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Posted 6/9/08
Well about this poem I don't know yet on which m=name to settle maybe i'll think of another name..anywayz i hope whom ever would care to read it would find it enjoyable and thank you ^-^


Speechless or Rainbow Of Thoghts havn't decided yet

I looked at you and I felt totally speechless
Wondering how I was bedazzled by you
I glanced at the time though it seemed so endless
As if it’s waiting for us to be one as in me and you
I looked into your eyes this time and I was completely clueless
Whether or not I fell so deeply into you
I thought to myself again would life without you be meaningless
Though I couldn’t clarify it as I gazed through the hue
I thought for the last time for an answer that’d be so timeless
Yet, I couldn’t find anything better than “I’m always thinking of you”
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very nice. i was hoping for more like maybe 1 or 2 more lines because what i read made me think there was more to the poem. you did very good ,great job
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Posted 6/11/08

Takumoto wrote:

very nice. i was hoping for more like maybe 1 or 2 more lines because what i read made me think there was more to the poem. you did very good ,great job


actualy thier is more to the poem but still i'm trying to think how to give it its justice of an ending..its good u realized that..
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