Post Reply something I came up with. I'm not sure if it's good
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The Sworn Prophecy


I counted each car as it zoomed by,"1,2,3,4,5........." I sighed. I was bored out of my mind. It was still the early morning, and everyone else was sleeping. I saw Takashi sensei, talking to the bus driver, telling him of his turtle shell collection I bet. I looked back at the window. We were passing a meadow full of grazing cows and sheep now. We were suppose to go to the Memorial Museum today. Unfortunately, their t-rex collapsed, and a little boy thinking that it was "still alive" ran wildly around the museum, shouting, " IT'S ALIVE! IT'S ALIVE!!!!!" and knocked down 65 ancient vases, in one round, and trust me, they weren't small. I'm not surprise, if they sue the little poor guy. So instead, we're going to this ancient temple, that was said to have been around for almost 14 billion years, without any repairs. I nearly died of laughter, only a fool would believe that. What temple, that has been around for 14 billion years, and without repairs, can still be standing. And here's another crazy thing. They say some kind of curse was on that thing. Seriously, I think people are getting more retarded each day.
"Okay everybody, only 35 minutes to go before arriving, so get you're belongings, and be ready." I looked up. Takashi sensei was as tall as ever. His long jet black hair, looked so smooth and perfect, that no matter which direction you sit from you can never see a strand of hair sticking out. I think he combs his hair when no one's looking. His eyes were a deep shade of green, that seems to pratically glow, since his skin is like ultra white and illuminated as bright as the moon . And whenever you look at him, his eyes seem to pierce through you, like he's reading you're mind. I don't know why, but I think he's a vampire. He acts extremely different from anyone else I know, and he always has this mysterious aura surrounding him, giving him this cool impression, making all the girls drool over him. It's not a pleasant sight.


(tell me what you thin so farr..)
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Posted 6/8/08
I like it so far^^ but its weird how at the beginning you say that everyone is sleepy then all of a sudden he pops up saying they're leaving in 35 minutes^^ but I like it^^ keep going
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dattebayo_kawaii wrote:

I like it so far^^ but its weird how at the beginning you say that everyone is sleepy then all of a sudden he pops up saying they're leaving in 35 minutes^^ but I like it^^ keep going


lol oops, now that you mentioned it.....lol, sry, I'm still a realllllllly bad amatuer... I'll change it a bit..
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Posted 6/9/08
i dink itz good so far^-^ but just remember dat "you're" means "you are" nd "your" means "itz yours" :]
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