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umm dont worry ur get it mines ok now becuz i went through so much lol
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djloi wrote:

uhhh....seriously i think ur story too simple...n they can go out to have a walk when there are suppose to work? haha...


i thinking wat to do with it
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episode 4 is on the way ........................
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put more details in ur fanfic.
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Episode 4 : New Rider !!! Kamen Rider Dice !!

(Sakura wake Takumi up and ran to next door to wake megumi up)

Megumi: Whats with the rush ??
Sakura: come my room , i will tell you

(Megumi and Sakura went into Takumi's room to find Takumi)

Sakura: Takumi ?? Where are you ??
Takumi: Brushing my teeth
Megumi: So what is it you want to talk about ??

(Takumi came out of the bathroom and saw Sakura and Megumi talking)

Megumi: What is it??
Sakura: When did you meet Takumi??
Megumi: Long Story...
Sakura: Just say !!
Takumi: you can't force people like that
Sakura: ok sorry .......
Megumi: Takumi is a senior of mine in Jisan College .He graduate 1 year eariler than me . After i graduate , i wanted to find him
Sakura: Why you want to thank him for ???
Megumi: He always helps me in my studies
Sakura: I never know you are so kind Takumi
Takumi: are you saying i am not kind at all??
Sakura: yes ........Shouldn't you go to work ??
Takumi: Its Sunday .. i only work on the Monday Wednesday Friday and Saturday
Sakura: oo ok

(A man came to the door and knock)

Takumi: i will get it !!

(Takumi open the door)

Man: Hi , are you Takumi Fujiwara ??
Takumi: Yes ,i am
Man: Its been awhile isn't it , my old rival ??
Takumi: You are Daisuke Akusa ??
Man: Yes i am !!

(The man is called Daisuke Akusa . He is 20 years old . He is a old rival of Takumi since college)

Daisuke: So this is where you stay ??

(Daisuke saw two girls behind Takumi)

Daisuke: Hey no fair !! why are two girls sleeping with you ??
Megumi and Sakura: Hey !! we are not sleeping with Takumi !!
Megumi: I stay next door .
Sakura: And i stay here sleeping on the bed .Takumi sleep on the floor ..
Daisuke: oo ok,how about we go for a breakfast??
Takumi: Sure !!

(Daisuke,Takumi,Sakura and Megumi went to the food court)

Daisuke: What is this mess ??
Takumi: Who did this ??

(Sakura and Megumi turn behind and saw the plant Scyther)

Sakura and Megumi : Scyther !!

(Daisuke and Takumi turn behind )

Takumi: Its a Scyther !!
Daisuke : Its a what ??
Takumi: we will talk later ....

(Takumi ran away till he is out of sight)

Takumi: Rebirth !!

(The Belt appear ,Takumi took the numpad and press 456)

Takumi : Henshin !!

(Takumi place the numpad in the belt )

Rider System: Online !!!

(Takumi Transform to Rebirth)

(Rebirth ran towards the Plant Scyther)

Daisuke: cool !! where that come from ??

(Rebirth punch the Plant Scyther and move back to draw three cards)

Rebirth : Maybe this should do

(Rebirth press 143 from the numpad)

Rider System: Punch,Fire,Mach .....Sonic Blazing Punch

(Rebirth punch the Plant Scyther and it burned into ashes)

Rebirth: Alright !!

(Rebirth walk away till he is out of sight and change back to Takumi)

Takumi: Hi !! What did i miss ??
Megumi: Nothing lets go !!

(When the four of them was about to go,Daisuke saw a belt in the ashes)

Daisuke: Cool !!what is it??

(Takumi , Megumi and Sakura turn behind )

Takumi: No get out of the belt !!!

(The belt has merge with Daisuke )

(Daisuke eyes turn green)

Daisuke : Henshin !!!

(Daisuke turned in Dice)

Dice: Rebirth will be destroyed !!!

(Dice fled ...)

Takumi: How this happen ??

(They followed Dice )

Dice : Rebirth !!! come out !!

Takumi: Here i am !! Rebirth !!

(The belt appear ,Takumi press 456)

Takumi: Henshin !!

(Takumi place the numpad in the belt )

Rider System: Online !!!

(Takumi transform to Rebirth)

Rebirth: i will save you !! Daisuke ..

(Dice hands is filled with aura )

Rebirth: this is bad !!

(Rebirth press 143 from the numpad)

Rider system: Punch, Kick , Mach .... Sonic Blazing Punch !!

(Dice flew down and punch Rebirth while Rebirth punch the belt )
(Dice flew away)

(Rebirth remove the numpad and became Takumi)

Takumi: He is gone for now with Daisuke......

End of Ep 4 ^_^
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as usual..lack of storyline..u need improve on this
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your rider's finisher is the same as in Blades... Its almost the same ... You even used the same name of the cards lol... well... As Djloi said, it lacks a story line... But you can still improve! Ganbatte!
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kinn33 wrote:

your rider's finisher is the same as in Blades... Its almost the same ... You even used the same name of the cards lol... well... As Djloi said, it lacks a story line... But you can still improve! Ganbatte!


thx ^_^
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Posted 7/8/08
i guess you should just LISTEN AND FOLLOW what people have
advised you to...and not just say, "yeah" "ok" cos to me,
frankly speaking, your fanfic is boring.
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Posted 7/10/08
Episode 5 will be late ... cuz i am busy
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i will stop for awhile due to busy ...........
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VictorBoy wrote:

i will stop for awhile due to busy ...........


dont worry, i dont c ppl waiting. hehehe
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Posted 7/17/08
ya i noe that
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Posted 7/17/08
aegis-kun dun u think u too honest about tat
Posted 7/17/08

djloi wrote:

aegis-kun dun u think u too honest about tat


LOL. i think he's too brave to speak out. i actually also have that in my mind. hahahaha!
sorry victorboy...
but i solute him for being honest (-_-)>
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