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This is the Story About Kamen Rider Rebirth !!
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Episode 1: Rebirth Online !!!

(17 years ago ...)

Guy's Father and mother : Takumi u must take care of yourself !!!
Guy:No !!!!! Mum !!! Dad!!!

(Both of the guy's parents were killed by a Scyther)

(The present...)

Guy : Not That Dream again....... OH NO !!! i am late for work !!!

(The Guy is called Fujiwara Takumi. He is 20 years old this year . He lost his parents since he was 3 . He staying alone now .)

Takumi arrive at the shop

Takumi: Sorry Boss !! i overslept !!!
Boss: one more time and u are Fired !! You got me ??
Takumi: Yes ....

(Takumi work for the whole day ... Now he is on his way home ....)

Takumi: Man i am so tired ........

(Takumi Saw a Lady and a Monster ....)

Takumi:That Monster .....
Horse Scyther: give me that System !!!
Sakura: No !!! u won't !! its my father's !!!

(Sakura used the rider system and place a deck in the belt)

Rider System: DNA not match ....
Sakura: No way!!!!
Horse Scyther: Don't make me laugh !

(Horse Scyther punch her and she flew as Takumi)

Takumi: ouch that hurts !!!
Sakura: Sorry !!

(Sakura quickly place the belt at Takumi Body)

Takumi: What are you doing ???

(Sakura press the number 456 placed the numpad in the belt)

Rider System: DNA Match .... Online !!!

(Takumi Transformed in Kamen Rider Rebirth)

Rebirth: Hey, what is this ??

Horse Scyther : No way !!! how can this be ???

Sakura: Use it to fight !!!

Rebirth: ok ...

(Kamen Rider Rebirth punch and kicks and Horse Scyther flew and land on the ground)

Sakura: Press 1 and 3 from the numpad!!

(Rebirth press 1 and 3 from the numpad...)

Rider System: Fire ,Punch .... BlazingPunch !!!

(Rebirth punch the horse scyther and the horse scyther melted)

Rebirth: That punch is for my parents, you monster !!!

(Rebirth took the numpad out and change back to Takumi)

Takumi: ....................

End of EP 1 ^_^
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tell u what. ur fan fic lack of originality. maybe you should write them on paper first.
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Episode 2: A Troublesome new life

Takumi: phew ... Finally got that revenge .......

(The Belt disappear in his body)

Takumi: Hey , The belt .... its gone !!
Sakura: No the belt is in your body
Takumi: are you joking ??
Sakura: No, i am not joking . If this belt found a suitable host and match its DNA , It will stick with it forever
Takumi: No !!! this can't be happening !!! I want my normal life back not in this stupid belt !!!
Sakura: i have no choice ...
Sakura: i dun have anywhere to stay...
Takumi: How about u come my house for sleep overnight and tell me what happen tomorrow ..
Sakura: ok ...........

(Both of them when home )

Sakura: Where do i sleep ??
Takumi: On the Floor ..
Sakura: No way !!

(Sakura push Takumi while he was about to lie down on his bed)
Takumi: Hey thats my bed !!
Sakura: you sleep on the floor
Takumi: ok whatever .

(The next day ....they wake up)

Takumi: Now , can u tell me what is going on around here??
Sakura: .Its like this ... 10 years ago , my father build this system for protecting humans ..
Takumi: What is this called??
Sakura: Its called the Rider System .. and the Rider name is called Rebirth ..
Takumi: Rebirth?? What are those monsters ??
Sakura: Its called the Scythers , They attack humans for their own purpose
Takumi: What purpose??
Sakura: To continue living ...
Takumi: Ohhh i see ....
Sakura: May i know what's your name ??
Takumi: i am Takumi Fujiwara , i am 20 years old , lost my parents since 3 and you ??
Sakura : I am Sakura Kinomo, i am 19 years old , my mother left me and my father died 10 years old
Takumi: ohh.. you about the same as me ..
Sakura: Why did you want to revenge that Scyther so badly?
Takumi: That Scyther killed my parents ....
Sakura:oo.. thats sad
Sakura: lets get something to eat to cheer u up !!!
Takumi: sure

(Both of them went to the shopping centre after their breakfast)

Sakura: i am so full !!
Takumi: me too .....
Sakura: i wanna buy this and this !!
Takumi: A 100 Bucks?? are you crazy i am broke !!
Sakura: oh... man .. Promise me u will buy it !!
Takumi: ok i will ...........

(Both of them went out and saw a Bee Scyther)

Sakura: Scyther !!!!!!
Takumi: How do i summon the belt ??
Sakura: How i know ??
Bee Scyther: you are wasting my time !!!

(Bee Scyther Fled ........)

Sakura: Great it escaped !!! Because of you !!
Takumi: Whatever we will get him soon ......

(Both of them went home .....)

Takumi: I wonder when will it appear again ??
Sakura: Who knows...
Unknown Lady: ahhhhhhhh!!!!!!!!!
Takumi: Did you hear that ??
Sakura: someone screaming

(Both of them went to the void deck and the lady was killed by the Bee Scyther)

Takumi: Its you !!!
Bee Scyther: hi , nice to see you again .............
Sakura: Try to summon the belt
Takumi thinking: (if it is called rebirth, maybe i should try it )
Takumi: Rebirth !!!

(The Belt appear in his body)

Takumi: alright !!!

(Takumi took the numpad and press 456)

Takumi: Henshin !!!!

(Takumi placed the numpad into the belt )

Rider System: Online !!!

(Takumi change to Rebirth)

Rebirth: you are going down !!!
Bee Scyther: Bring it !!

(Rebirth tired to punch the Bee Scyther but it slash him with its tail)

Rebirth: ouch ! thats hurts !!!

(Bee Scyther slash Rebirth and he flew metres away)

Rebirth: ouch !!

(Rebirth press 1 and 5 by accident)

Rebirth :Opps i press 5

Rider System: Fire,Kick ...... Blazing Kick

(Rebirth jump and kick the Bee Scyther and it melted)

Rebirth: alright !!!

(Rebirth took out the numpad and became Takumi)

Takumi: this thing rocks !!!
Sakura: Thats a great battle !! Lets go home

(After that ... they went home ....)

(Takumi came out of bath and saw the place fitted with clothes)

Takumi: hey , where that come from??
Sakura: From your allowance ...
Takumi: What ???

(Takumi checked his allowance and saw only 5 bucks left)

Takumi: No !!! my allowance ..........
Sakura: Thanks for the allowance Takumi !!
Takumi: I will only get my allowance next month ...... WHY THIS KEEP HAPPENING TO ME !!!!!!!

End of EP 2 ^_^
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Aegis85 wrote:

tell u what. ur fan fic lack of originality. maybe you should write them on paper first.


at least this time i am not out of the FanFic
Thinking of what to add on .......
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uh serious from ep 1 i felt it like Faiz story..n kinn story ~_~..
beside ur ep 2 seem very simple...lol
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uh serious from ep 1 i felt it like Faiz story..n kinn story ~_~..
beside ur ep 2 seem very simple...lol


ya its simple but i have to think better for ep 3
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i am always lack of originality
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the girl easily accepted sleeping at his house??? LOLZ! Overall, ep1 looks a lil bit like mine.. Takumi eh, being forced to be a rider~ That reminds me of Faiz... lolz... its just ep2 you can impre it still amn^^
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the girl easily accepted sleeping at his house??? LOLZ! Overall, ep1 looks a lil bit like mine.. Takumi eh, being forced to be a rider~ That reminds me of Faiz... lolz... its just ep2 you can impre it still amn^^


yaya ............. thinking of ep 3 now
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Episode 3 : An old friend

(Takumi work up and watch sakura cooking)

Takumi: um..... smells good
Sakura: Its my best cooking !!! To pay for clothes..........
Takumi: My 800 bucks T_T
Sakura: i'm so sorry .....
Takumi: i will get my salary soon i need to go work now
Sakura: Hey what about my cooking ??
Takumi: i will come back and eat
Sakura: ok then .......

(Takumi ride his bicycle to work)

Takumi: Hi boss !! glad i am on time ....
Boss: Finally !! u make it !! Here is your new partner

(Takumi saw a yellow ,long hair girl )

Boss: Megumi!!! come here
Megumi: Yes boss !!
Boss: Takumi, she is your new partner . Her name is called Megumi Salatin
Takumi: nice to meet you !! i am Takumi Fujiwara
Megumi: nice to see you too !!
Boss: Takumi teach her what to do she is new !
Takumi: ok boss ..... may i have a leave boss??
Boss: This will be the last time u got it??
Takumi: ok boss........

(Boss walks away)

Megumi: so where you want to go ??
Takumi: how about outside ??
Megumi: sure !!

(Both of them walk out and saw a Rabbit Scyther)

Rabbit Scyther: i will jump and slam you
Takumi: Megumi !! Quick hide !!
Megumi: i am not going anywhere ...

(Megumi took a whip from her hair)

Takumi: where that whip come from ??
Megumi: i always put it in my hair .. Now move !!

(Megumi push Takumi away)
(Takumi ran behind the wall)

Takumi: maybe i will help her ... Rebirth !!

(Belt appear ,Takumi took the numpad and press 456)

Takumi: Henshin!!!

(Takumi place the numpad in the belt)

Rider System: Online !!!!

(Takumi transform to Rebirth)

(Rebirth ran towards the rabbit scyther)

(Megumi turn around)

Megumi: Rebirth !!

(Rebirth punch the rabbit scyther and it hop away ..........)

Rebirth: darn !! it escape !!
Megumi: Hey wait Rebirth !!!

(Rebirth ran away till he is out of sight he change back to Takumi)

Takumi: phew that was close ..........

(Megumi saw Takumi)

Megumi: Takumi!!!
Takumi: Megumi??
Megumi: are you alright ???
Takumi: ya i am fine ...
Takumi: lets go back to work
Megumi: Sure !!

(Both Takumi and Megumi work till night and went home )

Takumi: *sigh*
Sakura: TAKUMI !!!!!!!!!!
Takumi: yes ??
Sakura: Why u didn't try my cooking ??
Takumi: oohh.. sorry ....
Sakura: i am not going to talk to you !!!
Takumi: Problem again ........

(Both Sakura and Takumi slept and woke up it the morning )

Door Bell: Ding dong !
Takumi: i will get it ..

(Behind the door Takumi saw Megumi)

Megumi: Hi Takumi !!
Takumi: Megumi ?? why are you here ?? how you know my address !!
Megumi: Well i am staying next door !!

(Sakura heard and ran towards Takumi and Megumi)

Takumi and Sakura: WHAT ????
Megumi: Takumi is this your girlfriend ??
Sakura: No way !!
Takumi: she is just a friend that is homeless
Megumi: oo i see
Unknown man : ahhh!!!!!!!!!
Takumi: Lets go Sakura !!
Sakura: ok !!
Megumi: wait i am coming with you !!

(Three of them and saw the rabbit scyther)
(Megumi took her whip from her hair)

Megumi: i will do it !!

(Megumi whipped the scyther but it went behind her )

Rabbit Scyther : useless pathetic

(The Rabbit Scyther knock her out )

Takumi: Megumi!!
Sakura: Takumi !!! Transform now !!
Takumi: ok ... Rebirth !!!

(The Belt appear and Takumi took the numpad and press 456)

Takumi: Henshin !!

(Takumi placed the numpad in the belt)

Rider System: Online !!!

(Takumi transform to Rebirth )

Rebirth: you are going down !!!

(Rebirth punch the Rabbit Scyther 3 times but it counter back with its headbutt)

Rebirth: That rabbit is stubborn !!

(Rebirth press 145 from the numpad)

Rider System: Kick,Fire,Mach .......... Sonic Blazing Kick

(Rebirth ran towards rabbit scyther and kick him 2 times as fast as before)
(Rabbit Scyther melted)

Rebirth : Alright !!!

(Rebirth took the deck out of the belt and change back to Takumi)
(Megumi woke up and saw Rebirth change back to Takumi)

Megumi: Takumi?? you are rebirth??
Takumi thinking: oh no !!
Takumi: erm... sorry didn't mean to tell you
Megumi: you never change do you takumi ??
Takumi: Those words .......
Takumi: Are you Megumi Salatin from Jisan college??
Megumi: yup !!!
Takumi: So it is you ...

End of Ep 3 ^_^
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instead of being a fan-fic urs just become a 'script'. LOL. but the story is getting better. hope u read lots of other fan fic. it helps u improve your story.
here's one of mine. but not kamen rider related
http://aegisdream.blogspot.com
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instead of being a fan-fic urs just become a 'script'. LOL. but the story is getting better. hope u read lots of other fan fic. it helps u improve your story.
here's one of mine. but not kamen rider related
http://aegisdream.blogspot.com


it is really becoming to a script ..........
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btw nice blog
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uhhh....seriously i think ur story too simple...n they can go out to have a walk when there are suppose to work? haha...
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