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This is my first time writing a poem in this kind of style so please tell me what you think about it


When people and love meet
they separate and separate to meet again
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody in memory for you
The sun is shining dazzlingly love has left me and I'm crying like this
Tears are flowing from the corners of my eyes,
but still the wind is passing by me strong and cheerfully
Why did we always joke around? Why did we always flirt even if you had no feelings for me?
Did I ever make a fool out of you?
Now when I look back I regret it so much
that we won't ever have those times together anymore
starting again, picking your feet off the ground, and singing this melody
I am tired of crying and falling down on my pillow only to fall asleep
when I wake up I don't feel like going through life
I will laugh and love again and dance and sing
someday a day like that will come again
I'm singing this melody, for me to be happy, and to be reminded of you
The day love made me cry, i believed the world ended and that my life had as well
but I sang a sad melody and surprisingly started smiling
I tried to forget it all but there were some things that reminded me of you
That's all what life's about I guess
I was sure I couldn't forget her
But she started to disappear from my mind
Until I started forgetting completely and the sun for me had rose again
What do I do with the regret of love that passed so quickly by me?
You smile and forget and leave the memory behind far, far, far away
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody for you
looking back at the times we had together
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Posted 5/14/08

azndisaster wrote:

This is my first time writing a poem in this kind of style so please tell me what you think about it


When people and love meet
they separate and separate to meet again
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody in memory for you
The sun is shining dazzlingly love has left me and I'm crying like this
Tears are flowing from the corners of my eyes,
but still the wind is passing by me strong and cheerfully
Why did we always joke around? Why did we always flirt even if you had no feelings for me?
Did I ever make a fool out of you?
Now when I look back I regret it so much
that we won't ever have those times together anymore
starting again, picking your feet off the ground, and singing this melody
I am tired of crying and falling down on my pillow only to fall asleep
when I wake up I don't feel like going through life
I will laugh and love again and dance and sing
someday a day like that will come again
I'm singing this melody, for me to be happy, and to be reminded of you
The day love made me cry, i believed the world ended and that my life had as well
but I sang a sad melody and surprisingly started smiling
I tried to forget it all but there were some things that reminded me of you
That's all what life's about I guess
I was sure I couldn't forget her
But she started to disappear from my mind
Until I started forgetting completely and the sun for me had rose again
What do I do with the regret of love that passed so quickly by me?
You smile and forget and leave the memory behind far, far, far away
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody for you
looking back at the times we had together


Its really amesing poem!!
is this really your first time writing like this?? well then you have made a really good job on it!
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Posted 5/14/08

Yamira wrote:


azndisaster wrote:

This is my first time writing a poem in this kind of style so please tell me what you think about it


When people and love meet
they separate and separate to meet again
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody in memory for you
The sun is shining dazzlingly love has left me and I'm crying like this
Tears are flowing from the corners of my eyes,
but still the wind is passing by me strong and cheerfully
Why did we always joke around? Why did we always flirt even if you had no feelings for me?
Did I ever make a fool out of you?
Now when I look back I regret it so much
that we won't ever have those times together anymore
starting again, picking your feet off the ground, and singing this melody
I am tired of crying and falling down on my pillow only to fall asleep
when I wake up I don't feel like going through life
I will laugh and love again and dance and sing
someday a day like that will come again
I'm singing this melody, for me to be happy, and to be reminded of you
The day love made me cry, i believed the world ended and that my life had as well
but I sang a sad melody and surprisingly started smiling
I tried to forget it all but there were some things that reminded me of you
That's all what life's about I guess
I was sure I couldn't forget her
But she started to disappear from my mind
Until I started forgetting completely and the sun for me had rose again
What do I do with the regret of love that passed so quickly by me?
You smile and forget and leave the memory behind far, far, far away
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody for you
looking back at the times we had together


Its really amesing poem!!
is this really your first time writing like this?? well then you have made a really good job on it!


ya it is haha

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Posted 5/14/08

azndisaster wrote:


Yamira wrote:


azndisaster wrote:

This is my first time writing a poem in this kind of style so please tell me what you think about it


When people and love meet
they separate and separate to meet again
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody in memory for you
The sun is shining dazzlingly love has left me and I'm crying like this
Tears are flowing from the corners of my eyes,
but still the wind is passing by me strong and cheerfully
Why did we always joke around? Why did we always flirt even if you had no feelings for me?
Did I ever make a fool out of you?
Now when I look back I regret it so much
that we won't ever have those times together anymore
starting again, picking your feet off the ground, and singing this melody
I am tired of crying and falling down on my pillow only to fall asleep
when I wake up I don't feel like going through life
I will laugh and love again and dance and sing
someday a day like that will come again
I'm singing this melody, for me to be happy, and to be reminded of you
The day love made me cry, i believed the world ended and that my life had as well
but I sang a sad melody and surprisingly started smiling
I tried to forget it all but there were some things that reminded me of you
That's all what life's about I guess
I was sure I couldn't forget her
But she started to disappear from my mind
Until I started forgetting completely and the sun for me had rose again
What do I do with the regret of love that passed so quickly by me?
You smile and forget and leave the memory behind far, far, far away
I have forgotten love and am singing this melody for you
looking back at the times we had together


Its really amesing poem!!
is this really your first time writing like this?? well then you have made a really good job on it!


ya it is haha



well as I said you did a good job on this =D keep it up!
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Posted 5/15/08
u write good poems!!!...very good!!!...Congratulations, well this is ur first time!!!...and it's awesome!!!...don't let this be the last poem!!!
Posted 5/15/08
woah i can't believe this is your first poem it's amazing, i really love free verse poems but i'm not good at writing them, great job!!
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Posted 5/17/08

kagura4 wrote:

woah i can't believe this is your first poem it's amazing, i really love free verse poems but i'm not good at writing them, great job!!


haha, no you misunderstood. This is my first time writing in this style. Its not my first poem.
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david_k_belanova wrote:

u write good poems!!!...very good!!!...Congratulations, well this is ur first time!!!...and it's awesome!!!...don't let this be the last poem!!!


haha, no you misunderstood. This is my first time writing in this style. Its not my first poem.
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