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Posted 6/15/08 , edited 6/15/08
A/N: i will be posting here for a while.. so any criticisms are accepted.. enjoy reading.


A teardrop loss in your graves

Petals scattered around my bones

-x-

While I lay drowning my sorrows

You stood their beating your anger out

Always I bleed, screaming to you

Be my savior, not my downfall

Not two people fading through love

Can be one against better and worse

-x-

Then I fumble with words oh so sweetly

Dead it was to your ears

Gaining your caresses was heartache

Because I was not the one dethrone to you

-x-

You smile over my failures

Thinking I am desperate that much

Spindles of thread groped my rusting heart

Fallin’ apart from your hands

-x-

Permit me to escape your embrace

‘Coz I am dying inside

You are perfection to me

Perfection that resulted to my sulking

-x-

Depression took over

Until I took the last possibility

Killing you through my dead body

You were the first to die; I was the second to curse

My cursing was followed by tears

Tears all the days I wasn’t able to hold you

-x-

That’s why teardrops are loss in your graves

While petals of roses are scattered around my bones

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Posted 6/15/08
kinda.... sad.... :tears

GREAT JOB
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Posted 6/15/08
A really great and sad poem, Im really amesed by it so Im going to fav it ^^
great work and I hope to see more of your works here =D
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Posted 6/16/08
thank you for the reviews! I am honored.
Posted 6/27/08
I agree with Yamira awesome!! XD
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