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To me my life is a charade.
Nothing you know of me is true.
But dispite all i was taught.
I did exactly what i was told not to.
I went and met good friends .
I went and met miss right.
She is the queen of my day.
She is the godess of my night.
But i have a mission to carry out.
So i have to leave all this behind.
I want to stay and care for her.
But iv already made up my mind.
Nothing can change my fate
and nothing can stop me from going.
I want to tell her so she dosent get hurt.
But the rules keep her from knowing.
Iv cried because i know the day is near.
Iv begged to change what its to late to alter.
Its the day when Leo dies and Tak is born.
Its the day when I cannot hesitate or faulter.
Now im willing to wear this mask forever.
Now im willing to live life by this lie.
Somehow iv always justified revenge.
But now iv found a reason not to try.
As long as we can just be together.
ill abandon my mission and we can run away.
So the more i get to know and love her
The more i hate the coming day
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Posted 5/17/08
i dnt like this and i dnt think it was to good but i just had to write it
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hmmm.....I find the poem fine and pretty good, since the writing stays on the motion with every line and does not walk out of the message in the poem. Its a more straight forward poem, I find it fine and well written poem. Though one thing I can say is, the way you use mission in your poem makes me wonder a bit about something hm...
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thanks and im glad you like it . what wonders could you have
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Umm at first I kinda felt crapy when U wrote that Ur leaving Ur queen of the day and goddess of the night for Ur mission but then Once U showed the loving and caring toward her and that U'll give up Ur mission for her let me tell U, u made my day..it was pretty but i dnt know y i felt like U had more to say and express..
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Posted 6/10/08
i always have more to say but at the time i just didnt have the right way to say it. that will be saveed for another poem. thanks so much and im glad u liked it
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Posted 6/28/08
wen u said mission i thought u were going on sum kind of dangerous mission lke ur gonna kill sumone but other than that i liked it
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egg45 wrote:

wen u said mission i thought u were going on sum kind of dangerous mission lke ur gonna kill sumone but other than that i liked it


who knows
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Posted 6/28/08
see now ur jus makin it sound evil
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egg45 wrote:

see now ur jus makin it sound evil


killing someone dosent make u evil if what ur killing is pure evil in its self. some evil can be ignored but some u must make a priority.
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Posted 6/28/08
so u r admittin that u were on a mission to kill sumthin evil but then u culdnt cause u wanted to stay next to ur goddes
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Posted 6/29/08

egg45 wrote:

so u r admittin that u were on a mission to kill sumthin evil but then u culdnt cause u wanted to stay next to ur goddes


im not admittin anything. im just saynig that u have to consider the circumstances before its decided who is good and who is bad.
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Posted 6/29/08

Takumoto wrote:


egg45 wrote:

so u r admittin that u were on a mission to kill sumthin evil but then u culdnt cause u wanted to stay next to ur goddes


im not admittin anything. im just saynig that u have to consider the circumstances before its decided who is good and who is bad.


alrite alrite i give up u win
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Posted 6/29/08

egg45 wrote:


Takumoto wrote:


egg45 wrote:

so u r admittin that u were on a mission to kill sumthin evil but then u culdnt cause u wanted to stay next to ur goddes


im not admittin anything. im just saynig that u have to consider the circumstances before its decided who is good and who is bad.


alrite alrite i give up u win


much obliged.
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Posted 8/7/08
I havn't comented on your stuff in a while... (sorry havn't been on cr to be able to...difficult time for me) anyway I just wanted to tell you I like this poem. It is honest and lets me get to know a part of you that I normally don't see in your work.. all in all great job.
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