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Posted 6/8/08 , edited 6/8/08
sorry it took so long I was thinking about how to continue it^^ so here goes (btw its very brief and short^^ the next part will be coming soon)


Then I heard something made out of glass chatter on the floor and the front and the back door closing with only a couple seconds of interval. I was frozen. My muscles were tense making it impossible for me to move. And my vocal cords were just not making any noise. My mouth was open from shock. But the rest of my body wouldn’t obey me.

That’s when I feel a sharp pain in my lower back. Then a line of cold made its way down to my butt and down my right legs to fall on my ankle and onto the ground.



hope you enjoyed^^ and hope you are all annoyed by my awesome cliff-hanger^^
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Posted 6/8/08
whoa!! I'm anticipating for the next part..I wanna know what happens next....
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so here goes for part 9! (btw if anybody wants me to send them the whole story just ask! ^^)


Today its Ava funeral. Yesterday I over-reacted and now she’s dead. The police think it might be a suicide since they found her with a knife in her stomach and on her wrists. I feel so bad. Today at school they announced it and I fell into sobs in the middle of class. Well all her friends did. She was such a good person.

“Hey Sarah! Are you coming? They’re going to start in 15 minutes and you’re not even dressed!” I guess mom had let Amilia in cause she was in my room yelling at me.
“I bet Ava would love to have you at her funeral. So come on! Get out of bed and get dressed.” Her voice was softer, more comforting. So I got up lazily and put my black dress on for the funeral. Erk!

Just the thought of seeing her dead in a confine ready to go under ground makes me gag! I had my dress on and I was walking to the car it was too late to go back now.

The car ride seemed never ending. The buildings passed by to get replaced with fields. Ava had always loved the fields and the little churches, so her family wanted to bury her at some random church in the middle of no where.

When we walked in the church I noticed that everybody had an upside down grin on their faces. They were all so sad about Ava death. The parents had said this would be private but it was full! People were in the back of the church unable so find a seat! But no one complained so the ceremony went on.

Some people that I didn’t know (probably some relatives of some kind) were walking up one by one on the podium to say something nice about Ava. Some said she was always smiling and positive while others said she could be aggressive and always able to speak her mind freely. When it was my turn I didn’t know what to say. I had spent to whole night trying to prepare a tiny speech at least but I came up with a sentence only; Ava was such a nice person.

So I was stuck in front of everybody she knew with nothing comforting to say. So I just improvised.

“Ava was such a nice person. She was always smiling and being happy and stuff. She was like the cement of the friend circle we have. So when everyone was depressed or just feeling down she would look on the positive side! She was just incredible.” I had nothing more to say. I’m kind of good at improvising but I have my limits. So I just walked off of the podium letting Amilia go on for her turn then Melanie went on. We all pretty much did the same speech but with different words. But everything everybody said up there was 100% true.

When the ceremony in the church was over we headed to the back of the church to bury her for good. I still couldn’t believe that I was here. Although if I hadn’t have come she would still be dead. They would still bury her. But I’m sure if she could see all the people that were here just for her she would be happy. While they were lowering everybody around was sobbing quietly. They all had the mouth and nose covered with a tissue trying to muffle they’re sobbing to let the priest talk.

As the last shovel of dirt was being picked up and directed towards the grave, I collapsed.



hope you all liked it!
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Posted 6/9/08
she fainted :[ but otherwise, next plz!!^-^
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Posted 6/9/08 , edited 6/9/08
ok I'll send the last part again cause I want to change the last bit so yeah^^

Today its Ava funeral. Yesterday I over-reacted and now she’s dead. The police think it might be a suicide since they found her with a knife in her stomach and on her wrists. I feel so bad. Today at school they announced it and I fell into sobs in the middle of class. Well all her friends did. She was such a good person.

“Hey Sarah! Are you coming? They’re going to start in 15 minutes and you’re not even dressed!” I guess mom had let Amilia in cause she was in my room yelling at me.
“I bet Ava would love to have you at her funeral. So come on! Get out of bed and get dressed.” Her voice was softer, more comforting. So I got up lazily and put my black dress on for the funeral. Erk!

Just the thought of seeing her dead in a confine ready to go under ground makes me gag! I had my dress on and I was walking to the car it was too late to go back now.

The car ride seemed never ending. The buildings passed by to get replaced with fields. Ava had always loved the fields and the little churches, so her family wanted to bury her at some random church in the middle of no where.

When we walked in the church I noticed that everybody had an upside down grin on their faces. They were all so sad about Ava death. The parents had said this would be private but it was full! People were in the back of the church unable so find a seat! But no one complained so the ceremony went on.

Some people that I didn’t know (probably some relatives of some kind) were walking up one by one on the podium to say something nice about Ava. Some said she was always smiling and positive while others said she could be aggressive and always able to speak her mind freely. When it was my turn I didn’t know what to say. I had spent to whole night trying to prepare a tiny speech at least but I came up with a sentence only; Ava was such a nice person.

So I was stuck in front of everybody she knew with nothing comforting to say. So I just improvised.

“Ava was such a nice person. She was always smiling and being happy and stuff. She was like the cement of the friend circle we have. So when everyone was depressed or just feeling down she would look on the positive side! She was just incredible.” I had nothing more to say. I’m kind of good at improvising but I have my limits. So I just walked off of the podium letting Amilia go on for her turn then Melanie went on. We all pretty much did the same speech but with different words. But everything everybody said up there was 100% true.

When the ceremony in the church was over we headed to the back of the church to bury her for good. I still couldn’t believe that I was here. Although if I hadn’t have come she would still be dead. They would still bury her. But I’m sure if she could see all the people that were here just for her she would be happy. While they were lowering everybody around was sobbing quietly. They all had the mouth and nose covered with a tissue trying to muffle they’re sobbing to let the priest talk.

Everybody was gone in the church to warm up. It was just me outside beside a pile of freshly turned dirt and a tomb stone with was engraved:
Loving daughter and friend
Ava Surya

But then I felt my body going limp and something grabbing me by the stomach and pulling me or pushing me. But after that its black out.




haha! so theres the new ending of that part^^
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Posted 6/9/08 , edited 6/9/08
ok the next part I will not post cause it is well kinda for more mature and is probably not very acceptible for this group so if you want the next part sen me a personnel message and I will send it to you^^
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O_O A i love you. You're writing from my point of view.
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remember if you want new parts of my story just ask^^ cause if I didn't post one part I cant post the next parts of my story so if you want to know what happens next just ask!
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To all the people that read my story!!! I will no longer post it here it will be on my pages on my profile^^ and it will be called "unknown love" so if you want to read every part go there^^once again *ALL RIGHTS RESERVED TO ME/DATTEBAYO_KAWAII OR ALEX!!!!*

but I will still come on the group and read stories^^ hope you enjoy my story and the stories I will write in the future^^
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