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Posted 6/19/08
Got to go to bed...Mon937 if u have any request or questions etc. Pm Kodieloiler or me alright? we'll asnwer them tommorow (we got to go to bed)
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Mon937 wrote:

I like it. I really, really like it. How many manga has Kodieloielr authored? I need to know how many I'm gonna read. But I got confused for a second: In the first chapter, Kuroda claimed the castle confiscated her bazooka since she blew down the castle, yet in the third one she's using to attack. Did she steal it back or something?


yeah she got i back....plsu teh castle was remade! X D lolz.....and Kodie hasnt published any shes making 2 right now....the second one hasnt even started pages yet but the first one is Love Magic the one i posted already....more pages are to come of course....


Can't wait.

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Got to go to bed...Mon937 if u have any request or questions etc. Pm Kodieloiler or me alright? we'll asnwer them tommorow (we got to go to bed)


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You people are potential manga artists..too bad both stories aren't finished cause I really want to read more.
Here's mine.I still don't know how to end this story so if you guys want to suggest anything just tell me.Hope you like it..

Czert(read as Zert) is a small country in the orient but quite rich.It is abundant with natural resources.They are also rich in culture that makes the country colorful and more prosperous.No one in this country ever experienced hunger nor poverty.The Royal Family of Chert,our family, made sure that there was justice in this land to maintain peace.We believed in justice and democracy and so that is what we implement in this country.But something is about to happen that would mark in the history of my country.It started 8 years ago.

Chaprter 1(Part 1)
Morning came.I woke up with a smile in my face.I opened my windows to let the sunshine in.Seeing the sun shine so brightly made me even happier.

"You're up early?"I turned around to see where the voice came from and saw a friendly face that was quite familiar.It was Neeza,my personal maid.But I never treated her that way.She was more like an older sister(since I was an only child).She is really kind and pretty too.Her black long hair matches her beautiful eyes.I admire her so much.

"Good morning Neeza!"I greeted her with a smile.

"You seem happy today?"

"But I'm always in a good mood."

"Yeah,but your aura today seems different."

I hurried away to hide my smile.But she have noticed it and approached me to help me change my clothes.When I finally put my dress on she put her face real close to the left side of my face.

"You dreamed about him last night,didn't you?",she whispered in my ear.

"Eh...!",I walked away from her just to hide my blushing face."What are you talking about?"

"Oh don't play dumb with me.You definitely know who I'm talking about.His family arrived earlier this morning..."

"He's here?",I exclaimed.I hurried outside my room.

"Everybody's preparing for the ball to..HEY..!Princess Sharie!"

"Bye Neeza!I'll just see you later!"

Without looking back I hurried down the castle.I was really happy that day and nothing comes into my mind but a good day coming ahead of me.I was so overwhelmed that I wasn't aware of what was ahead of me.I accidentally bumped into someone.

"I'm so sorry I..Oh ..Its just you.Well that's ok then."

"Running is not a good manner for a princess.",an annoying reply from the most hostile person in the kingdom.Ayton
is the son of General Lance Naga.He is a really good friend of the king.Their family has been a family friend for years.
General Naga is kind,friendly and always wears a smile.The exact opposite of his son Ayton.I wish he was more like his
father.We are of the same age but he acts as if he was a grown-up.

"If you are to rule this kingdom you must act appropriately."

"What do you know about good manners?You yourself don't have any."

"I have no time to listen to a stupid princess like you",he said as if ignoring me.He walked away without even helping me get up.

"WHAT?You take that back you.."It was useless.He walked away as if nothing happened.That guy never fails to annoy me.
I was so annoyed that I almost forgot that I have something important to do.

I hurried down the castle and went into the kitchen.There I found Emina.Despite her young age she decided to work and help her older sister (Neeza) since they were orphans.She works as a helper in the kitchen.She is very much like her sister.They even look the same,having the same long hair and black eyes.

"Emina!Good morning."

"Princess Sharie.Good morning",she greeted while bowing down.

"I told you no more bowing!"

"But..."

"And just call me Sharie.I'll get really mad at you if you don't."

"All..all right..As you wish..Sharie."

"That's good",I smiled.

"Is there anything you need fom me?"

"Oh right.Can you go with me to the hill today?"

"Looking for four-leaf clover today?"

"Uhuh.I really feel like I need one today."

"Oh I see.Unfortunately I cannot.I have to help everyone to prepare for the ball tonight."

"Oh I see.Ok I'll just go look for some myself."

"Well goodluck!I hope you'd find one."

Waving back at Emina I hurried and went to a secret path going to the hill.After running a long way,I finally arrived at my destination.It was a very beautiful place where you can see the scenery of the village.Its a peaceful place where I go to get away from the palace life.My secret place.The cool breeze and the beautiful scenery made me feel refreshed and relaxed.I enjoyed the scenery so much that I almost forgot about the four-leaf clover.

I was busy looking for a clover leaf that I wasn't aware of the danger that awaits me.Suddenly I was attacked by a group of men who tried to kidnap me.They mentioned something about not agreeing on the Alliance Treaty between the our family and the Kingdom of Crucis.They were going to use me to threaten the king to back out on the agreement.I did not understand it by then.Anyways I was only ten years old at that time.And all I knew was these guys are bad and that I need to get away from them.I was struggling and didn't know what to do.I tried to scream for help.But one of the rebels threatened me to shut up.

"It's useless to shout for help.No one will come and help you."

"HELP!"

It was useless.That place was too far from the village and no one from the palace would hear my plea.Feeling helpless,all I can do was cry.All hope was done.But then..out of nowhere came someone who saved me.He fought all of the rebels single
handedly.

"Are you alright?",said a soft-spoken voice.

I looked up and saw a face I never expected to see.

"Prince Thylone!"

"What could a princess like you be doing out here alone?Let me take you back to the palace."

He held out his hand and helped me up.He escorted me back to the palace.While walking back I can't help but look at him.He is really handsome.His light-colored hair and his golden eyes really suits him.He acts so mature,making me feel quite awkward.He is the person who I will marry someday.It was part of the Alliance Treaty.And I have no objections on this fixed marriage whatsoever.I was busy staring at him that I didn't notice that we were back in the palace.Everyone was worried about me.We were greeted by Neeza who appeared to be so worried.She said my father was so worried and was looking for me.I looked around and Prince Thylone went away without a word.We went immidiately to the library where my father was waiting.Now I'm starting to feel worried.I know my dad would be really mad.We finally arrived.His face was crossed.As soon as the door closed behind us he started talking.

"WHAT WOULD A PRINCESS LIKE BE DOING IN SUCH A PLACE?YOU KNOW ITS NOT SAFE FOR A PRINCESS TO WANDER OUTSIDE THE PALACE."

I couldn't say anything.

"And I told you to take responsibility of the princess!",he said looking at Neeza's direction.

"I'm very sorry your highness."

"But father..its all my fault.Don't blame her."

"And you should be acting responsibly!If it wasn't for Prince Thylone you could have been dead by now!"

I fell dumbfound.I couldn't look straight at my father's face.He asked Neeza and the gaurds to leave us alone for a while.There was silence in the room.All I could hear was my father's footsteps approaching my direction.

"You should take care of yourself.Remember that you are the only descendant of Czertian throne..and our precious daughter."

I looked up and saw my father's face change.Now he was looking worried.

"I'll never forgive myself if anything happens to you.I swore on your mother's grave that I would take care of you",he told me while holding my shoulders.Then he went to his desk,opened one of its drawers and took an antique box that had the Czertian symbol on it.

"This has been in our family for years."

He opened the small box and took out a necklace with a small red gem on it.

"It was said to be from the Czertian Saint Carice who once fought and saved our kingdom from foreign invaders."

He put the necklace around my neck.

"It is said to protect and help the one who wears it whenever they are in danger.Remember that I'm not always around to protect you.There will come a day when I woun't be around to protect you.Be brave my little princess."

I was touched by what my father said.I hugged him tight and wept in his arms.

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ooo... a story that looks like it's going to be as long as mine and it's a shoujo style doujin. I'm already interested in it. Ringo if you want you can post up your post in a separate forum topic for everyone to read it.
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yeah just like seiryuu said let make this the introduction and make your own forum so ppl don't get lost
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I'm not usually deep into the whole shoujo scene, but this story may just change that. I can't wait to read further, separate forum or not.
Posted 6/20/08
heres chapter 2

Where am I?.. and ... WHERES KURODA! Part 1


Sya suddenly wakes up from her fall “Hmmm? K-Kuroda what happened?” Sya says tiredly. Sya then gets about and doesn’t see Kuroda. She looks around and the stands “KURODA WHERE ARE YOU!” Sya says nervously. Sya then thinks and remembers “Is that what she meant…but” Sya then looks down.

FLASH BACK!

“I’m getting us out of here” Kuroda says seriously. Suddenly they are transported to a big ocean with sharks. Kuroda suddenly touches Sya. With Kuroda’s back against the water she transports Sya some where safe. Right before Sya leaves Kuroda says “I’m sorry” Kuroda says sadly and Kuroda falls in the water

(Kuroda)



…..Right the second before Sya is about to be transported…she…see’s…blood.


(Sya's reaction to seeing her blood and surprised that Kuroda did that)


BACK FROM FLASH BACK!

“Why did she have to do that” Sya says sadly looking down.

“HEY!” a mysterious voice shouts out!

“Huh?!” Sya turns back and is surprised to see who it is.


PART 2


“MIYU!!!!!!” Sya is so surprised and her jaw drops “H-how the heck”. “That Tinaya girl transported me here she said she was going to transport all the other princes and princess’es” Miyu says happily. “W-who is that with you” SYa looks at the other girl. “OH! This is Shea Meadow. I was passing by and she found me and helped me out” Miyu says happily. “I’m guessing you were crying” Sya says normally. “Yes!” Miyu pouts. “A-anyway…Miyu something bad happened to Kuroda” Sya says looking down. “What happened?” Miyu asks. “S-she dyed” Sya says sadly. “That’s not possible” Miyu says normally. “YES IT IS I SAW IT WITH MY OWN EYES…HER OWN BLOOD!” Sya says yelling with tears in her eyes. “You don’t get it…When Kuroda die’s she is reincarnated” Miyu says normally. “WHAT?! HOW?!” Sya asks seriously. “Well its because I’m her friend…us! My family made it so she can never die just be reincarnated the same age she died…but” Miyu says looking away. “BUT!” Sya gets more serious. “She totally different and may or may not have the same personality” Shea says looking up serious. “How do you know?” both Miyu and Sya ask. “I just know” Shea says normelly. “Anyway I think we should hurry and run” Shea says normally. “Why?” Miyu and Sya ask. “ROAR!!!!!!!!!” A big monster appears right behind Shea with her pointing at it. “That!” Shea says not moving. Miyu is hiding behind Sya and Sya gets her weapon ready.

Part 3

“DANG IT!” Sya yells on the floor injured. “Its so strong….. what’s th-…” Sya says normally. “It’s that huh? ALRIGHT!...NOW!” Sya says loudly. Suddenly a girl with.. greenish a little blondish with cats ears, and green eyes appears with her tiger.


Tye picture of the myserious girl)


“BOO!!! I SEE YOU!” the strange girl says. “GO GET THAT THING AND EAT IT HIKARU!” the strange girl says happily. Hikaru then bites off its arm and starts eating It right about when Hikaru is about to be attacked Sya comes in and slashes it in half. “I guess it was all talk” Sya says proudly. “Who are you?” Shea asks the mysterious girl. “It’s a secret!” she says while smiling “Anyway if you guys need to get out of here ill show you guys the way?” the mysterious girl asks. “Your only a little girl how ca-“ Sya then stops right there “I mean yes please do” Sya says nicely. While Miyu, Sya, Shea, and the mysterious girl walk through the forest Shea asks “Then what can we call you?” Shea asks. “You guys can call me Ku-chan” Ku says happily. “We’re here!” Ku says happily with her hands holding back some leafs. “If you go down there you’ll end up in a city just ask a shop keeper to tell you where a hotel is alright?” Ku says normally. “Wait your not comeing?” Miyu asks. “No sorry…anyway bye bye I hope we can meet again!” Ku then starts jumping away with Hikaru “WAIT!” Sya yells Ku then stops not facing Sya. “Where are we? And…do you know where my friend Kuroda is?” Sya asks. “answer for #1 is you are going to go into Baticul” Ku then smiles and turns around “The answer to #2 is you will find her in the land of Snow! The Kingdom of Snow in matter of fact!.. and you can buy a map there to help you anyway bye bye” Ku-chan then tuns back around and jumps on Hikaru. Then they disappear in the lash of speed.

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Did those pics actually drawn or is it computer animation. Either way it's frickin' awesome since I couldn't do something like that with either of those methods. And the story, wow. I hope you get into detail about Kuroda's reincarnation ability since I really don't understand it. And I didn't see character death coming this early, just goes to show ya how many loops I'm in for.
Posted 6/20/08
lolz! X D no she didnt draw them....sorry i just read that on teh homepage and i will let you know now that all teh pics she uses will not be drawn by her (she still needs to improve her drawing) and her reincarnation ability is a ability passed down from gen fromk generation in her family. It is used to keep the name alive but once you get really old and you reincarnate you become a young very YOUNG child and forget your royal life. this is to be able to live longer......(but if there was a message they needed tog et or so they would remember thata dn deliver the message quickly) get it?
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i suggest you guy put detail in explain the stuff in the story by adding a character that seem to know everything and tried to make one character want to know, *make a chance for the knowing character to talk* that will make the reader less confuse and their will not ask question
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lolz! X D no she didnt draw them....sorry i just read that on teh homepage and i will let you know now that all teh pics she uses will not be drawn by her (she still needs to improve her drawing) and her reincarnation ability is a ability passed down from gen fromk generation in her family. It is used to keep the name alive but once you get really old and you reincarnate you become a young very YOUNG child and forget your royal life. this is to be able to live longer......(but if there was a message they needed tog et or so they would remember thata dn deliver the message quickly) get it?


Got it, thanx. I know if I keep asking questions, it's gonna get annoying, but I'm just way too curious. How did her family originally get the reincarnation power in the first place? And how could they suddenly remember a message they're supposed to deliver after reincarnating, but others can't remember their own personality?
Posted 6/20/08
awwwh, thank you guys :D, i will try!
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Got it, thanx. I know if I keep asking questions, it's gonna get annoying, but I'm just way too curious. How did her family originally get the reincarnation power in the first place? And how could they suddenly remember a message they're supposed to deliver after reincarnating, but others can't remember their own personality?



Answer to Question #1. The family got thereincarnation ability because the first priestest discovered a new technique of reincarnating. She would then teach it to the King and Queen ever since then they have pasted it down from generation from genaration including teh preistest's did teh same thing but only the darkness kingdomc an do so

The Answer to Question #2 is. It is programmed into there brain.....like *thinks* how to explain they remember everything of there past life if they have a message to deviler because the perosn who uses it will put a certain time limit on how long you will be able to remember of your life they only give enough time so they can deiliver the message not so they can remember there old life
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Got it, thanx. I know if I keep asking questions, it's gonna get annoying, but I'm just way too curious. How did her family originally get the reincarnation power in the first place? And how could they suddenly remember a message they're supposed to deliver after reincarnating, but others can't remember their own personality?



Answer to Question #1. The family got thereincarnation ability because the first priestest discovered a new technique of reincarnating. She would then teach it to the King and Queen ever since then they have pasted it down from generation from genaration including teh preistest's did teh same thing but only the darkness kingdomc an do so

The Answer to Question #2 is. It is programmed into there brain.....like *thinks* how to explain they remember everything of there past life if they have a message to deviler because the perosn who uses it will put a certain time limit on how long you will be able to remember of your life they only give enough time so they can deiliver the message not so they can remember there old life


OOoooooohhhh. Things make a lot more sense now. Thank you!

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