"The Dark Moon" by itachi643

Here is my anime.The name is The Dark Moon.

Created by itachi643

So after you read it,please comment on it if you liked it.I will try to put more if you actually like it.If not can you give me suggestions?

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Episode 1-The Beginning.

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Episode 2 - The Adventure Starts

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After meeting The Mysterous Man,Percy Disappered with the man.Percy said "What Happened?I Thought we were in the city?"Instead they were in a giant room."So here we are!"said the man.
"So what's happening?"asked Percy.
"Why Don't we start of introducing ourselves?"replied The Mysterous man.
"Uh...Ok" said Percy.
"My Name is Luke",said the man.
"I'm Percy".
"So what were those things?"Percy asked impatiantly.
"Moon Troops",replied Luke.
"What?"Percy said.
"You know those wierd soldiers?"asked Luke.
"Yes"said Percy.
"Those were Moon Troops".
"So---"
"Let me say the story",inturuped Luke.
"They were controlled by the Luna King.The Luna King controls soldiers,Demons,and monsters.They invaded Earth.So we Solar Troops,Fight them.Our Goal is to eliminate the evil Luna King.So we use powerful spells,or fight with our own Power.We,the Solar Troops have diffrent type of power.For Example,my Black Beam i shot,was my kind of power."
"So that was a spell?"Percy asked.
"Exactly",replied Luke."We need to eliminate the Luna King.His Goal is to rule Earth.I came to save you because you have great talent.You can become a Solar Troop and help us."
"So how do i get the power and spells?"asked Percy.
"I'll Teach you."replied Luke."We will be a team."We'll go on a Journey to eliminate the Luna King."
"Alright! I'll help."replied Percy.
"Great!"said Luke.I'll introduce you to the Solar King,our Master.
"Sure"replied Percy.
Then we went to the King.So Luke,I see you brought Percy here."
"Yes i did",said Luke.
"Great.So hi Percy,I'm the Solar King."
"Hi",replied Percy.
"So i see you want to join the troops,am i right?"asked the king.
"Yes",replied Percy in an excited way.
The King Whisper something."Huh?"asked Percy.
"Aaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!"Shouted Percy."What?I feel power flowing through me."
"I used a special spell that gave you power.But it you aren't super strong.You must Train to become better.Luke will be training you,isn't that right Luke?"
"Yes i will try my best!"replied Luke.
"Great.said the king.Percy,your adventure starts now.Travel with Luke and try to eliminate the Luna King."
"Yes" said Percy.
"Percy",said Luke."Let's go and eliminate the Luna King."
"Sure",said Percy.Then Luke and Percy disappered.
"So where do we go?"asked Percy.
"That way",replied Luke,as he pointed North.
"Sure."said Percy.
Luke said,"No time for traveling now."
"Why?"asked Percy.
"Look ahead",said Luke.
"What's that!?"asked Percy while Trembling with fear.
"AAAAAARRRRRRRRHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!"
"It's a Demon,controlled by the Luna King",said Luke.We need to eliminate it Quickly!Charge! Demanded Luke.
"I'll Kill you human!"Shouted the Demon."I'll Kill you too you Solar Troop!

Episode 3 - Unexpected Power

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As Percy and Luke ran towards the demon Percy jumped,but Percy noticed he was high in the sky.
"Whoa!Cool Power!" said Percy.
Luke replied "Hurry up,this demon is powerful."
"Sure,"replied Percy."Now lets see what kind of powers i have."
"AARRGGGHHH!!!" shouted the demon."Are you this weak?!I can finish a tiny human like you!"
The Demon opened his mouth,and all of a sudden out came 30 Soldiers,similar to the ones Percy encountered last time.
"We will have our revenge from last time!" shouted the soldiers.
The Soldiers put there hands in front and all of them shot out Beams all towards Luke.
"So we can fight again?"asked Luke."As the mysterious darkness rise,i destroy!"
Then Percy noticed that that was the saying where Luke shot out that Black Beam again.Out of Luke's hands came out a Black Beam.The Beam hit the other beam and caused an explosion.
"Get back!"Demanded Luke.
Percy did as what Luke said.Then the explosion became bigger and bigger.
"Run!" shouted Luke."It'll kill us!."
Percy and Luke ran and ran trying to escape the explosion.When they coudn't run anymore the explosion disappered.
"Thats it!" The Demon shouted.
"What?!Thats impossible!You survived!"
"I bet i'll destroy you quickly."
"How is that?" asked Luke.
"Look at yourself!You're bleeding!
Luke and Percy looked at thereself,and the demon was right.Percy and Luke were all bleeding.
"But how!?"asked Percy and Luked with fear.
"Its called a certain power."replied the Demon."Anyways,i'll start killing you now!"
"Damn it!" shouted Percy."We lost."
"Maybe not.Try using your powers.The king told me that you have an ability to use fire and water elements."
"Elements?" said Percy in a confused way.
"Just try anything with fire and water!"
The Demon said " Here i go!"
The Demon opened his mouth,and out came another group of soldiers,but this time,there was 50 of them.
"Ok i'll try anything."
Percy concentrated as hard as he can.Then he tried to shoot out a beam of fire to the group of soldiers,but out came just a little fire.
"What!?" said Percy in a confused way.
"Looks like Percy coudn't control his power,"said Luke."I guess i'll have to finish it again.As the mysterous darkness rise,i destroy!"
Then out came a Black beam attacking the soldiers.It hit the group of soldiers,and caused a huge smoke in the air.When the smoked cleared,the soldiers was still standing.
"What?!" asked Luke.
"You can't deafeat us!" shouted the Demon.
"But how?" said Luke.
*The Demon laughs hard*
"Were invincible!" shouted the Demon.
Percy concentrated harder and harder,trying to use anything that helps.Then Percy heard a voice coming to him.Percy opened his eyes and heard a strange noise.As if someone was trying to say something to him.
"Percy,are you okay?"asked Luke.
Percy coudn't respond.Percy thought in his mind,What's happening to me?!

To be Continued...

Episode 4 - A Spirit?!

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Member Tonou Tamekaze Level 25 Boy itachi643 8093 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Akatsuki's Hideout Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/27/08, edited 7/17/08 Here is my anime.The name is The Dark Moon. Created by itachi643 So after you read it,please comment on it if you liked it.I will try to put more if you actually like it.If not can you give me suggestions? Other Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show Summary Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show Percy is a 15 year old boy thats smart,and have an IQ of 203.Percy is a kind,brave and a honest person.But when he saw these weird soldiers,he had to run.When he coudn't run anymore,he thought his life would end.Until he meets a new friend.After that,he soons discovers his life was going to become a great adventure.(Read the episodes for more) Techneques shown in This Anime Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show Techneques: Black Beam/Saying: "As the mysterous darkness rise,i destroy"/Used by: Luke Episode 1-The Beginning. Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show On one Stormy Night,a dark rock hit the city with tremendous power.Percy,a 15 year old boy,saw this rock.He ran Towards it.While running,he thought in his mind"What is happening?".Then he stopped.Right in front of him,He saw the rock.It was huge.Percy coudn't imagine why this had happened.All of a sudden,the rock dissappered and around 30 weird looking Soldiers came out.One of them said"A Human!" Percy said"Huh?" "Get that Human!"Shouted one of the Soldiers.Then they charged at Percy.Percy ran and ran,but whatever he does the weird soldiers were catching up.He ran,until a dead end.Percy Shouted out"What do you want with me?" One of the soldiers replied"That we can't tell you".Now the soldiers came closer and closer by the second.Percy thought "I shoudn't had come to that rock the first place!".Just then,a Black Beam shot most of the soldiers."What Happened?" "Stay back!"Commanded a Mysterous person. "Sure"replied Percy,as he stepped back a little. "It can't be!"said the last 2 remaining Soldiers. "You guys are FINISHED!"said the mysterous person.The Mysterous person whisper something that i didn't understand. "What did you say?"asked Percy,"I didn't hear." Then he whispered something again,and shot that same Black Beam again eliminating the last two soilders. "You okay?"asked the mysterous person. "Yes"I am,replied Percy. "Good"said the Mysterous man."I'll be going now." "Wait!"Shouted Percy. The Mysterous man said"What?" "What was that?"Percy said with confusion. "Hmm"Should I tell this person said the mysterous man in his mind. "Come with me and i'll explain everything."Said the man. "Uh...Ok"said Percy with a confused look on his face. "No need to be worried."said the man."I'll explain later." "Sure"said Percy. Then the Mysterous man dissappered,like Percy did from the man's Power. To Be Continued... Episode 2 - The Adventure Starts Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show After meeting The Mysterous Man,Percy Disappered with the man.Percy said "What Happened?I Thought we were in the city?"Instead they were in a giant room."So here we are!"said the man. "So what's happening?"asked Percy. "Why Don't we start of introducing ourselves?"replied The Mysterous man. "Uh...Ok" said Percy. "My Name is Luke",said the man. "I'm Percy". "So what were those things?"Percy asked impatiantly. "Moon Troops",replied Luke. "What?"Percy said. "You know those wierd soldiers?"asked Luke. "Yes"said Percy. "Those were Moon Troops". "So---" "Let me say the story",inturuped Luke. "They were controlled by the Luna King.The Luna King controls soldiers,Demons,and monsters.They invaded Earth.So we Solar Troops,Fight them.Our Goal is to eliminate the evil Luna King.So we use powerful spells,or fight with our own Power.We,the Solar Troops have diffrent type of power.For Example,my Black Beam i shot,was my kind of power." "So that was a spell?"Percy asked. "Exactly",replied Luke."We need to eliminate the Luna King.His Goal is to rule Earth.I came to save you because you have great talent.You can become a Solar Troop and help us." "So how do i get the power and spells?"asked Percy. "I'll Teach you."replied Luke."We will be a team."We'll go on a Journey to eliminate the Luna King." "Alright! I'll help."replied Percy. "Great!"said Luke.I'll introduce you to the Solar King,our Master. "Sure"replied Percy. Then we went to the King.So Luke,I see you brought Percy here." "Yes i did",said Luke. "Great.So hi Percy,I'm the Solar King." "Hi",replied Percy. "So i see you want to join the troops,am i right?"asked the king. "Yes",replied Percy in an excited way. The King Whisper something."Huh?"asked Percy. "Aaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!"Shouted Percy."What?I feel power flowing through me." "I used a special spell that gave you power.But it you aren't super strong.You must Train to become better.Luke will be training you,isn't that right Luke?" "Yes i will try my best!"replied Luke. "Great.said the king.Percy,your adventure starts now.Travel with Luke and try to eliminate the Luna King." "Yes" said Percy. "Percy",said Luke."Let's go and eliminate the Luna King." "Sure",said Percy.Then Luke and Percy disappered. "So where do we go?"asked Percy. "That way",replied Luke,as he pointed North. "Sure."said Percy. Luke said,"No time for traveling now." "Why?"asked Percy. "Look ahead",said Luke. "What's that!?"asked Percy while Trembling with fear. "AAAAAARRRRRRRRHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!" "It's a Demon,controlled by the Luna King",said Luke.We need to eliminate it Quickly!Charge! Demanded Luke. "I'll Kill you human!"Shouted the Demon."I'll Kill you too you Solar Troop! Episode 3 - Unexpected Power Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show As Percy and Luke ran towards the demon Percy jumped,but Percy noticed he was high in the sky. "Whoa!Cool Power!" said Percy. Luke replied "Hurry up,this demon is powerful." "Sure,"replied Percy."Now lets see what kind of powers i have." "AARRGGGHHH!!!" shouted the demon."Are you this weak?!I can finish a tiny human like you!" The Demon opened his mouth,and all of a sudden out came 30 Soldiers,similar to the ones Percy encountered last time. "We will have our revenge from last time!" shouted the soldiers. The Soldiers put there hands in front and all of them shot out Beams all towards Luke. "So we can fight again?"asked Luke."As the mysterious darkness rise,i destroy!" Then Percy noticed that that was the saying where Luke shot out that Black Beam again.Out of Luke's hands came out a Black Beam.The Beam hit the other beam and caused an explosion. "Get back!"Demanded Luke. Percy did as what Luke said.Then the explosion became bigger and bigger. "Run!" shouted Luke."It'll kill us!." Percy and Luke ran and ran trying to escape the explosion.When they coudn't run anymore the explosion disappered. "Thats it!" The Demon shouted. "What?!Thats impossible!You survived!" "I bet i'll destroy you quickly." "How is that?" asked Luke. "Look at yourself!You're bleeding! Luke and Percy looked at thereself,and the demon was right.Percy and Luke were all bleeding. "But how!?"asked Percy and Luked with fear. "Its called a certain power."replied the Demon."Anyways,i'll start killing you now!" "Damn it!" shouted Percy."We lost." "Maybe not.Try using your powers.The king told me that you have an ability to use fire and water elements." "Elements?" said Percy in a confused way. "Just try anything with fire and water!" The Demon said " Here i go!" The Demon opened his mouth,and out came another group of soldiers,but this time,there was 50 of them. "Ok i'll try anything." Percy concentrated as hard as he can.Then he tried to shoot out a beam of fire to the group of soldiers,but out came just a little fire. "What!?" said Percy in a confused way. "Looks like Percy coudn't control his power,"said Luke."I guess i'll have to finish it again.As the mysterous darkness rise,i destroy!" Then out came a Black beam attacking the soldiers.It hit the group of soldiers,and caused a huge smoke in the air.When the smoked cleared,the soldiers was still standing. "What?!" asked Luke. "You can't deafeat us!" shouted the Demon. "But how?" said Luke. The Demon laughs hard "Were invincible!" shouted the Demon. Percy concentrated harder and harder,trying to use anything that helps.Then Percy heard a voice coming to him.Percy opened his eyes and heard a strange noise.As if someone was trying to say something to him. "Percy,are you okay?"asked Luke. Percy coudn't respond.Percy thought in his mind,What's happening to me?! To be Continued... Episode 4 - A Spirit?! New Spoiler Alert!!! click to hide or show "Urgh...What's happening to me?!" Percy thought."It's hurting." "Percy!" shouted Luke."Wake up!" "I guess he's distracted.Troops,attack!" shouted the demon. Then all of the troops charged at Luke and Percy.Luke was frustrated,and didn't know what to do.He knew he is no match aganst the troops and the demon. "Urgh..." said Percy. "Ouch its hurting more."Percy thought."If this keeps up,i'm going to die!" Then Percy heard in his mind,"St-Stay......Ca-Calm." "Huh?" Percy thought. The troops were heading towards Percy and Luke. "Damn.Percy is not going to fight." All troops were running faster and faster then before. "I got to avoid them at least.As the Darkness rise,i destroy!" Luke send out a Black Beam towards the troops. "One beam can't take out my troops!"said the demon."We'll destroy you!" "Stay Calm"..said a mysterous voice in Percy's mind."I-I can he-help. "Who are you,what are you and where are you?!"Percy thought. The beam hit the troops from coming closer,but most of the troops were still standing and continued running.Then while running,they put there hands infront of them,and shot out thin beams to Luke and Percy.Luke grabbed Percy and ran,avoiding getting hit.Luke ran and hid somewhere with Percy.Luke was all scratched up,and was bleeding all over. "Are you damaging me?!"Percy thought. "N-No.I'm a spi-spirit that ca-can help." "You're not helping though!" shouted Percy in his mind. "Come out Luke!"Stop hinding!" shouted out the demon. "I'll lend my powers to you Pe-Percy." "Great,i can't do anything but hide",said Luke in his mind. After Luke said that in his mind,Percy opened his eyes. "Percy!"said Luke in excitement. But once Percy opened his eyes,he glowed. "Uh..Percy,are you alright?" asked Luke in a frightened way. "Where's the damn demon!" shouted Percy like a monster. Percy voiced changed,he glowed brighter,and he has a scary look on his face. "I'm here you fool!" shouted the demon. Percy jumped up,higher than before and stood infront of the demon. "Now i'll kill you!" shouted Percy. To be Continued...
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Moderator The_8th_Sin 8605 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Labs, towns, citi... Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/28/08 The opening chapter seems rather random. Wouldn't it be better to include a little bit of the main characters normal life before he meets his destiny? Also what do you mean by the second to last line? How was Percy in the man's power?
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Creator Yyuusei Level 3 Boy Ichigo-bankai 10261 cr points Send Message: 19 / M / If i knew that, i... Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/28/08 Well... It is a great idea, but there are a couple things. Number one- You are switching the tense, decide if u want it past or present, Number two- There are some grammatical errors. Number three- Instead of saying, the man said in his mind, you could say the man thought. Just an idea Number four- This is a tip i got from a friend, when someone speaks, give them their own line. Number Five- I like to italicize things if it is a thought. Dont get the wrong impression, I love the idea, and i want you to continue with it. I was just pointing out things so you can improve. If you would like help, i would love to give it. Just ask. Also, is your spacebar broken? because there are times when there is no place between words.
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Member Tonou Tamekaze Level 25 Boy itachi643 8093 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Akatsuki's Hideout Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/28/08 The_8th_Sin wrote: The opening chapter seems rather random. Wouldn't it be better to include a little bit of the main characters normal life before he meets his destiny? Also what do you mean by the second to last line? How was Percy in the man's power? He wasn't.The man used his power.
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Member Tonou Tamekaze Level 25 Boy itachi643 8093 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Akatsuki's Hideout Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/28/08 Ichigo-bankai wrote: Well... It is a great idea, but there are a couple things. Number one- You are switching the tense, decide if u want it past or present, Number two- There are some grammatical errors. Number three- Instead of saying, the man said in his mind, you could say the man thought. Just an idea Number four- This is a tip i got from a friend, when someone speaks, give them their own line. Number Five- I like to italicize things if it is a thought. Dont get the wrong impression, I love the idea, and i want you to continue with it. I was just pointing out things so you can improve. If you would like help, i would love to give it. Just ask. Also, is your spacebar broken? because there are times when there is no place between words. Ya.My spacebar is bad.It works sometimes
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Moderator The_8th_Sin 8605 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Labs, towns, citi... Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/28/08 itachi643 wrote: The_8th_Sin wrote: The opening chapter seems rather random. Wouldn't it be better to include a little bit of the main characters normal life before he meets his destiny? Also what do you mean by the second to last line? How was Percy in the man's power? He wasn't.The man used his power. What power?!
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Creator Yyuusei Level 3 Boy Ichigo-bankai 10261 cr points Send Message: 19 / M / If i knew that, i... Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 5/28/08 itachi643 wrote: Ichigo-bankai wrote: Well... It is a great idea, but there are a couple things. Number one- You are switching the tense, decide if u want it past or present, Number two- There are some grammatical errors. Number three- Instead of saying, the man said in his mind, you could say the man thought. Just an idea Number four- This is a tip i got from a friend, when someone speaks, give them their own line. Number Five- I like to italicize things if it is a thought. Dont get the wrong impression, I love the idea, and i want you to continue with it. I was just pointing out things so you can improve. If you would like help, i would love to give it. Just ask. Also, is your spacebar broken? because there are times when there is no place between words. Ya.My spacebar is bad.It works sometimes Alright, well hope my advice helped. If u need help, just tell me.
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Member atelier7 1140 cr points Send Message: 25 / M Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 6/4/08 um... you need to fix it up.. it's good but not good enough to merit greater attention. but there's an incredible amount of potential, and if you want i can help harness it..
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Member Tonou Tamekaze Level 25 Boy itachi643 8093 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Akatsuki's Hideout Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 7/15/08 thanks i'll ask you for suggestions when i need help
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Member Tonou Tamekaze Level 25 Boy itachi643 8093 cr points Send Message: 20 / M / Akatsuki's Hideout Offline	Permalink Reply Quote Posted 7/16/08, edited 7/16/08 The_8th_Sin wrote: itachi643 wrote: The_8th_Sin wrote: The opening chapter seems rather random. Wouldn't it be better to include a little bit of the main characters normal life before he meets his destiny? Also what do you mean by the second to last line? How was Percy in the man's power? He wasn't.The man used his power. What power?! Power that he has
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