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Here are some of my story titles. i'll post the one that piques the most interest:

mArKeD - a story about a young toymaker who wakes up to find himself in a surreal world. greatly inspired by the game "the world ends with you" and the flash series LOZ: UO.

The Magic Collector - chronicles the adventures of a man whose job is to seek out novel magical spells and integrate them into the Arcane System, a network of magical 'veins' that allow wizards to utilize magic without exhausting their own magical power.

Zombie - the tale of an immortal's efforts to escape an organization's efforts to harness his power against his will.

Miruo Chapter - a harem in the view of the harem lead male's bumbling best friend. (should be hilarious, no doubt).

i'd post more but the better ideas might get stolen...
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Posted 6/15/08
Zombie picked my interest,
Posted 6/15/08
I agree, Zombie picked my interes right now. mArkeD is also very good.
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Posted 6/21/08
just as expected.. :)) i'll have to story-format zombie now. hmm. i'll wait for more votes. :d
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Zombie

Prologue to Death

"Aw, you're leaving already?"
The man turned around and patted the child on the head. "Hahaha, can't help it. I'm a wanderer."
The child pouted. "But you'll be going back" - he pinches the man's left thigh - "right?"
"Ow, ow, all right, all right, I promise."

The man slung his bag over his shoulder and went outside the house. He swore he saw several people waving at him, bidding him farewell, from the village at the bottom of the hill. He smiled, "Twenty, no, twenty-five. I might be back here in twenty-five years. Well, maybe."

Hidden behind hedges and trees, a masked soldier observed a man trekking up the hill. He activated his com mike. "Charlie-3 reporting. Target is approaching point X. Predicted time of arrival is one hour and fifteen minutes."

"Copy that. Arm yourself and tail the target. Report changes and anything unusual."
"Roger." The soldier pulled out a Derez pistol and felt a surge of adrenaline. The thought of following a Z-level criminal made him shiver a bit. I can make big bucks from this, though, he thought.

A rustle of leaves later, the found himself lying on the ground with a pained stomach.
"Hello there. Mind if we talk for a bit?"

- it's just some of the first parts of the chapter. i feel too lazy to post everything.
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atelier7 wrote:

Zombie

Prologue to Death

"Aw, you're leaving already?"
The man turned around and patted the child on the head. "Hahaha, can't help it. I'm a wanderer."
The child pouted. "But you'll be going back" - he pinches the man's left thigh - "right?"
"Ow, ow, all right, all right, I promise."

The man slung his bag over his shoulder and went outside the house. He swore he saw several people waving at him, bidding him farewell, from the village at the bottom of the hill. He smiled, "Twenty, no, twenty-five. I might be back here in twenty-five years. Well, maybe."

Hidden behind hedges and trees, a masked soldier observed a man trekking up the hill. He activated his com mike. "Charlie-3 reporting. Target is approaching point X. Predicted time of arrival is one hour and fifteen minutes."

"Copy that. Arm yourself and tail the target. Report changes and anything unusual."
"Roger." The soldier pulled out a Derez pistol and felt a surge of adrenaline. The thought of following a Z-level criminal made him shiver a bit. I can make big bucks from this, though, he thought.

A rustle of leaves later, the found himself lying on the ground with a pained stomach.
"Hello there. Mind if we talk for a bit?"

- it's just some of the first parts of the chapter. i feel too lazy to post everything.


That last paragraph of the story doesn't quite make sense. I like the rest of it though.
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Posted 7/5/08

The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

Zombie

Prologue to Death

"Aw, you're leaving already?"
The man turned around and patted the child on the head. "Hahaha, can't help it. I'm a wanderer."
The child pouted. "But you'll be going back" - he pinches the man's left thigh - "right?"
"Ow, ow, all right, all right, I promise."

The man slung his bag over his shoulder and went outside the house. He swore he saw several people waving at him, bidding him farewell, from the village at the bottom of the hill. He smiled, "Twenty, no, twenty-five. I might be back here in twenty-five years. Well, maybe."

Hidden behind hedges and trees, a masked soldier observed a man trekking up the hill. He activated his com mike. "Charlie-3 reporting. Target is approaching point X. Predicted time of arrival is one hour and fifteen minutes."

"Copy that. Arm yourself and tail the target. Report changes and anything unusual."
"Roger." The soldier pulled out a Derez pistol and felt a surge of adrenaline. The thought of following a Z-level criminal made him shiver a bit. I can make big bucks from this, though, he thought.

A rustle of leaves later, the found himself lying on the ground with a pained stomach.
"Hello there. Mind if we talk for a bit?"

- it's just some of the first parts of the chapter. i feel too lazy to post everything.


That last paragraph of the story doesn't quite make sense. I like the rest of it though.


yeah, i understand. i was thinking about it in a visual format; that part was supposed to have visual accompaniment. *sigh* like i said i need to story-format it, since all my ideas are in manga or anime form.

Posted 7/5/08
"Zombie" sounds great. Hope you continue it. The plot summary of the story picked my interes on the first, but "Prologue to Death" is nicely writen.
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