please drive faster mister.. im in a rush."

"Srry miss but im already going at the fastest I can go.." the taxi driver said kindly.

"Thank you.." she replied politely as she looked out of the car window to look at the stars. "why did that have to happen?..." she sighed to herself.. feeling that it was all her fault.

Tatsuya had already reached the school dorm and went angrily to the general office to check in.

"Did'nt your sister go and pick you up? where is she?" asked the administrator concerned. She was a kind lady who looked a little plump but with a set of soft gentle eyes.

"She lied.. i dont think she wanted to see me.."he hissed. His eyes were full of hatred for his sister and looked as if he was about to kill someone if you did not restrain him.

"Shes not what you think.. You of all people should know better.. she cares for you she told me many wonderful things about you.." she said calmly and kindly tough she noticed his facial expression.

"ok watever you say.." he whispered as he stormed up to his room "yeah right.. care about me.."

Sakuya returned to the dorm and went straight to the general office. "srry but do you know where my brother is?" she asked hurriedly yet politely.

"oh he went to his dorm already. Its beside your room."she answered kindly.

"Thank you so much!" as Sakuya raced up to the dorms. She took the lift up. While Sakuya was in the lift she was thinking about what to say to Tatsuya. She didnt know what to do she was afraid. She was afraid that her brother would hate her. She had to think of an excuse or maybe telling him the truth would be better.. For the first time in Sakuya's life, she was at a loss at what to do. However, before she had time to think about what she had to say, she reached the 5th floor. As she walked out she bumped into someone making both of them fall to the ground in a daze.

"Tatsuya!! " exclaimed Sakuya as she lunged foward to hug her brother. "Im so sorry i fell asleep at starbucks and i was awoken by your message! im sorry Tatsuya.."

Tatsuya just pushed her back to the ground and stood up. "I dont care about your excuses.." he replied cooly as he lugged his belongings into the room. As Sakuya ran to help him he closed the door in her face. However he felt guilty about saying those harsh words.. He knew deep down that he said it in rage and he didnt really mean it..

Sakuya was stunned.. She did not expect that. She felt as though her whole world was crashing around her. She was at a loss of what to do. Completely heart broken she walked back to her room crying. She thought about all the happy times and the sad times she shared with him and yet.. Sakuya was totally heart broken.. The pain she felt was unbearable to has someone you love tell you that they hate you.. To her it was like a knife being stabbed into her heart and then twisted.. She felt herself fall into an endless dark abyss of sadness and she cried herself to sleep..







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Chapter 2: Misunderstood Love..

Tatsuya just pushed her back to the ground and stood up. "I dont care about your excuses.." he replied cooly as he lugged his belongings into the room. As Sakuya ran to help him he closed the door in her face. However he felt guilty about saying those harsh words.. He knew deep down that he said it in rage and he didnt really mean it..

Sakuya was stunned.. She did not expect that. She felt as though her whole world was crashing around her. She was at a loss of what to do. Completely heart broken she walked back to her room crying. She thought about all the happy times and the sad times she shared with him and yet.. Sakuya was totally heart broken.. The pain she felt was unbearable to has someone you love tell you that they hate you.. To her it was like a knife being stabbed into her heart and then twisted.. She felt herself fall into an endless dark abyss of sadness and she cried herself to sleep..









wao thats so real..

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