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Posted 6/8/08 , edited 6/27/08
Episode 1: The rise of Light Hero, Hercules.


Well, until today I still can’t believe my eyes. It just like a dream that I manage to save the world by putting a belt on my waist and shout HENSHIN! Who am I? My name is Shinichi Mimura, currently age 39 and I am a journalist. I still remember clearly 20 years ago, I was still a college student who addicted to super hero story. My favorite super hero? Of coz none other than Kamen Rider. 20 years ago, Trans-X Virtual Simulation Corporation launched an online game titled “Kamen Rider World Online”. In order to play that game, first of all I need to go to the company and register myself. In the registration, I choose Kamen Rider Faiz as my Avatar in game (which mean later when I log in to the game I play as Faiz). After complete the registration form, I was given a DVD to install the game. I was very happy that time and rushing back to home to install the game. When I log in for the first time, I received an email from “Unknown Sender”. I thought that was an email from GM and I opened it.

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Posted 6/8/08
It's quite a good story...but there are grammatical errors here and there...but overall (4.67143245374 out of 5)
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err sorry for d bad eng...i know my eng was not good =(
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Posted 6/10/08
GREAT READ!!!
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tq ^^...would u like me continue ep 2? i will update it once a week..i m bz wif my assignment nowday..
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Posted 6/16/08
wasnt it's too early for kazaf to appear? and... i think ur story is too straight foward. put some drama in it.
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Posted 6/16/08
ah thx for d comment..i know i just a amateur as a script writter..so i would like to polish my skill on it..hope to receive more comment on u guys..i will improve myself =)
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Posted 6/20/08
SO there will be only 2 riders on ur story? just asking... Lolz. ur lucky, i haven't finished my script in Valder and now i changed it to another rider lolz... But im not fin yet... lol
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Posted 6/20/08
if u need help editing ur script i could help pm me if u need help and i'l give u my e-mail.....
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Posted 6/20/08
not bad...but needs more storyline...
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Posted 6/22/08

kinn33 wrote:

SO there will be only 2 riders on ur story? just asking... Lolz. ur lucky, i haven't finished my script in Valder and now i changed it to another rider lolz... But im not fin yet... lol


hope to c ur rider story too =)..n yea only 2 rider in my story


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if u need help editing ur script i could help pm me if u need help and i'l give u my e-mail.....


thx in advance 1st..could u send me ur email? lol....



zafz wrote:

not bad...but needs more storyline...


thx for d comment..i m improving on it..


I having exam this week..so i havent finish my ep 3...=(
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Posted 6/25/08
thats was very creative I like it
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thats was very creative I like it


thx for the comment =)..i'll work hard on it bcoz i set this as 1 of my project coming next 4 years
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Posted 6/28/08
Hmm if you want help on the grammar, i can gladly edit the chapters for you...
Great Fanfic!!! Keep it up!!!
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yea i m glad someone offer help for me =)...how m i suppose to send d doc for u to edit?
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