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Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
aha! this is my first time to write a fic! so please i need your help..
wee.. im new to all of this so comments please..^^


Arioka Daiki
Viniel Hamano
Hikari Sakamoto
Mayumi Fujiwara
Aya Hamano
Juenesse Tsukamoto

Supporting Character:

Nakajima Yuto
Yamada Ryosuke
Ryutaro Morimoto
Hikaru Yaotome

CHAPTER 1: Soccer Girl

“Viniel!” called Hikari.
“Yamete!” she added.

Early in the morning, Hikari is yelling loudly in the soccer field calling her sister.

“Viniel, you did not ask permission again to your sister?” Juenesse asked while holding the soccer ball.
“YUP!” Viniel replied proudly.
“What a problem!” Juenesse exclaimed and Viniel just laughed.

“Neechan always like this…” Viniel sighed and kicked the ball high.
“VINIEL! Don’t do that! I’m not a pro soccer player…” Juenesse complained and added “How can I get the ball there?”

--- I’m Jenshent Viniel Hamano, but my friends call me Viniel. Everyday I play the soccer here to wait the sunrise with my best friend Juenesse… ---

Juenesse get the ball from a far distance and Hikari arrived heavily panting.

“Why didn’t you ask permission again?” Hikaru asked angrily.
“Gomen neechan…” Viniel replied seriously.
“Daijobu… But next time…” Hikari answered.
“ARIGATO!” Viniel shouted and run towards the ball.

“Geeeshhh” Hikari whispered.
“Juenesse, let’s go…” Viniel said and grabbed her hand.
“Matte… Where are we going?” Juenesse asked.
“ICHIGOS!” Viniel shouted happily.

“Again?” Juenesse exclaimed and sighed.
“I wonder when you will stop eating Ichigos…” she added.
“Never…” Viniel replied and stuck tongue out.

When they reach the store, Viniel saw Daiki walking alone.

“Matte!” Viniel run with all her best and left Juenesse alone. Daiki looked behind and found Viniel running towards to him and he stopped.

“Nande?” Daiki asked and raised his eyebrow.
“Maa nee… Don’t be so cold!” she commented.
“None of your business!” Daiki whined and walk again.
“I said wait!” Viniel shouted.

Daiki just sighed and stopped.

“What again?” he asked with a straight face.
“Just wondering, Basketball or Soccer?” Viniel asked again.
“Not that question again…” Daiki replied.
“It’s been elementary when you start asking that!” he added with a cold face.


“Dai-chan, why don’t you like to be in our soccer team?” Viniel asked.
“Iya da…” Daiki replied.
“Basketball is my life! Get it?” Daiki smirked.
“Bleh!” he said.

“Why basketball?” Viniel asked confusingly to herself.


“You know already my answer, so don’t ask and follow me!” Daiki cleared the way and left without saying anything.
“Mr. Cold! BLE! ” Viniel said to herself.

Juenesse arrived exactly. “Hey, you did ask him again? Right?” Juenesse asked in between of panting.
“YEA…” Viniel replied sadly.
“What is so important in basketball? Soccer is more enjoying and good!” she added.
“Hey! Don’t pout… You’re ugly…” Juenesse commented and messed Viniel’s hair.

“Jenshent, I thought we will buy strawberries?” Juenesse grinned.
“Yea!” Viniel was become energetic and hyper.

“Weird…” Juenesse commented.


*Im sleepy.. aha! wee... ^^*
sorry if this is borung huh?? i will try my best that
my story will not be boring
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Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
wa! this is in littlix forums, right? i haven't read this. but i'll read it later. XD
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23 / F / Daiki, Fuma & Mas...
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
uwa is daiki-kun the lead here?? uwaaaa i love it!!
i love daiki hahaha! i love this too
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23 / F / Daiki, Fuma & Mas...
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
hahah ive read it whole now!! uwaaa! i really love daiki!!
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
aha!! yea.. i post dis also in littlix..^^
ahaha..^^ wat do you think??
its boring.. hehehe
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23 / F / Daiki, Fuma & Mas...
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
no its not! its okie!! keep it up!
gambatte kudesai! ja! imma always in chinen yuuri forum eventhough theres no people! wahahah!
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
aha!! i read ur fic.. its cute and you are really a good writer!!
wee..^^ the story is based from true story.. hehehe
i just changed the names..^^ weee
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118 / F / :]
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
nice one!! ^-^
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
heheh... tnx guys..^^ next ch is coming up!! wee...^^
yamachan will appear.. ahahaha
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23 / F / Daiki, Fuma & Mas...
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
uwaa! realy? domo arigato!
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
ahaha..^^ yea.. its a weird character.. i guess..
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
its the net ch.!~^^
thanks for the comments guys!!!


At the Fruit store,

"Viniel, you bought lots of strawberries!" Juenesse commented.
"I don't care!" Viniel replied abruptly.
"Stubborn!" Juenesse complained.

"Miss, what is the total?" Viniel ask kindly.
"300 yen" the cashier replied. Viniel gave 500 yen to the woman.
"Miss, you are cute..^^" the cashier commented.
"She's not!" Yamada suddenly interrupted.

"Your here too?" Viniel exclaimely asked.
"Am I not accepted here?" Yamada smirked.

Juenesse saw a box full of strawberries that Yamada was holding.

"Geeshh.. both of the "STRAWBERRY MANIAC IS HERE!"" Juenesse said and they both laughed.
"Anou... Miss, this is your change" the cashier interrupted their conversation and gave the money.
"Arigatou..!!" Viniel replied and with a beautiful smile.

Viniel and Juenesse are already reached the door when Yamada called them.
"MATTE!" Yamada yelled.
"What a troublesome!" Viniel whispered.
"Nee.. Jenshent, how did you have a friend like that?" Juenesse elbowed her.
"Urusai, he's coming closer!" Viniel replied.

"Geeshh... You're pretty fast... Your not a COW today!" Yamada teased her.
"Will you shut up?" Viniel glared at him.
"Anyway, what do you want?" she added.
"Can we go home together?" Yamada asked her.
"Of course! No choice, your here already!" Viniel replied and left.
"Hey! Don't leave me!" Yamada is shouting to them and the people are staring at him.

"What are you looking?" Yamada smirked.
"You are really mean!" Juenesse commented.

At the end of the street, they separate ways...
Juenesse went right; Yamada and Viniel are together walk home.

"Ja!" Yamada said.
"Ja!" Viniel replied.

Yamada waved his hands towards the direction of Viniel.

"Geesh, only three houses are apart from my house, and he's acting like my house is so far" Viniel whispered while walking.

Arriving at home,

"Tadaima!" Viniel shouted but no answers and went straight to the living room and found her dad drunk.

"Do you know what time is it?" her dad yelled with a weird face.
"To-chan, it's still early" Viniel replied.
"Your answering me now!" her dad shouted and suddenly slapped her hard in the face.

"You! Ready some food! I'm hungry!" her dad ordered while holding her arm hard.
"Itai.. Itai..." Viniel yelled.
"Don't say any word! Just do it!" her dad yelled and pushed her into a wall that made Viniel's forehead bleed.

Hikari suddenly came and saw Viniel is bleeding and leaning in a wall.

"To-chan! Yamero!" Hikari shouted.
"Get out! Especially that damn stupid girl!" he yelled.

"Jen, stand up... let's go to your room" Hikari said with a low voice and help her to stand.


what do you think?
ahahaha.. I love strawberries... ^^ wee...

comments please..^^
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Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
yama-chan's so snobbish!!
Love it!! ^-^
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23 / F / Daiki, Fuma & Mas...
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
hahaha me too! imma like yama chan actually...
i can eat a whole plastic of strawberries!
ahah anyway.. its kawai!!
Posted 7/4/08 , edited 7/4/08
uwa!! deen22 ur like my twin..^^ she loves 2 eat strawberries!!
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