Post Reply The forest in spring
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Posted 5/29/08
The wind
making the trees
sing their song
in the
silenc
as soon
the sun will
shine
over the moutains
whit their
white dress
from the harsh winter
that now is gone
for the beautifull
colour of spring

Let the birds
sing
and fill
your heart whit joy
all life
is coming back
from a place
that has
sleeped
in such
a long time

So now
come out in
the sun
away from
the shadows
into
the peacefull
place
whit the song
of joy

But soon
the snow
will fall agein
but reameber
the beautifull spring
will allways come

Hop eyou guys like it.
This poem is for my homeroom teacher. I promised him on the way back from the class trip that I would make him a poem so I wanted to as you guys if thia is bad or good and pleas be honest >.< just tell me if it suck cuse I wont get hurt or anything like that
Posted 5/29/08
it's really good, inspiring!
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Posted 5/29/08

kagura4 wrote:

it's really good, inspiring!


THank you very much ^^
Posted 5/29/08
wow awesome poem I love the poems you put
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Posted 5/30/08

Kaede917 wrote:

wow awesome poem I love the poems you put


Thank you very very much =D
Posted 5/30/08

Yamira wrote:


Kaede917 wrote:

wow awesome poem I love the poems you put


Thank you very very much =D


you're welcome ^^
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Posted 6/15/08
i liked how you constructed the poem with the description and such.. but check the spelling. But over all, its good! nice work. :]
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farfalla_12 wrote:

i liked how you constructed the poem with the description and such.. but check the spelling. But over all, its good! nice work. :]


My spelling suck xD that I know but I dont allways care =P LOL
thank you very much !
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