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if you ever get stuck on aything feel free to tell me i will help you out and i will make sure that i share your story with the other club member and if it good i will upload it in the club profile so other will see it
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Well here's chapter 1 and the prelude of my story. I love working on it but I think I could do better >< plz comment everybody.

Neo-Magister Saga

Chapter 1: And So It Begins
The clash of good and evil existed since the time when the world was still young. The existence of the four divine entities and their counter parts had been in conflicts to decide who will reign over their time in the mortal world. They were from four different families: Seiryuu, Suzaku, Byakko, and Genbu. Every generation were born in pairs. When the demonic side of the families wins, the world was thrown into despair. These events include the collapse of Atlantis, the volcanic eruption of Pompeii, and the Great Depression of 1929. On the other hand, when the good twins of the families win, they will lead the world into prosperity.

The year is 1988. The next generation of the divine entities was born in Taiwan. However, this time, the Seiryuu family did not give birth to twins. Only one child was born into the family. Everyone was shocked when they first hear of this. The baby had one dragon looking scar engraved on each arm: a light blue colored dragon on his right arm and a black dragon on his left. The family members did not wish to put this child through any hardship and thus sealed the power of Seiryuu up within the baby’s body.

Eighteen years had passed since that fated day. Fang (last name) Yu-Loong (meaning “protected by dragon”), had just graduated from UCLA at the age of 18 with a biology degree. He is about six feet tall with semi-short black hair. His appearance seem to be liked by others since he always wear a smile on his face.

He has always been a very dependant person; however, due to jealousy from fellow coworkers and the fact that he is still young and inexperienced, none of the companies are willing to hire him. Thus he moved back to Taiwan with the rest of his family. One day, as he was surfing the internet, he found a job opening in Japan off Saitama. The pay was not too bad but it seems as if there had been a lot of people who quit the job after three days. However, at the time, Yu-Loong did not pay attention to the details. He just wanted to get the job and try to earn some money.

Yu-Loong left Taiwan and headed to Japan a week after he applied for the job. As he arrived at his destination, he realized that he had just applied for a job to teach at a high school. The school entrance was a gigantic steel gate and the sign above it reads “Magister Koukouen.” As he stood in front of the campus, he started to think to himself this might have been a bad choice. However, he couldn’t just go back because the next bus to arrive is in another eight hours. It also took him four hours to walk to the campus from the closest bus station. There was no other choice but to visit the campus.

As he entered the building, he heard a voice coming from behind him.

“MOVE IT!” a girl yelled as she ran into him. What were you doing day dreaming in front of the school anyway?! If you don’t hurry we are going to be late!”

The girl was wearing a dark blue uniform. She stood at about five feet six. Her dark shining brown hair runs down to her shoulder. Her eyes sparkled like a pair of black pearls. She has a cute appearance which seems to be able to attract anyone.

“But…” the girl dragged Yu-Loong along without letting him finish.

“Well, I take it you are new here?” the girl asked.

“Uh…yea…I guess you can say that…” Yu-Loong stuttered.

“Well, you better head to your class then. My classroom is over on the other side of the school. This is the boys’ side and the other side is the girls’ side. Remember not to go over to that side ‘cause if the principal finds out you will be in a lot of trouble,” the girl warned him and ran off.

“…That was unexpected…oh well. Time to go meet the superintendent I guess...Where is the teacher’s office again?” Yu-Loong wondered that as he wandered around looking for the office.

After an hour of walking around campus, Yu-Loong finally found the teacher’s office. When he stepped into the room, there was only a person sitting there.

“I’m here for my job interview. Where can I find the superintendent?” asked Yu-Loong.

The guy stood up. He was approximately six feet. He had long jet black hair which covered his right half of his face. It didn’t seem like he was over the age of 35. The room was suddenly filled with the feeling of eeriness.

“You’re talking to him.” He took a look at Yu-Loong and chuckled. “So you are the new teacher? I expected someone…well…older. I guess we can’t help it since this is an emergency. You are going to be the homeroom teacher for class 1-B over on the girl’s side. Just remember, even though you are about the same age as them, you are still their teacher. DON’T let me catch you doing something you shouldn’t.” The superintendent gave Yu-Loong a cold stare and sat back down in his seat. “Hurry up and go before you get fired,” said the superintendent.

“Yes sir!”

“Don’t just call me sir. I have a name kid. It’s Satsura Kira.”

“I understand si…I mean Satsura-sensei. I’ll go to my class right now.”

Yu-Loong left the room after he gave the superintendent a smile. As he walked over to the class that he is suppose to be teaching, he thought to himself, “I wonder who that girl was. Would I be able to see her since I’m going to be teaching as a homeroom teacher over on the girl’s side…wait…I’m going to be teaching over on GIRL’s side of the school? I have a feeling this is going to be bad…ehehe.”

He finally arrived in front of the classroom. “Well, I guess this is a start for me.”

Just on the other side of the door, the girls was talking about a new teacher coming. As Yu-Loong opens the door, the class suddenly quiet down.

“Good morning class. I will be your homeroom teacher starting today.” As he lifts his head, he saw the girl he ran into earlier.

“Eh?!” they both yelled.

“What are you doing here?” asked the girl surprisingly. “Shouldn’t you be in the other side of the school?”

“I just told you and the class didn’t I? I’m going to be your teacher from today on.” Yu-Loong answered her with a smile. He then turn to the class and said, “Well, as I was saying, I will be your homeroom teacher starting today. My name is Fang Yu-Loong. Nice to meet you all.”

Just then, the school siren suddenly rang. The next door teacher rushed in and told the class its time for their drill. She also told Yu-Loong to go wait in the teacher’s lounge. He did know what was going on so he just followed her.

The students were actually getting ready for battle at the time. The opposing force coming to the school was part of the Dark Suzaku army. Hundreds of winged demons were approaching the school grounds at a fast speed.

The sound of a blast rang from the approaching demons as one of them suddenly combust into flames and fell to the ground. The students of the school along with some of the staff members were trying to hold the front line. The battle raged on with both sides exchanging blows.

Throughout the battle, Yu-Loong and the other teacher stayed in the sound proved room. Suddenly, he felt the room shook and rushed out the room. The other teacher tried to stop but was suddenly repelled by a strange force.

As Yu-Loong was running pass the hallway, he saw a gigantic winged beast carrying a battle axe flying toward him. He was shocked from the sight of that creature and stopped in his track. A large ice spike suddenly fell from the sky and pierced it through its head. Just then, he lost conscious and his subconscious took over his body. His lively black eyes turned dull and lifeless. He lifted his head and started looking around and saw the chemistry lab next to him. He hurried inside and looked for some reagents which might be useful. He found some liquid nitrogen lying around in the safe in the room which seem like it was ripped opened by claws and some left over metals. There he started to work on making something that might be useful. Unknown to his conscious mind, he possessed the power of alchemy and a natural talent for engineering. With these abilities, he created a handful of liquid nitrogen bullet and a semi automatic rifle within the short ten minutes time period. When he woke up from that trance, he was holding the weapon in his hand. There was little he can do and he was used to the fact he usually wake up with some weird concoction in his hand.

The battle outside seem to have made a turn for the worse. When Yu-Loong rushed outside, many of the students were being taken to the infirmary. Others were trying their hardest to hold the enemies off. He hurried and ran outside. At that time, he saw the girl he ran into in the morning getting pushed back by one of the beasts. She was trying to cast her spells but could not get any of them to work because she was at her limit. As the beast was about to strike her down, Yu-Loong shot his rifle.

“No one hurts my students!” He said it with a cold stare as the bullet penetrated the beast’s shoulder and released the liquid nitrogen within. The beast’s shoulder started to freeze over and soon, the liquid spread to its neck. The frozen parts suddenly cracked and the beast’s arm fell off followed shortly by its head. Yu-Loong suddenly side stepped and launched forward to another beast which was about to dash forward for an attack and fired the rifle at near point blank. The beast let loose a sharp scream and suddenly its head was a frozen block of ice. Yu-Loong quickly turned his rifle around and smashed it into the frozen beast’s head which then shattered into pieces.

Just then, another beast came up behind him and slammed its fist into Yu-Loong’s back, shattering four of his rib bones. Yu-Loong fell on the ground with a loud thump. He forced himself to turn around with the last ounce of his strength and saw the beast about to stab its claw into his head. Yu-Loong raised his hand up shielding his face just as the beast launched forth his claw. Everyone was shocked at the sight of the beast killing the new teacher.

At that second, Yu-Loong heard a demonic voice in his head. “Do you wish to live on? Are you willing to do anything to stay alive?”

“I can’t die right now,” Yu-Loong answered the voice. “Please save me!”

“I understand. I can’t let you die either. If you die then I die as well,” the voice answered. “I can’t do much since I am a part of you. In order for me to save the both of us, you will need to grant me the permission to use your body.”

“Okay! You may use my body, but whatever you do don’t hurt the people who risked their lives defending this place.” Yu-Loong replied.

Just before the sharp claw touched Yu-Loong’s face, he stopped the claw with his left hand. The beast was stunned from what has happened. Yu-Loong suddenly stood up and crushed the beast’s claw with his bare hand and smashed his right fist into the side of the beast’s skull. The other beasts saw what happened to one of their brethrens and got frightened.

Just then, a loud shout came from behind the enemy’s line. “What are you doing?! Everyone focus your attack on that man!” It was one of the beasts who were attacking, but this one was different. Unlike the others it was wearing a black armor and carried a silver claymore. His size seems to be larger than those fighting at the frontline of the battle.

All the beasts fighting at the frontline stopped what they were doing and started to focus their attack on Yu-Loong.

Yu-Loong suddenly raised his head and opened his eyes. They were both bloodshot red. He suddenly raised his fist and opened up his hand showing the claws he had grown. The cold smile exposed a long fang which was not there before. In a blink of an eye, he vanished into thin air and the beasts started to fall to the ground one after another.

The battle raged on as the students and the staffs looked in awe of how Yu-Loong was able to destroy the creatures with ease. The beast who told the frontline to attack got scared and retreated himself. After an hour of slaughtering the winged beasts, the battle came to a close. There was a huge pile of beast corpse in front of the school grounds. Everyone looked up as the new teacher stood on top of the corpse pile and let off a roar into the distance.
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i love it, i want to see it in manga wahahaa
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yea i would too lol i don't know how to draw. If i do then I would've posted it up as a manga already ><
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yeah i know how it feel it suck if ya cant do thing ya love
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Wow. That was sick! I really want to read more. I don't even need a manga, I could see everything happening in my mind's eye, even though the manga probably would help me see everything the way you do. That might help any big impacts you may need to make later
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Well you know how these stories are. Make an enormous impact, tune it down for a few chapters afterward, more impact, an onsen funny chapter, then the final fight. I'm thinking bout a season 2 as well ^^
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you should be should be, the story is great, let me upload my but i think it will take time
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If you weren't thinking about it, I'd have to slap ya. Every author, especially good ones, should always look past what they already have and write their frickin hearts out!
Posted 6/18/08
one of my old stories dunno if it makes sense, i wrote it long time ago hope you like it is not finished at all

The Listeners

“Where am I”, I yelled, I stood there silently as the misty air moved densely across the moss covered river in the spawn. I saw a shadow of a little boy, drifting slowly away from his present position. I began to shed tears, my eyes started to become all watery because I was lost, I felt like I was abandoned by my family and friends. “Aku, wake up, wake up”, suddenly I saw the alarm right next to me, my mother throwing away my blanket onto the floor. I stood up from my bed and looked directly at my mother who was smiling at me. Then, I realized that it was 8:31am and I rushed to the bathroom as soon as I can. I ended up falling onto the ground and feeling really unconscious, but it did not stop me from getting dress up to school.

My mother dropped me at school, I got to class very late and the teacher put me under probations. I haven’t yet introduced myself, my name is “Akumiya Ni”, and I am 16 and yet still young in heart, typically average girl in the city. My two best friends Nioami and Inu, were friends since elementary school, how we meet was a funny story. We fought for a guy, who didn’t even notice us; by the way he isn’t popular no more.

We got into class which started very late because our teacher, Ms.Lyina, got into a little situation, with the principal. I sat there showing off my t-shirt, and my girls, well they were flirting their ways with the hottest guys in our school. I never noticed, how the weather outside seem different and it felt weird. It began to rain, all of a sudden and I kept staring at the weather as it poured alot.

I walked down the metro were I usually waited for the train to arrive. I waited alone till my friends, Niaomi and Inu tagged along I stood laughing with them for a couple of while, till I heard a flute playing. It seemed so sad, the tune seemed like it was addressing to someone. I looked at my friends who didn’t even seem to hear the rhythms. Suddenly, when the metro arrived, everything in my presence went blank, the movement of the train seemed very slow but I noticed a face on the metro window as everything went back to normal pace.
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nice suspense there. when you have the time try uploading more parts of the story.
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I'm gonna have ta agree with seiryuu on that. PLEASE upload more. *Gets down on knees* I'm begging ya!
Posted 6/19/08
From Writer of Love Magic:Kodieloielr)

(FORGIVE ME IF ITS SUCKIE IM STILL IMPROVING this was before i improved a lil (I improved at this at chapter 4 because someone HELPED ME REALIZE WHAT I SUCK AT!...snd please odnt comment on my spelling...i know i just either typed to fast or didnt know how to spell it sowwiez)


The Strange Happening


CRASH! “Princess please stop this nonsense” yelled the maid angrily. The princess continued shooting the expensive vases “BAND BANG” yelled the princess. “I said STOP!” the maid said angrily. The made tried to stand up but forgot she was under a round table and bumped her head “OW!” the maid yelled crawling form beneath the table. A BIG! Glass swan fell off the table and landed CRASHED! on the maids head. CRASH! went the swan figure. The maid got knocked out and fell straight on the floor. “I guess…my work here is done” Kuroda (the princess) said proudly walking out the door smiling. While she is walking she is saying “I wonder what I should do…OH! maybe I can get my bazooka out and blast some walls.. Oh! wait that was confiscated because I broke down the whole castle last time….Hmmm”. “KURODA THERE YOU ARE! The princess of light is here to see you” Said Tadashi out of breath. “MIYU IS! YAY!” Kuroda says jumping up and down running as fast as she can to the door. Kuroda then opens the door “Oh! Sya is here to?” Kuroda said surprised but happily. “Yeah who else would it be” said Sya annoyed. Miyu giggles “You guys really do get along” said Miyu happily “NO WE DON’T!” said both of them but in different tones. Miyu giggles again “Anyway want to go to the legendary Sakura Tree tonight?” Kuroda suggested. “Legendary Sakura Tree?” Miyu said looking confused. “YOU DON’T KNOW WHAT IT IS!” Sya said surprised. Miyu shakes her head no “The Legendary Sakura Tree is a big legend in your kingdom so how could you not know” Sya asked. “how am I supposed to know” Miyu said pouting. “The Sakura Tree is a tree of rebirth” Kuroda said seriously. “Rebirth?” both of them said. “Yes that tree… before the angels came and darkness and light got along that tree was used as a place to reborn a person who has died... as in successor” Kuroda said seriously. “OH! I remember that but once Dark and Light got along everyone started” Miyu got interrupted. “To forget the great Sakura Tree that made Light and Dark join” Sya said. “Now everyone knows so lets go tonight alright” Kuroda said happily. “ALRIGHT” both of them said “Then meet me in the middle of the
kingdoms” Kuroda said happily. “The Unite center right?” Sya asked. “YEP! But I don’t know what if we get in trouble” Miyu said nervously. “Don’t worry about it” Kuroda says encouraging Miyu. “YEAH! No worries” Sya said bravely. “Ok! then I’ll go”. Sya and Miyu leave the kingdom of darkness and go back to there own kingdoms and get prepared. Kuroda goes and does the same “I can’t wait” Kuroda says excitedly.


The Strange
Part 2

At the United Center


Kuroda finally arrives “WOW! Look at it over here….huh? what’ this” Ina looks behind her. O O! “A TAIL!...I-I have to hide it” Kuroda then stuffs her tail under her dress. She then feels her head “A EARS…”..”what else could happen…wait… forget I said that I don’t want to jinx myself” Kuroda says worriedly. Suddenly her tail and cat ears disappear “W-what was that?...huh? oh well it was cool while it lasted” Said Kuroda back to normal “KURODA!” both Miyu and Sya said while landing on the ground safely then putting away there wings. “Sya! Miyu!” Kuroda yells happily “Shhh!” Sya covers Kurodas mouth “be quiet you know we snuck out to” Sya told Kuroda quietly. “A-anyway lets go before we are found out” Miyu says causiously. While there walking to the Sakura Tree shine. “Hey Miyu havnt you heard…the women who guards that place is terribly scary” Kuroda makes herself look scary to freak Miyu out. “And did you know she has 8 LEGS AND HAIR ALL OVER!” Kuroda says scarily. “EKKKK!” Miyu screams loudly…Sya then covers Miyu’s mouth so no body here’s her scream “KURODA! Don’t freak her out like that” Sya said angrily. “Sorry I got into the moment…also Miyu”…Kuroda said normally “I was over exaggerating. Miyu, Sya and Kuroda arrive at the shrine. “Here we go” all of them said. They all step on the first step Sya and Kuroda felt something weird. Suddenly Miyu was pushed back from something very strong. “MIYU!” both of them shouted and went to help her. “Sya did you feel that……what was that” Kuroda asked and suddenly became serious. “I think it was a strong force field….of dark magic which is probably why Miyu couldn’t get through…if only we could find the source” Sya said angrily and bit her lip. “Oh you really want to find the source” Said a voice. “YES! So I can destroy it!” Sya said madly… “Wait!... what was that voice?” Sya asked. “Oh it was me!” a white tiger suddenly appeared in front of the steps. “So you want to destroy me… how mean to say that to dear young lady Tetsu” Tetsu says sweetly. “YOUNG LADY! YOU’RE A OLD HAD!” Kuroda says laughing at tetsu. “What did you say!” Tetsu then charges at Kuroda and gets ready to attack.


The Strange Happening part 3
Where we left off

Kuroda then grasps her Bazooka and gets ready to fire it! “STOP!” A girl comes from around the corner of the steps “What do you think your doing at the Shine…and your just kids” the stranger women said unimpressed. “KURODA NOW!” Sya yelled. “ALRIGHT!” Kuroda gets her Bazooka ready and shoots it at tetsu creating a BIG! Smoke. “Miyu you stay here and use your powers to keep them still while we go in alright” Sya said quickly. “Alright!” Miyu gets back up and gets her wings out and readyt o sue her power. “GOOD!” both Sya and Kuroda said. Kuroda and Sya head into the Shine while the smoke is going on and hides behind a stone. “Kuroda do you think u” Sya gets interrupted “I’m on it already” Kuroda then gets a grenade. Kuroda bites the cap off and gets ready to throw it. “Huh? So they left there friend behind what cowards” the stranger women says. “THEY ARE MY FRIENDS! Miyu then uses her powers but they fail the preistest power is far greater then hers. “Don’t you know who I am? I am the preistest of darkness” Tinaya said proudly. Right when Kuroda gets ready to throw her grenade Miyu says something. “I thought the preistest of the Sakura tree had 8 legs and hair all over was ugly 150 and a monster” Miyu said normally. “W-w-w-WHAT WAS THAT!” Tinaya yells. “Your ugly with her all over you old person” Miyu says normally and giggles. ‘HA! So funny anyway while she’s distracted!” Kuroda thows the grenade at the preiestest. Miyu then locks her in a cage of light and Sya and Kuroda head to the Sakura Tree. Kuroda touches the tree “Wow so pretty!” Kuroda goes around it amazing it with stars in her eyes of amazement. “it is pretty” Sya agrees with Kuroda. “LETS BRAKE A BRANCH!” Kuroda suggests. “NO DON’T DO THAT!” Sya yells. Kuroda climes the tree and Sya comes after her Kuroda and Sya get cut by a branch and right when Kuroda’s about to break the tree branch Sya grabs her arm. Kuroda’s hand is on a branch. Suddenly… the tree starts glowing and a face appears on it “WATCH WHERE YOUR TOUCHING YOU LITTLE GIRLS!... No one is aloud to touch the beautiful branches of Ruu” Ruu says deeply but proudly. O _ o Kuroda and Sya fall out of the tree in surprise. “AH! IT CAN LIVE!” Kuroda yelled excitedly. “Yeah…and it thinks its all that to much” Sya unimpressed. “What! You dare make fun of thy Ruu” Ruu says angrily. “AHAHAHHA!” both Kuroda and Sya fall down laughing. Tinaya comes running to see that Ruu has awoken and the 2 children are laughing on the floor. “How is it possible…. No one can wake Ruu unless there a” Tinaya just realizes something and goes and hides instead of letting them see her. Kuroda and Sya he’s not ticklish” Kuroda says disappointed. “Why would I be I’m a tree” said Ruu. “KURODA LOOK AT THE TRUNK!” Sya says loudly. “Yes I know its…WOW! WHAT THE! A PORTEL!” Kuroda trys to remove her hand but its stuck “OUR HANDS ARE STUCK!” Sya. “What the heck is happening” Kuroda says suddenly serious. Kuroda bites her lip “DANG IT! WERE GETTING SUCKED IN!..” yells Kuroda “AHHH!” they both scream. “I-I’m not letting this happen “ Kuroda says almost about to pass out. Kuroda’s body suddenly starts glowing black and so does Sya’s. “I’m getting us out of here” Kuroda says seriously. Suddenly they are transported to a big ocean with sharks as soon as they go under the water they…disappear.

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I like it. I really, really like it. How many manga has Kodieloielr authored? I need to know how many I'm gonna read. But I got confused for a second: In the first chapter, Kuroda claimed the castle confiscated her bazooka since she blew down the castle, yet in the third one she's using to attack. Did she steal it back or something?
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Mon937 wrote:

I like it. I really, really like it. How many manga has Kodieloielr authored? I need to know how many I'm gonna read. But I got confused for a second: In the first chapter, Kuroda claimed the castle confiscated her bazooka since she blew down the castle, yet in the third one she's using to attack. Did she steal it back or something?


yeah she got i back....plsu teh castle was remade! X D lolz.....and Kodie hasnt published any shes making 2 right now....the second one hasnt even started pages yet but the first one is Love Magic the one i posted already....more pages are to come of course....
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