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Posted 5/23/08 , edited 5/23/08
These are stories that i will put on here...these are not by me but someone else wrote them...i am posting them here from in the group that i saw these in

Fallen Angel...By:Ichigo-bankai


Episode 1

The Awakening




Yyuusei started to walk back home after one long day at school, and it was already late. As he walked a light flickered on next to him. The moon was shining brightly that night. Suddenly he heard a scream pierce the dark night. He looked around for the source of the noise and saw someone being attacked in an alley. He ran down quickly to help the person being attacked. While in full stride, Yyuusei slid and kicked out at the enemy's shin to break the bone. It seemed to have no real effect, but instead the Vampire turned around to look at Yyuusei. Yyuusei reeled back and and looked at the ghastly figure. Yyuusei saw that his enemy was not a normal one, perhaps not even human.

He stood towering over Yyuusei, fangs with blood dripping off. Eyes which seemed to shine a dark ruby red. Then he noticed the figure on the ground for the first time clearly. It appeared that it had died some time ago, a worn body, not clearly distinguishable to be man or woman, seemed as if it was deflated. Yyuusei realized that he probably wouldn't make it out alive, so he brought his fists up and spread his feet, ready to spring at any second to dodge or to hit.

Suddenly the Vampire sprinted at him teeth bared and claws extended. Then with inhuman speed the vampire seemingly disappeared and reappeared behind him. Yyuusei could do nothing and was overwhelmed as the Vampire ruffly grabbed Yyuusei's hair by the scalp, and yanked back towards the side, while the other hand pinned Yyuusei's arms to his side in a vise-like grip. Slowly the vampire opened his mouth and brought it to his neck. Yyuusei screamed as the teeth pierced his skin. Suddenly a bright light was shined down the alley and a volley of bullets punctured the Vampire's skin hitting the him all over.

The speed of the vollley of bullets thrust the vampire back against a wall and caught where it caught aflame. Yyussei passed out as he saw a woman block out the night

The TV was flashing with the most recent update. "A fault in the cooling system at the nuclear complex, results in a chemical explosion and the release of an estimated 70 to 80 tonnes of radioactive materials into the air. Thousands of people are exposed to radiation and thousands more are evacuated from their homes. It is categorised as Level 6 on the seven-point International Nuclear Events Scale (INES). " The news continued to go on, but Yyuusei couldn't hear. His mom had left an hour ago to the very same powerplant. Some one had called out sick and she had gone in to take his shift. His dad was already working there. Yyussei had no idea what to tell his sister, May.

Yyuusei had no idea why this memory suddenly came to him, but it flooded in without warning and suddenly left. The sun was shining brightly through the window onto Yyuusei's face. The light caught his hair and made it glint in the light. Yyuusei flinched away. "just a dream" he muttered. Yyuusei got up and stretched, as he did so, he noticed he looked a bit more muscular. "Wow, must be those push ups..." Yyuusei looking confused went to take his daily shower. When he got back his happy mood fell as he looked at the clock, he was late for school.

"Aaah! not again! Have a good day at school May!" Yyuusei fled down the stairs grabbing a piece of bread on the way. However it seemed that the bread had lost its taste. And again he had this weird feeling; he felt lighter, that if he jumped he wouldn't come back down. His feet hit the ground faster than he could see. Sooner than he expected, he arrived at school and surprisingly not out of breath. He wasn't late and all the students had started to arrive at school. They crowded in through the gates trying to get to their classes. As a girl walked by, he caught her scent, she smelt of fresh rain, it seemed that he could see every strand of her hair.

He seemed ensnared by her beauty. It was as if some spell had been cast upon him.Then she was gone. And the feeling vanished. The tardy bell went off and the remaining students started to run to their classes. Yyuusei now broken from his trance, bolted off up the stairs and into his class. He walked slowly and quietly trying not to be noticed to his seat. "YYUUSEI!!. Late again as usual, i shouldn't have expected you to come on time, but a person can dream cant they? This is your 9th tardy, one more and we will see what the headmaster has to say." Shouted the teacher. "Just take a seat", she said in a more quiet and controlled voice, which seemed even more scarier.

She was a somewhat attractive woman. Green hair, squared glasses, and a very firm mind to the point of stubbornness, in fact some would argue that it would require a tractor to move her, and even that is debatable. "Well, aside from this interruption, lets get back to the announcement. We have a transfer student, she has come from out of country, so please make her feel at home." Then, she stepped into the classroom....



More comes later X D




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Posted 6/20/08
cooooollllll!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted 6/23/08 , edited 6/26/08
24 June 2008 Raw cut of draft.
25 June 2008 Revising & editing.
26 June 2008 Procrastination kicking in.

Posted 6/23/08
THATS REALLY GOOD! I LIKE IT! no....I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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It's a awesome story. Gruesome, dark, mass death, I love it all! My only beef was my king was a complete coward. I could care less about how he died, cowards in the Earth kingdom should die anyway. If it's royalty, oh well.
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Thanks for those who responded. Currently in the process of editing it...
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hongyinyu wrote:

Thanks for those who responded. Currently in the process of editing it...


Very good story and precicly the reawson why I have not YET figured out how to kill you... Guess I will have to keep you occupied in other ways until then ;)

Posted 6/24/08
I want the next chapter! X D more-desu~! its really good X D
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Posted 6/25/08
ur story sux aint nuthin happy bout it
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Posted 6/25/08
n its too long to read who wanna read a long story nywaz??????? not me!!!!!!! lol
Posted 6/26/08 , edited 7/2/08
Not finished! My apologies for the delay. I have not been in a writing mood for the past couple of days.




Posted 6/27/08
WOW AMAZING! *tears of joy* i love your writng...AND IF ITS YINYU'S STORY ILL READ IT NO MATTER HOW LONG IT IS! HER STORYS ARE FREAKIN GOOD!
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Posted 6/27/08
wutev u jst sayin that to b on her good side
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vaneli wrote:

wutev u jst sayin that to b on her good side


Kodie really doesn't have to play the kiss up game with yinyu, it won't matter much. And plenty of people will read long stories, myself included, as long as the story's got quality to it and isn't all about length anyway. If it puts me to sleep within the 1st 2 paragraphs then I'm done with it.
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it's a good thing you said not finished yet or I'd be really confused since it goes from talking about a maze forest to the curse breakin'. You woulda lost me on that part. The writing's good, but I can't wait for you to go back and fill in the details so I'll stop havin' a headache every time I try to make sense of it.
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