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djloi wrote:

aegis-kun dun u think u too honest about tat


ah~gomen did it hurt? it was a joke there. or is it really true? you too?
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nah i dun care it hurt or not as long as i am happy with it
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Episode 5: Release the speed !! Speed Mode !!!


As Takumi was still thinking about the incident that happen to Daisuke , he began to lose focus on battling .

Sakura: Hey , don't feel bad about it !!
Takumi: I felt sorry for Daisuke,i hope he is alright ...
Megumi: He will be alright !!!

Takumi still can't forget about it. He have not sleep for 2 days already

Megumi: Come on !! cheer up !!
Sakura: Ya !! You have not sleep for 2 days !!
Takumi: Daisuke ...

A woman out of nowhere ran ..

Takumi: Is she busy or something??
Sakura: No !! look there is a Scyther !!

Takumi , Sakura and Megumi ran down the stairs

Takumi: Rebirth !! Henshin !!!

Takumi Rebirth's belt appear ,as he press 456 on the numpad and place the numpad in the belt . The belt announcing: Online !!
As Takumi change to rebirth, he felt tired and weak .

Rebirth: i felt so tired ..
Tiger Scyther: you can't beat me . My speed is faster than u !!

As the tiger scyther ran infront of rebirth, The tiger scyther use its claw and slash Rebirth away ..

Megumi and Sakura: oh no !!! Takumi !!

After Rebirth was hit far away , he return back to Takumi

Megumi: Takumi !!! are you alright ??
Takumi: i felt so tired , and that scyther is fast i can't beat him .
Sakura: Lets bring you home first !!

As they reach home , Takumi went to bed ..

Megumi: Maybe Rebirth have a new power , He can't in that form forever.
Sakura: you are right , maybe there is a new form.

Sakura went to her bag and search for a paper all afternoon and evening and she found the paper and took it out.

Sakura: Got it !!
Megumi: what is it ??
Sakura: There it is . The speed form code !!
Megumi:579?? what kind for number is that ??
Sakura: Never mind . Lets search for the ladys that have been attack

As they left the house , they ask from house to house and the ladies parents that will attacked . And they wrote their age and they realise the scyther only attacked ladies from 20-26 years old . As they heard it, They went back home .
Megumi: lets sleep i'm tired !!
Sakura: Me too !!

They fell asleep and woke up after 3 hours ..
The next day .. Takumi woke up and saw Megumi and Sakura was awake

Takumi:Yawn..
Sakura: Hi !! You are awake .
Takumi: Ya , i felt refresh

Takumi notice a paper on the table

Takumi: What is that paper ..
Megumi: erm... nothing nothing .........

Takumi face expression changed.......

Megumi and Sakura: Takumi??
Takumi: nothing . all i think now is defeat that Scyther !! Lets go !!
Megumi: Wait!! i notice something .
Takumi: What??
Megumi: the scyther only target young girls around the age of 20 - 26
Takumi: How you know ??
Megumi: didn't you see the lady yesterday ??
Takumi: Ya !!
Megumi: she was one of them that was attacked.
Takumi: So we need a lure right??
Megumi: Yup !

Both look at Sakura

Sakura: me ???
Takumi: of course !! you didn't think of any idea
Sakura: okok i will do it !!

As Sakura wear her school uniform walk around , Takumi and Megumi will spying on her

Takumi: Ok! thats a good lure !!

Soon the scyther came ..

Tiger Scyther: one beatiful girl coming right up !!
Takumi: I don't think so , Rebirth !!! Henshin !!

Takumi Rebirth's belt appear ,as he press 456 on the numpad and place the numpad in the belt .The belt announcing: Online !!
And he change to Rebirth

Rebirth: i won't go easy this time !!
Tiger Scyther : I told you i am faster than you

As the tiger scyther ran infront and slash Rebirth , he was send a miles away.

Rebirth: Ouch !!!
Sakura: Takumi !!! Press 579 !!
Rebirth: Are you kidding ??
Sakura: Just do it !!!
Rebirth: okok !!

As Rebirth press 579 on the numpad, The belt announcing: Speed Mode !!! Online !!
Rebirth armour and eyes from White become Dark blue and a blue staff appear infront of him as he grab it .

Rebirth : wow this is a new form ??
Tiger Scyther: it makes no difference

The Tiger Scyther ran infront slash Rebirth but Rebirth was nowhere seen

Tiger Scyther : where are you !!
Rebirth: Behind you !!!

Rebirth use the staff and slash the tiger scyther many times till he flew a miles away .

Rebirth: Time to end this !!!

Rebirth press 741 on the numpad . The belt announcing: Water ,Torperdo, Whirlpool ... Hydro Blast !!!
Rebirth spin its staff as 2 Whirlpools appear beside him. The 2 Whirlpools is loaded with torperdo .
The Torperdo start shooting and it shot all around the Tiger Scyther as he had no chance to escape .
Rebirth came near him as he stop spinning his staff and he slash the Scyther with a strong Water Slash
The Tiger Scyther melted ..

Rebirth: phew glad thats over

Rebirth took out the numpad and became Takumi

Takumi: lets go home !!!
Megumi and Sakura: OK !!

As they reach home , Megumi ran to her room and bring all the things to Takumi's room

Megumi: i will stay here from now on !!
Takumi: Sure !!
Sakura: It will be fun i guess ..

Takumi thinking: I know you are out there , Daisuke , Please be alright .

End of EP 5 ^_^
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this is worst i guess .................
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too str8 foward.
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too str8 foward.


thx for the advice
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you should add more details in your fanfic instead of so much fast paced dialogue.
Posted 7/29/08
frankly speaking. it's boring...
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zafz wrote:

you should add more details in your fanfic instead of so much fast paced dialogue.


ok thx ^^
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EP 6 will come very late .......
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Episode 6: Kamen Rider Dice Strikes back !!!

In the forest there is a old man walking and saw Daisuke walking towards him

Old Man: Are you ok ??
Daisuke: Leave me alone ...
Old Man: i can't leave you here !!
Daisuke: GO away !!!

The Rider system started flashing and Daisuke became Dice

Dice: Too bad old man .... bye bye ..

Dice stab the old man with his blade and pull out his blade

Dice: Next person ... Rebirth !!!!

The next day ....

Takumi: Wow , i had this weird dream that it feels like Daisuke is coming
Megumi: Are you serious??
Takumi: I'm not sure ...

Soon the boss from Takumi company came to his house and knock the door and Takumi open the door

Boss: Takumi !!!
Takumi: Yes boss??
Boss: How many leave are you taking ??
Takumi: Can you give me one month leave ?? you can cut my salary
Boss: ok then ... i won't give you your salary for the month but you have to come back after that , is that clear??
Takumi: Yes boss ...

The Boss walks away

Sakura: wow busted !!
Takumi: Whatever...

Soon they felt a evil aura ....

Takumi: You guys feel that ??
Megumi and Sakura: Ya ...
Takumi: Lets go downstairs

Soon they went down and saw KR Dice ...

Takumi: Daisuke !!!
Dice: Rebirth !!!!!!!!!
Takumi: That plant monster is still controlling him !!! Rebirth !!! Henshin !!

Takumi Rebirth's belt appear ,as he press 456 on the numpad and place the numpad in the belt .The belt announcing: Online !!
And he change to Rebirth

Rebirth: Daisuke , i will save you !!!

Dice took out his blade and slash a few times on Rebirth as he flew a miles away

Rebirth: Daisuke !!! Stop it !!!

Dice stop attacking and fled ...

Rebirth: Daisuke ..............

Soon Rebirth change back to Takumi ...

Megumi and Sakura: Takumi !!
Takumi: Daisuke is still been controlled ..

Soon Dice ran into a corner and became Daisuke

Daisuke: How i wish that i never had this belt ...

Meanwhile ....

Takumi: Where is Daisuke ??
Megumi: lets go back, its getting late
Sakura: Ya lets find him tomorrow !!
Takumi: ok ...

They went back and had dinner and went to bed ...
The next day ...
Daisuke went to Takumi's house and knock his door and Takumi open up..

Daisuke: Takumi, Help ....
Takumi: Daisuke !! Lets go the park !!

Soon they reach ..

Daisuke: argh !!! go away Tak !!

Takumi move back a few steps and saw Daisuke became KR Dice ...

Dice: Thats better !!
Takumi: You change him back !!! Rebirth !! Henshin !!

Takumi Rebirth's belt appear ,as he press 456 on the numpad and place the numpad in the belt .The belt announcing: Online !!
And he change to Rebirth and press 579 on the numpad. The belt announced : Speed Mode , Online !!!
Rebirth armour and eyes from White become Dark blue and a blue staff appear infront of him as he grab it .


Rebirth: Daisuke !!! Its me !! I am your friend Tak !!!

Dice touch his head

Dice: Stop it !! Say no more
Rebirth: I know you are still in there , Fight it !!!

Soon Dice became Daisuke and the plant spirit appear behind him ...

Dice/Plant Spirit: Daisuke ,are you leaving me ??
Daisuke: Get out of me !!1
Rebirth: Now !!!

Rebirth use its staff and stab the plant spirit and pull it out of Daisuke
A card appear from the belt as the Plant Spirit land on the ground ..

Dice/Plant Spirit: Daisuke, you need me ...
Daisuke: i will need you but i will overcome you !!!

Daisuke threw the card at the Plant Spirit and the spirit went into the card and flew back to Daisuke hand..
Rebirth change back to Takumi..

Daisuke: The belt ... it won't come off !!!
Takumi: Same as mine ...
Daisuke: well then its ok , thanks for the save Tak !!!
Takumi: Nah its ok !!!

Soon Megumi and Sakura ran towards them ...

Megumi and Sakura: Did we miss anything ??
Takumi: Nothing !!! Lets go Daisuke !!
Daisuke: ok !!!
Takumi: lets stay at my house ! i have rooms for more
Daisuke: ok then i will pack my things and come here !!
Takumi: Glad to have you back Daisuke !!!

End of EP 6 ^_^
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did u realize this one have too much screams?

almost every sentence have "!!"
LOL. but u r taking a step foward. read lots of book to improve ur fic
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ok then thx ^^
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DETAILS! ur Fanfic needs plenty of DETAILS!
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Episode 7: Numpad incompleted ?!

After Rebirth save Daisuke from plant spirit, Daisuke became the KR Dice and began to help Takumi to fight the Scythers .

Takumi: Are you sure that you can overcome it ??
Daisuke: Trust me, i can do it !
Megumi: Ya, his right Tak .
Sakura: You can stop worrying .
Takumi: Since all of you agree with it , i won't stop you .

Takumi took his numpad out and saw sparks poping out of the numpad

Takumi: Hey ! what happen ??
Daisuke: What happen to the numpad ??
Takumi: I'm not sure ....

Sparks stop poping

Takumi: Phew , what a relief ..
Daisuke: Maybe something is wrong with it ..
Takumi: This numpad never go wrong before ..
Sakura: Ya, i wonder why ...
Takumi: you should something about it ..
Sakura: Well .... maybe you can fix it
Takumi: Fix it ? where??
Sakura: My uncle knows how ..
Takumi: Ok then .. lets go !
Megumi and Daisuke: alright !

Soon they went in the car ,during the trip , a Scyther appear ..

Takumi and Daisuke : Scyther !!
Daisuke: Dice !!! Henshin !!
Takumi: Rebirth !! Henshin !!!

Daisuke and Takumi's belt appear , Takumi press 456 on the numpad and place it in the belt while Daisuke place the card in the belt
Daisuke's Belt announced : Ready up !! Takumi's Belt announced : Error ..
And Daisuke change to KR Dice while Takumi remains the same ..

KR Dice: Tak !! why can't you transform ??
Takumi: I don't know, look out !

The Scyther slash KR Dice as he fled ..

KR Dice: What ? Gone ?

KR Dice change back to Daisuke and ran to Takumi

Daisuke: Something is wrong ..
Takumi: i wonder why ...
Sakura: lets go back to the car and go to my uncle's house about it
Megumi: She's right ..

They went back to the car and drove to Sakura's uncle house and ring the door bell as he open the door...

Satio: oh. isn't it Sakura??
Sakura: hi uncle !
Satio: you brought your friends ??
All: Hi uncle !
Takumi: Uncle , i wanna ask you , do you know how to fix the numpad ??
Satio: Yes, i do . Come in .

They went in the uncle's house and saw many computers ..

All: Wow ~!
Sakura: oh ya . i forgot to introduce my uncle , his name is call Kanaye Satio . You can call him Uncle Satio .
Satio: So you are the person who use the system ?
Takumi: Yes ...
Satio: Come with me .

Uncle Satio and Takumi went to the basement ...

Satio: i will check it ..
Takumi: This is a good place ..

After a few mins of checking , Uncle Satio realise something .

Satio: I know what is the problem ..
Takumi: What is it ??
Satio: The numpad wasn't successfully updated ..
Takumi: Why is that so ??
Satio: It happens 5 years ago ..

(5 Years ago ..)

Uncle Satio and his younger brother Taichi , Sakura's father were fixing the system

Satio: How is it ??
Taichi: Almost done ! 70 % completed !!

A Scyther appear ..

Mouse Scyther : i am here to destroy it !!
Taichi: Go , Brother take it away !!

(The present ..)

Satio: I took the system and numpad but i realise the numpad wasn't complete ..
Takumi: So you are saying , i can't transform because it wasn't complete ??
Satio: Ya ... Actually it would take about 10 mins to complete .. but you used it .. it would take about 1 day ..
Takumi: you mean i can't transform for 1 day ??
Satio: i afraid so ...
Takumi: Ok then please update it ...
Satio: you can rest here for the night ..
Takumi: ok then .. thanks

Takumi came out of the basement and told everybody about the problem ..

Megumi: you can't transform for a day ??
Takumi: Ya..
Daisuke: Thats bad ...
Sakura: Its getting late .. Lets sleep for the day !
All: ok ...

They slept for the night and the next day ...

Takumi: Uncle, is it done ??
Satio: Soon ...

Computer Censor started flashing ..

Takumi: What happen??
Satio: Its a Scyther , it must be the scyther from 5 years ago ...

Takumi went to wake everyone up and tell them a scyther is approaching

Daisuke: i am going to stop it !
Takumi: Stop him !
Daisuke: ok ...

Daisuke went out of the house and saw the scyther

Mouse Scyther : Where is the system ?
Daisuke: i am not giving the likes of you ! Dice !! Henshin !!!

Daisuke's belt appear , Daisuke place the card in the belt. The belt announced : Ready up !!
And Daisuke become KR Dice .

KR Dice: you are going down !!

Inside the house .

Takumi: i am going out !
Sakura: you can't
Takumi: i can stop him for a moment . Megumi lent me your whip !
Megumi: ok ...
Takumi: Thanks !

Takumi went out of the house and use the whip to whip the Scyther

KR Dice : Tak??
Takumi: i will save you !!

Uncle Satio went out of the house

Takumi: Uncle??
Satio: Kid! Its done !
Takumi: Throw it !

Uncle Satio throw the numpad at Takumi as Takumi grabs it

Takumi: Rebirth !! Henshin !!

Takumi's belt appear , Takumi press 456 on the numpad and place it in the belt , The belt announced : Online !!
And Takumi become KR Rebirth .

KR Rebirth: This time , you are going down , need a tag team , Daisuke??
KR Dice: You bet !

KR Rebirth press 145 on the numpad while KR Dice press Kick and enter on the card
Rebirth's belt announced : 1,4,5... Sonic Blazing Kick while Dice's belt announced : Kick
Both of them kick the scyther as it burns to ashes ..

KR Rebirth: wow , now the announcing is different .

Both of them transformed back

Takumi: Thanks ! Uncle .
Satio: No problem !

During the evening ...

Satio: Here is a computer and my number, incase you are looking for a Scyther and you need me .
All: Thanks !
Satio: oh ya , by the way Tak .
Takumi: yes??
Satio: Here are 2 new codes . 589 and 599 . Hope someday you will need it .
Takumi: ok then . thanks Uncle !
Megumi: lets head back !
Sakura: sure. Bye Uncle !
Satio: Bye !!

They drove away ..

Satio: What a bunch of good kids ...

In the Car ...

Takumi: Thanks Uncle Satio .

End of EP 7 ^_^
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