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Posted 7/4/08

Aegis85 wrote:

pls check some spelling. there are some text missing. and i think there's part like where did it come' need grammar corrections. i dont mind for grammar mistakes but spelling corrections are necessary.


lolz.. tnx for telling me~
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Posted 7/5/08
i think i won't be able to release ep4 this weekend lol, but i may be able to post his pic with his forms tommorrow... lol
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Posted 7/6/08
yeah man!!! ur fanfic rocks!!!
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
Now its getting interesting...i like where this is going...

If you need any assistance with drawing out these characters, just let me know.



Your fanfic deserves to have its own page in the group. Anyone else agree?
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agree here ^^
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
Here's Blade Mantis mode! Access 2nd form! He will appear on ep5!
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Posted 7/6/08
A very very good story...but try not to copy stuff tat are present in other KR series...Suggestion:Add evil rider....
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xangelx93 wrote:

A very very good story...but try not to copy stuff tat are present in other KR series...Suggestion:Add evil rider....


i had planned to do so, he'll appear very late in the story... lol... but i also will put conflicts between good riders because of difference in philosopies about being a rider... i accidentally copied blade's motif... but i can't changed it anymore.. lolz
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Episode 4
Update!

Lasts episode Ren was starting to feel the side effects of some malfunctions on the Rider system a.k.a XGD – 07 Access… His body started to feel mild pain to severe pains and started to feel weak… As he fights a virion these pains started to affect him greatly causing him to lose concentration and was defeated by the Virion… Luckily he was thrown very far to the virion so that the virion didn’t saw him… The virion escapes leaving Ren struggling to reach for the rider system as he faints…

Returning to the present…

Shinji, still looking for Ren and already sweating, heard his phone ringing. He picks up his phone in his pocket and sees an unknown number, curious he answered the phone and heard an unfamiliar voice, but what started him the most is… voice in phone: ”Uhmm… Are you a relative of Seiji Ren? We have him in our hospital. Someone found him unconscious on the ground somewhere near the ComWorX shop… If you are please go here immediately”, Shinji: “What? Oh, I’m not a relative but a friend… But I’ll go there anyways… Where is your hospital located?” The voice was a nurse and she told him the hospital’s address. After getting the address, Shinji immediately calls Lena and told her what happened… Lena, knowing the situation started panicking on the phone… She immediately calls for a cab while she is talking to Shinji, asking for the hospital’s address… Shinji arrives first in the hospital and started asking Ren’s room… Ren’s room was located at the third floor of the building, room 307… He went in and sees a nurse, whom he taught responsible in calling him. Also he sees the rider system completely safe in the table beside Ren… Shinji: “ Uhhm.. Nurse, what is his condition?” Nurse: “ Oh, are you Shinji-san? Seiji-san is currently suffering from severe physical damage, but we can’t think of anything that had cause it. It’s like he was being killed by something very powerful… But don’t worry now, he’s stable and maybe be able to leave the hospital in three days… His body seems to quickly recover from those injuries…” Shinji: “Thanks a lot, you can charge the bill to my account, here’s my card…” As Shinji gives his credit card Lena arrives to see Ren in that state…Lena started to cry as Shinji comforts her and told her Ren’s situation… He also explains the malfunctions of the rider system Shinji: “ This system is still incomplete, as I see it, it still isn’t suitable for human use… BUT, I also saw something that will help us…” Lena: “What is it?” Shinji: “ It has an upgrade program, a program that enables the system to be upgraded by connecting it in a computer… I’ll do my best to fix some of its bugs until Ren recovers… But, until that time, don’t let him fight with those monsters… I think he fights for revenge…” Lena: “ Revenge?” Shinji: “yes, actually I recently discovered the accident that happened 2 and half years ago was caused by a Virion… And his parents was in that accident..” Lena: “…” Shinji: “I’ll be leaving for now to fix this… But I might noit be able to fix it entirely, this thing is very complicated, even for my, excuse me for my word, excellent brain…” Lena: “I see… Ganbatte… I’ll take care of him for now…” Shinji: “BUT, in return for helping him, you’re going to have a date with me on Saturday ok?” Lena: “ Eh? Sure, if its for our friend”

Shinji leaves thinking about the system as he goes home and Lena sits besides Ren… At that same time, Ren was awake and overheard their discussion… Ren: “There is a flaw on the rider system?” Lena: “Oh! Your awake! Thank goodness! Yes, it has a severe flaw that made you suffer that…” Ren: “ I see…” Lena seeing Ren down for the 2nd time in his life doesn’t know how to cheer him up, just like last time his parents were killed… It took him very long time to return to his normal self, a happy-go-lucky guy… As she thinks about these, she starts to cry, not because of Ren’s injuries but because she can’t help him whenever he is in need… Since middle-high, Lena liked Ren… Their first meeting, is still fresh to her memory…

It was Friday and she was walking home in a very late night cause of some school activities… As she walks, 3 pervets started harassing her, 2 of them were college students and the last one was around 26 years old… When they were almost starting to took her clothes off, one of the men is knocked out cold… The two were startled and before the other college student can react, Ren had dealt a blow in the stomach and kicked him in the balls and knocks him down by a chop in the neck… The 27-year old man tries to attack Ren but Ren easily dodged the attack and tripped the man and then attacked him, kicking and finally chopped on the neck knocking him out… Ren: “Girls are like flowers, equally beautiful and must be caressed not to be toyed with…” At that instant Lena fell for Ren… Many times did Ren always save her but never did she was able to help him… Realizing this she can’t help but cry… Ren, seeing Lena crying, tries to sit up and comforts her… Ren: “Lena-chan, don’t cry now… See I’m ok now… Don’t worry, Shinji will be able to fix the system” Lea: “Its not just that! You always come and save people especially me, not caring if you hurt yourself… BUT! But I never even helped you or comfort you in times when you’re down! I… I have always been just a burden!” Ren: “don’t talk like that… Lena-chan yu have never been a burden… In fact, you helped me and Shinji a lot from before… And right now your helping me recover, so please don’t cry now… Lena starts to slowly stop crying Ren hugged her to comfort her… Ironically, Lena was the one Ren guarded because Lena fell asleep after crying… Ren: “You’re always like this, you never changed, that’s why I like you…”

At the EWC company, Lorenzo and Lance is discussing something about, another system… Another rider system as Lorenzo says to Lance… Lorenzo: “The rider system is almost finish… In about 2 months, no, maybe in 7 weeks… It will be officially ready for use… And I want, you, Lance to be the one to wield this system…” Lance: “Thank you for entrusting me that rider system, may I ask the name of that system?” Lorenzo: xgg-103 aka Kamen Rider Beat…” Lance: “ Kamen Rider Beat… I will do everything I can in order to protect this world against these virions using this rider system!” Lorenzo: “Good, I’ll be expecting that… And I want you to continue to find who the one using KR Access…is” Lance: “It really is Access? How do you say sir?” Lorenzo: “Some underling has saw and took a photo of him fighting that virion that knocked you out…” Lance: “I’m sorry for that sir… It won’t happen again” Lorenzo: “I know… Well you are dismissed… I’ll call for you again next time for an update about the new system…”

Three days had passed since Ren’s hospitalization and as Ren and Lena goes out of the hospital, a newspaper flew and hits Ren… As Ren reads the headline, blood started to rush to his brain remembering his parent’s death…
Headline: “Mysterious deaths everywhere! Be careful in leaving your house”
He automatically knew it was a virion’s fault that caused these deaths… Lena, seeing the rage in Ren’s eyes she then purposely let her slip and fall… Ren startled by Lena’s clumsiness temporarily forgots his anger and started to laugh at Lena… Ren:”let me help you…” Lena: “I’m ok… Geez, you laughed at my mistake, your mean~” Ren: “Peace! Hehehe… You’re clumsy as always… Hehehe”

As Ren and Lena was riding his motorcycle to go home… Ren accidentally sees the virion that he attacked last time but failed to kill… He asked lena to call Shinji to bring the system if already fixed… Lena picks her phone and starts to call Shinji, it took time before Shinji answered the phone… Shinji: “What? The system? Oh, well it isn’t completely… Alright alright, I’ll bring it! Where are you… Don’t worry, the bug that causes the injuries are gone now and I improve some of Access’s abilities…” As Lena puts her phone back at her pocket, a man appeared in front of the… Man: “ Oh, you’re the one I failed to kill last time..” Ren: “Failed to.. Wait! You’re that virion???” Man: “I’ll surely kill you now!” The man transformed into a bee-like monster and starts to attack them… Ren, grabs Lena and runs as the bee virion chases them… They tried to hide in a corner of a small building but the bee virion is able to fly and spotted them… It attacked using needles but in a very large form… Luckily they weren’t hit by the needles… At last they were cornered by the bee virion… As the bee virion readies for the final blow, something hits it and because of the pain made the bee virion fly to evade another attack… Ther, standing with an unusual gun, Shinji… He smiled and threw the Rider system to Ren… Ren: “Thanks Shinji!”… Ren swipes the portal card into the henshin device’s top, the device announcing: “Initiallizing” Ren: “HENSHIN!”… Ren throws the card opposite the device, the device laser hits the card making it to hologram and announcing “Portal Out!” as a hologram appears and goes to Ren… Ren successfully transform into KR Access as the henshin device anoounced “Accessed on!”… Access made his way to the buildings rooftop by jumping and using some parts of the building to jump again… He arrives at the rooftop and runs toward the flying bee virion and jumps when he was near enough and punched the monster in the body making both of the fall towards the ground… In mid-air both tries to attack each other, punching and kicking… As they came near the ground, Access slots in the “power” chip in the Henshindevice the device announcing “Power!”… They both landed on the ground but Access wasn’t hurt due to “power’s” effect… The henshin device then announced “Effect off” due to power chip’s time limit(30secs but due to the fall, it effect was turned off in order to protect access’s body)… The bee virions recovers quickly but was kicked by Ren sending it a few meters away… Furious, the bee virion attacks with his needles… Access, then used the chip “Shield” that he slotted in the Hdevice announcing “shield on!” and a force field appeared protecting Access from the needles but disappears after a while… Access then gets three chips and slots them in the Hdevice… The Hdevice announcing: “POWER! KICK! GRAVITY!... Destruction Kick!” the bee virion tries to escape by starting to fly but Access had jumped very high at the same time… Access then quickly falls toward the flying bee, accelerating every mili-second… Access: “RIDE KICK!” the bee virion is hit and explodes… Access safely landed on the ground and reverts back to his human form… Ren: “T-This feeling! As though, my body feels light! Before I can feel the rider armor’s weight but… but now!” Shinji: “Hoho! It’s all because of this genius! Hahaha!” Ren: “ Thanks a lot man!” Shinji: “ Don’t worry, it’s for free…” Shinji looks evilly at Lena, as Ren tries to savor the feeling of the win… Shinji: “hehehe~”

End of ep4!
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nice story =)..very long and i like reading a biology book XD
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Posted 7/6/08
ya me too ^^
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
Great! You're adding details in the story but now you should make PARAGRAPHS
because all the words are cramped together...
Other than that...GREAT READ!!!
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I've create a page for u. and i've edit it with paragraph. i leave your prev ep for u to edit. unless u think u want to leave it that way.
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Aegis85 wrote:

I've create a page for u. and i've edit it with paragraph. i leave your prev ep for u to edit. unless u think u want to leave it that way.


Thanks a lot senpai! I'll gonna edit those too... But i don't know when.. lol... Maybe if i got another free time... Maybe this week... lol
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sorry for the delay guyz! i'll be posting ep5 and 6 tommorrow! been busy and been in the hospital... lol
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