My Poem
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Posted 5/22/08 , edited 5/22/08
Well i did this poem like a week ago.. its about how hard its for pplz when they arrive in Usa and know just a lil english.. in this poem im taking a train and going to my first day in skol...i guess i lack of creativity and bad grammar. Tell ME wa u think xD


Not good enough

Standing in the train
The sound of metallic rain,
The floors shakes while
I approach to my paths. (to my skol)

Here finally in the entrance
Many worried masks in a line (mask: pplz)
I do not know where to go
So I ask to one of those faces.

The mask dont get what I say
So I try to repeat it again
The marching face headway
And I feel in other world far away

In my way to the unknown
Whispers of words all in my head (a lot of whispers in the halfways of languages that i dont understand)
confused i ask again
and i end up in a cave. (in a classroom)

Listening to the enlightenment (this means listening to my teacher explanation)
Nonsense in my ears
I realized in that day
My english was not good enough.

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didnt know that.. i guess ill rewrite there and mods will del dis 1
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