Post Reply the long haired girl and the tree of death part2
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Posted 5/21/08 , edited 5/22/08
As john forest arrived at the town he came to a small inn and there he made his first interrigation."good after noon sir may I ask you a few question?"flashing his badge,looking at john's badge the inn keeper said "sure thing stranger" while he was busy checking his guest book."I was hoping you could tell me something about the murder 23 days ago ?","sorry sir but I don't know about that all I know and all the town's people know is that the cook family died that night cause some folks can hear screams in the cook house and they were afraid to go in and check cause it might be something unkown to us it be best if you don't poke your nose into things ' said the inn keeper."well then how about a another question"said john while lighting his cigar,"ok then but this is teh last one, cause I have a schedule to keep "said the inn keeper while flipping a guest book,"ok, so what do you know about the disappearance of one maple cook she went missing after the murder after that day could you tell me something about her life"asked john while puffing a cloud of smoke,"maple she was a kind girl, teh sweetest i've ever seen she wouldn't harm a fly in fact teh flies would come to her like bears attracted to hone,she would help the poor folk and she was a good friend to her class mates"." wel, then how about the rest of the cook family could you tell me something about them"asked john while puffing another smoke from his cigar." sorry sir but I told you on more,if you want you could go to the "ROSE MARRY CAFE" and there you coud ask the waitress there, her name's becky and she's a friend of maple's".said the inn keeper while pointing to the window acrossthestreet.'thank you for your time sir,and I would be staying here of a while"said john while keeping his badge in his right pocket and threw the cigar in the waste basket near the inn keeper's guest book.

AS he was seting out he could a strange feeling staring at him but when he scaned the the surroundingshe couldn't see anyone but he had a feeling in his gut that some one's looking straight at him with cold merciless eyes,as he walked towards the cafe.entrance.As he walked in a girl with red hair girl wearing a blue head band and maid outfit came in front and said"welcome sir to the rose marry cafe ",'ah,yes do you know a ms.becky frost"ask john calmly while taking out his pen and note pad.The watress answered"I'm becky frost,why ?","I see,well then would you tell me bout the family of one missing girl named maple cook and I do believe she was your friend"said john in a calm tone,"yes she 's my friend and I hope she's alive and well and her family deserved what came to them "said becky picking up a plate and putting it on the counter.as she continued she said"every one in her family was cruel and mean to her ,eevry day I could hear her screaming when i came to her house to tell you the truth they treat her more like a slave than a daughter and at school her brothers would beat her up after class in a daily basis and she would come out all brusied and weak from all the beating she was given and after we nursed her we always imply her to leave her family but she would always say"it's ok the're might be cruel but I know they'll love me some day"and there becky started to cry and john handed her his napkin,and as she spoke again she tried to clear her and finally said " in teh morning at school we could see her covered in burns and sometimes brusies and we try to defnd her against her parents we even tried to sue them but maple had a heart as soft as light it self and she disappeared for a whole moth and on that night of teh 29th of march but I never opened it here you can have it ",and becky gave the detective,the untouched letter and then he kept it in the right side of his pocket."was there even any family member who loved maple ?asked john while ordering a cup coffee."well there was her grand mother"said becky clearing her throat once more ."who was her grand mother,could you tell me ?"asked john while sippimh the cup slowly ."wellI I don't know but we always called her grand ma bamboo cause she was very thin but had a strong body,maple also called her that and she was fond of maple too.and when she was about to die she said that she will leave all the wealth she had to maple that made her parents angry and they tied her and burned her to death but sadlly maple woke up at the wrong time and there began her hardship but she always keeps a smile to surpress the sadness with in" and there becky started to cry,
'how did you know that she was burned to death?"asked john, "well delivery was my old job and i was to deliver a boquet of roses to the cook house and there was no one there i tried to find any one bt on one was there so i tried to see if there was some one out the back yard and there i was teh parents laughing and throwing things in the burning tree and whenI looked closer i was it grand ma bamboo burned to death so I ran and left teh delivery service and i never told maple about this but i thing she woke up after I left and I felt sorry for and i told her teh truth eventual and she said" thank you for being honest bt it's not you fault "and once again becky cried and so john took another napkin>"well thank you for your time would you tell me where is the cook house,and handed becky another napkin"well, it's near the river 'said becky while clearing her tears ."thank you 'said john and went out the cafe.
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there 's still part three so ibe finished soon (I hope )
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i hope you like it
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huge inprovement from your last one. can't wait 4 teh third one!
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