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Posted 6/26/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:

My suspicions about the legality of weapons are raised once more by episode 5. It really seems like in this setting, possessing weapons is an even bigger deal than the real world. Perhaps we'll learn more about that later.


There is a very good reason why the weapons in the story seem so punishable. It will be explained in a later part though ...

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The retexting is an epic win! It is much easier to read the parts now! I recommend retexting as a first priority.
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really nice storyline and a good cliffhanger at the end of chapter 5. can't wait for the new chapters.
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hey! when is 6 going to be released? just wondering. i don't get to read much of these nowadays, but guys, i'm fond of your works! yeah. hahaha.
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Posted 7/20/08

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hey! when is 6 going to be released? just wondering. i don't get to read much of these nowadays, but guys, i'm fond of your works! yeah. hahaha.


i dont draw Sabbatical when i dont have motivation to do so ... and for the past month and a half i have not recieved any comments, so i stoped drawing it ... but recentlly i got 3 comments on it in the past few days ... so im back to work on it ...
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Posted 7/24/08

Havek_Reekel wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

hey! when is 6 going to be released? just wondering. i don't get to read much of these nowadays, but guys, i'm fond of your works! yeah. hahaha.


i dont draw Sabbatical when i dont have motivation to do so ... and for the past month and a half i have not recieved any comments, so i stoped drawing it ... but recentlly i got 3 comments on it in the past few days ... so im back to work on it ...


well, i don't have a lot of comments because of school, and i only did one comment for five episodes. :)) do you want me to comment (eg attack violently and mercilessly) on each chapter? :)
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Posted 7/24/08
i don't know where the story is going. it floats somewhere between cool and "uhh".
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Posted 7/24/08

atelier7 wrote:

well, i don't have a lot of comments because of school, and i only did one comment for five episodes. :)) do you want me to comment (eg attack violently and mercilessly) on each chapter? :)


I use comments from reach part to better the next one.
Whenever there is a question about it the story or sumthing is not clear i try to clarify it in the next chapter ...
like for part 6:
How did they get bak into the tower or What exactlly happened to Vatic when he was up there


atelier7 wrote:

i don't know where the story is going. it floats somewhere between cool and "uhh".


spit it out. I acctually want more negative comments. what are u "uhh"-ing about ...
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Posted 7/24/08

Havek_Reekel wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

well, i don't have a lot of comments because of school, and i only did one comment for five episodes. :)) do you want me to comment (eg attack violently and mercilessly) on each chapter? :)


I use comments from reach part to better the next one.
Whenever there is a question about it the story or sumthing is not clear i try to clarify it in the next chapter ...
like for part 6:
How did they get bak into the tower or What exactlly happened to Vatic when he was up there


atelier7 wrote:

i don't know where the story is going. it floats somewhere between cool and "uhh".


spit it out. I acctually want more negative comments. what are u "uhh"-ing about ...


that's exactly what i meant: i have no idea what's going on. there are only scraps of information and plot points, but there is too little for me to build a conclusion on. it's a flash in a pan for now.
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Posted 7/24/08

atelier7 wrote:

that's exactly what i meant: i have no idea what's going on. there are only scraps of information and plot points, but there is too little for me to build a conclusion on. it's a flash in a pan for now.


Whats a "flash in a pan"? ...
when u read part 6 did u try to remember everything from part 1 to 5?
i have to admit that not all the explinations are completelly clear but they do explain alot of things ...
each part i make i try to solve problems from the previous parts. I know which ones to fix by what comments people leave ...
And no comments ... most of the comments i get are just "good"s and "intresting"s, but they cant help me at all, especially that they can say that about any thing ...

so tell me ... What am i lacking to make this more clear?
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Posted 7/25/08

Havek_Reekel wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

that's exactly what i meant: i have no idea what's going on. there are only scraps of information and plot points, but there is too little for me to build a conclusion on. it's a flash in a pan for now.


Whats a "flash in a pan"? ...
when u read part 6 did u try to remember everything from part 1 to 5?
i have to admit that not all the explinations are completelly clear but they do explain alot of things ...
each part i make i try to solve problems from the previous parts. I know which ones to fix by what comments people leave ...
And no comments ... most of the comments i get are just "good"s and "intresting"s, but they cant help me at all, especially that they can say that about any thing ...

so tell me ... What am i lacking to make this more clear?


i can't tell what it is yet; it's on the tip of my tongue for sure. let's just say i feel disconnected from the story.

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Posted 7/31/08

Havek_Reekel wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

that's exactly what i meant: i have no idea what's going on. there are only scraps of information and plot points, but there is too little for me to build a conclusion on. it's a flash in a pan for now.


Whats a "flash in a pan"? ...
when u read part 6 did u try to remember everything from part 1 to 5?
i have to admit that not all the explinations are completelly clear but they do explain alot of things ...
each part i make i try to solve problems from the previous parts. I know which ones to fix by what comments people leave ...
And no comments ... most of the comments i get are just "good"s and "intresting"s, but they cant help me at all, especially that they can say that about any thing ...

so tell me ... What am i lacking to make this more clear?


I haven't read 6 yet, but so far, I am not experiencing what Atelier7 is. Or rather, I am experiencing it, just in a different way. I believe that a lack of clarity can be disasterous for a story, but not for yours. I feel constantly as if the characters are just ever so slightly different from I, but I find it interesting, not irritating. In other words, I somewhat enjoy being kept in the dark. At the same time, what he said really is true, althought I don't care as much as he does. Quite honestly, I'm not able to articulate it any more than Atelier7, but I believe it just has something to do with the appearance of details and characters out of nowhere.
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Episode 6 was just perfect. I love the idea of humans making their beliefs come true. In fact, it is an idea that I am obsessed with, which is one of the reasons I love Terry Pratchett.

A more general complaint: there is only one male character, and the female characters aren't all that easy to differentiate. It isn't usually a problem, but in episode 5, unless I'm very much mistaken, Tylin changed her hair-style while on the beach. This was very confusing for me. Since we're talking about confusion in episode 5, I might as well mention that I had a lot of trouble following the events on the beach. I was already confused about why they were suddenly on a beach, and then you confuse me further with the whole "stash of weapons" thing. Altogether, there are just too many lines of dialogue that I had to read several times to understand.

The manga has the optimal amount of mystery: not too much, and not too little. Some events and lines really do have interesting foreshadowing elements, but it also isn't a barrage of hints.

Your setting is satisfactory. I'm wondering why you needed to set it in a giant tower. Perhaps that is the only place which is tall enough to have a stairway to heaven. If it's not that, I can't imagine what it is, but it doesn't really bother me.
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Posted 8/22/08
I read the rest of the manga. Can't wait to see more of it.
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now, chapter 7 is the best so far.
got me more insight into the story than the others.
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