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Posted 8/28/08

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animexcool wrote:

Very few mistakes.



Aww...thanks! Did you edit anything..?


a bit wait im gonna put it in red...i forgot to do that yesterday....
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Here ya go! And the (del) = deleted

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Here ya go! And the (del) = deleted



Ohh...I see... ^^, About that last part... It can't be "am" because everything else is in past tense. ^^,
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sry im a bit confused with tenses. ><
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OMG i♥it so far~!!
hehe wahh yur such a gd writer. >.<||
i culdnt see any errors. ^^
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OMG i♥it so far~!!
hehe wahh yur such a gd writer. >.<||
i culdnt see any errors. ^^


Awww...thanks! But...which story of mine are you reading...exactly? hahaha...
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Posted 9/3/08
lol beyond what my eyes can see... i think
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i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand
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Posted 11/14/08

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i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...
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Posted 11/14/08

PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:

i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...


whys the guy she like gonna kill her?
and somehow magically someone else who likes her comes into the scene lol
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Posted 11/14/08

milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:

i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...


whys the guy she like gonna kill her?
and somehow magically someone else who likes her comes into the scene lol


Well, that question could be answered if you read the whole of my story but since I'm not going to be posting it up... it'll be okay to tell you! hahaha... ^^,



I hope that explains it...
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Posted 11/14/08

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milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:

i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...


whys the guy she like gonna kill her?
and somehow magically someone else who likes her comes into the scene lol


Well, that question could be answered if you read the whole of my story but since I'm not going to be posting it up... it'll be okay to tell you! hahaha... ^^,



I hope that explains it...


so her friend magically comes into the scene
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Posted 11/14/08

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PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:

i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...


whys the guy she like gonna kill her?
and somehow magically someone else who likes her comes into the scene lol


Well, that question could be answered if you read the whole of my story but since I'm not going to be posting it up... it'll be okay to tell you! hahaha... ^^,



I hope that explains it...


so her friend magically comes into the scene


You got that right! lol
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Posted 11/14/08

PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:

i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...


whys the guy she like gonna kill her?
and somehow magically someone else who likes her comes into the scene lol


Well, that question could be answered if you read the whole of my story but since I'm not going to be posting it up... it'll be okay to tell you! hahaha... ^^,



I hope that explains it...


so her friend magically comes into the scene


You got that right! lol


so why does she like him?
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Posted 11/14/08

milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:


PurpleSkye wrote:


milknc00ki3s wrote:

i read kismet and i think the whole thing with the i lost hope makes it seem like someone is gonna come i know its like foreshadowing but it sorta feels obvious
so someone was trying to kill her and she backed away right so im confused at the end where it says shes in the hands so is she at the wall or in the hand


Thanks for your comment! ^^, I appreciate it very much.

And BTW, of course someone's going to come! I needed to make that part a bit subtle though so I wrote the "i lost hope" thing (the character didn't know someone was coming, even though I did! hahaha...)! I somewhat intended it to be that way.

Well, she was at the wall but the one she loved was the one going to kill her so that's why I said she'd die in the hands of the one she loved... ^^, Hope that made sense... >.< Hahaha...


whys the guy she like gonna kill her?
and somehow magically someone else who likes her comes into the scene lol


Well, that question could be answered if you read the whole of my story but since I'm not going to be posting it up... it'll be okay to tell you! hahaha... ^^,



I hope that explains it...


so her friend magically comes into the scene


You got that right! lol


so why does she like him?


Well aside from that guy is TOTALLY HANDSOME (not that her best friend isn't, though, her best friend is a hottie too!)...she feels as if they have so much in common and he was always so nice to her...so... yeah.
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