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ok i decided to post my first multi chap fic here xD i've been posting tis on my profile pgs so i wonder if any of u haf read the current few chaps? i duno if u guys r fans of yaoi but anw...here it is^^

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Title: Open the eyes of my heart...
Pairings: Akame, Pin, RyoPi, (possible JunDa, RyoDa, TegoRyo, TegoMass in later chaps)
Rating: PG-13
Genre: romance, fluff, angst, (possible light smut in later chaps)
Disclaimer: sadly, my name isnt JOHNNY..n my surname isnt KITAGAWA...kitagawa-san, can i juz haf one of dem?? juz one is fine..onegai -shot-

PROLOGUE
“Tadaima! Pi-chan!” Jin singsongs as he steps into the dark 1 room flat. He flicks on the light switch. Nothing happens. “Oh damn I forgot the electricity was cut.” Jin mumbles to himself, then lets out a deep sigh. Life has been hard ever since he got retrenched from work….stupid manager-san said the company couldn’t afford so many workers. He was now doing random odd jobs, juggling both day and night shifts. It was driving him insane.

“Pi-chan? Where are you?” Jin feels his throat burn. He goes to the kitchen, turns on the tap. Nothing happens. “Now the water supply has been cut too? SHIT.”

“Pi-chan? Pi-chan?” Jin looks into the bedroom and toilet, but his lover is no where to be found. “Ehhh? Don’t tell me…..” Jin spots a white envelope lying casually on the torn sofa in the small sitting area.

He nervously reaches forward, and holds the small envelope in his hands. On the front were 3 letters in PRINT. ‘JIN’. It was Yamapi’s handwriting no doubt.

Jin carefully tears open the envelope. Inside is a single sheet of paper, together with a delicate glass heart pendant. It was the symbol of his love for Yamapi. Jin bought it for him on their first Valentine’s Day together.

Jin feels his heart beating violently. He immediately directs his attention to the letter.

The first 3 words of the letter left Jin’s heart pounding.

“Jin, gomen ne.”

Gomen? What was there to be sorry about? He reads on.

“Gomen ne, Jin-chan. We really can’t go on like this anymore. I…I can’t go on with you anymore.”

Jin feels a sharp pain in his chest. Sweat trickles down his forehead.

“It’s my fault, please don’t blame yourself. I’m the traitor who left you, the one who left you when you needed me the most.”

Jin stops reading. He closes his eyes and loosens his grip on the letter. It falls to the ground. The heart pendant falls along with it, the fragile glass splitting into pieces…

you broke my heart…
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so wad do u guys think? this is my first shot at a multi chap, pls be lenient x)))
i'll post my other existing chaps soon if u guys want...(though u can actualy juz sneak to my profile to read the rest =X)

note: this is NOT a contest entry.
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
waah...jadelimrixian!

i read ur chap..its great!kip it up!eventhough its yaoi!but its just a story though...so kip on doing it..eheheh...
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
eh?? hmm is yampi a girl there?
well.. for me.. my only comment is..
please make it more excitiing ang thrilling so they would or the readers will enjoy
reading it..

well then..

ohh and also.. guys we really need a contestand for the fanfic contest u know? so please
let us know if ur fic is for contest thanks!
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
Geh-san> thx((: u can juz call me jade btw^^

deen22> erm its yaoi...if u noe wad i mean...so no hes not EXACLY a girl.....hah...n i'll try my best to make it exciting....i mean..of coure i wan readers to enjoy it^^

n nope tis entry is NOT for the fic contest..i stated it in the post....
i asked a couple of question regarding contest entries over at the contest thread but no one has replied dem so yea...
i really wun mind entering my akame one-shot/drabble but it isnt a new fic(i wrote it a while back) so i duno if dats ok?
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hahaha! i thought yampi is a girl!! hahahahah!!! gomen! *bows*
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
@jade..ah hai..jade san then!..

anou i'm still waiting for ur next part..i wonder whats going to happen next...

btw, did u read my fanfic hir?..pls read it too and i hope u like it since its a kat-tun fanfic..
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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
kool!!!! yaoi-ness!!!
i love it!!!
please continue to do your best!!!!

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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
deen22> haha np^^

geh-san> im glad ur looking forward to the nxt part....SO HERE IT IS ;D n i'll read ur fic soon((:

h4CkSigN> im glad u like yaoi xD haii ganbari masu~ ((:

juz to clarify the format...because now we have Jin & Yamapi separated, their 'sides' will alternate, which means if one chap is 'Jin's Side', the next will be Yamapi's.

n excuse me if the chaps get too mushy at times...im still a complete newbie at fics ((:

with dat, here's CHAP 1 =D
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(JIN’S SIDE)

When Jin finally opens his eyes again, he finds himself lying comfortably in a bed, but where is he? He scans the room. Wait a minute, the lavender lampshades, the matching curtains…it’s Kazuya’s room! Ne, why in the world was he in Kazuya’s room? Unless….unless he….

Jin hears the room door open. He turns his head in the direction of the door and see’s the familiar back of Kazuya. “Kazu-chan?” he utters, only to find his throat protesting in pain. “Jin? You’re awake?” Kazuya approaches and sits himself on the side of the bed. “Get some more rest, Jin. You were running a high temperature! Plus as I can see, you’re having a terrible sore throat.”

Kazuya reaches out and gently touches Jin’s forehead. “You’re still warm…” Jin cuts him off. “Kazu-chan, how…?” Kazuya interrupts him. “Its Sunday remember? I visit you and Pi every Sunday! Today, after ringing the doorbell 10 times and receiving no response, I unlocked your front door with the spare key you gave me, and guess what? I found my dear god brother lying on the floor.” Jin gives no reaction whatsoever.

“Is something the matter Jin? Your flat, it was pitch dark…” “I was so tired I couldn’t be bothered to turn on the lights.” Jin fails miserably at lying. “Jin...I tried turning on the lights but couldn’t. Your electricity was cut wasn’t it? Your water supply was cut too, yes? I went to the toilet to wet a towel to stop the bleeding on your hand and nothing came out. Jin, tell me what’s wrong, you know u can tell me anything.” Jin looks at his right hand, now neatly wrapped in a white bandage. Damn, he must have been cut by the fragments of…THAT…that cursed thing. He couldn’t tell Kazuya, he just couldn’t! At least not now…

“Ok, if you don’t want to talk about that, fine. What about this?” Kazuya raises that familiar white A4 sheet. That letter. Pi-chan’s letter. The letter from his lover. His ex-lover, the traitor. Jin shuts his eyes and looks away. He desperately tries to fight back the tears forming in his eyes, but that single tear that fell didn’t manage escape Kazuya’s sight. “Jin…” Kazuya turns Jin over to face him. “Sorry, didn’t mean to…”

The floodgates open, Tears flow freely down Jin’s face. Kazuya slowly puts his arms round Jin’s waist, then gradually sits him up and brings him into a tight embrace. They stay in this position for about 15 minutes, before Kazuya lets go and sinks back into his original position.

Jin finally finds the courage to look up. “Kazu-chan, I….I lost both my job…and Yamapi...” Kazuya holds Jin hand and squeezes it. “Kazu-chan, I can do without my job, without light, without water, but I can’t do without Pi-chan…” Wet patches begin forming on the crisp white bed sheets. Tears. Tears of hurt, pain and suffering.

Kazuya feels his heart ache. Why hadn’t he known about this earlier? Did Jin not trust him? But Kazuya knew better than to worry about that. This was not the time to argue about something that unimportant. What Jin needed now someone to lean on, someone to support him, someone to be there for him, but was Kazuya the right someone?

Kazuya cursed Yamapi under his breath. “You bastard, I gave him up to you, and this is what you do to him…”

Jin takes a deep breath. He dries his tear-stained face. “Kazu-chan, can I stay here for the time being? Onegaishimasu!” Jin quickly stands up and bows low. Kazuya is taken aback. “Of course! Don’t do that Jin! We’re god brothers! You don’t bow to a brother! Jin!” Kazuya quickly guides Jin back to the bed and sits him down.

God, please help him pull himself back together…
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waaah!

i admit i liked yaoi but der r limitations

ehehe, kip on going and do ur best jade san!^_~

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Posted 7/6/08 , edited 7/6/08
uwaaa!!!
yaoi-ness!!!! *^^*

i like it though~ !!!!
i mean.. I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!

keep up the good work!! ^_~
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oOoOoOoOo...great story!!!
intersting!!
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I seriously love YAOI!!
YamaPi<---Jin<---Kame??

I hope it goes like this..
YamaPi--->Jin<-->Kame!!

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Geh-san> haha dats pretty true...but AKAME IS <3 so wadeva xD

h4CkSigN>haha thx loads(((: yaoi<3

Mai-Lee>=) thx for reading!

hsj9392> Haha yaoi is awesome na? xD n well this IS an AKAME fic, so u can keep ur hopes up xD

rite, here's CHAP 2 xD
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(YAMAPI’S SIDE)

Yamapi is running. He is running as fast as his legs can carry him. He runs along the travelators, inevitably crashing into people along the way, but he continues to run anyway. Why is he running? He really doesn’t know. He has seemingly lost complete control of his legs, going wherever they take him. Why he was where he was, he didn’t know either…or at least, he wanted not to know.

Yamapi continues to run all the way to the exit. Then he stops dead in his tracks as he spots that very special person behind the barriers. The person behind this all. The person who encouraged him to leave Jin. The one who made him a traitor.

He closes his eyes and counts to three. One, two, three. As he steps out of the automatic glass doors, a cold wind rushes past him, sending a chill down his spine. He feels so guilty, so fake. But what can he do? He has already gone this far. There was no turning back. He quietly mumbles to himself. “Concentrate Pi, forget about Jin, forget him!”

“Yamapi! You’re here!” Ryo dashes forward, giving Yamapi a tight hug. Yamapi’s body tenses up, but he doesn’t hold back or squirm. He just stays very still, as though trying to get use to Ryo’s touch, his feel, his scent. It was all so...foreign.

“Welcome to Osaka, Yamapi! This is my turf! You can do anything you wish now that you’re with the Sexy Osaka Man!” Yamapi frowns as his mind once again wonders back to Tokyo…back to the Sexy Tokyo Man. He quickly brushes that thought off. “Haha yeaps, I’m finally here Ryo!” Ryo gently put his arms round Yamapi’s shoulders, then looks deep into Yamapi’s eyes. “Ne, I was so worried you wouldn’t turn up, that you didn’t trust me enough.” Yamapi forces a smile onto his face. “Of course I’ll turn up! Baka!” He ruffles Ryo’s hair, trying to lighten the atmosphere.

“Come on, it’s almost eight already! My mother prepared us some dinner. My car’s just over there.” Ryo slips his hand into Yamapi’s as he walks towards the nearby carpark.

I don’t even know what’s right anymore. Yamapi worries. He worries about everything. He worries so much that he has never had any time to think about tomorrow. Now, he has an even bigger reason to worry. He betrayed Jin. His beloved Jin. And it was all because of money. Because Jin was retrenched and broke, and because Ryo was a professional and loaded. Yamapi feels like crap. This is entirely his fault. No one else is to be blamed. Not even Ryo. Ultimately he is the one who chose to runaway, to leave Jin all alone to fend for himself.

The truth is that Yamapi has long been thinking of leaving Jin. He couldn’t stand scrimping and saving anymore. Even if it meant no Jin, he wanted OUT. After all, he knew Jin would still have him. He confided in Ryo, who immediately suggested he leave and come to Osaka. Without much thought, Yamapi left the very next day – the first big mistake of his life.

Yamapi takes a deep breath and steps into Ryo’s brand-new Honda. The peculiar new car smell hovers round his nose. Ryo starts the engine, then heads for the highway towards Osaka town. Yamapi silently attempts to assure himself that this is the right thing to do. “This is it. It’s a new start Pi. Stop worrying and just take one step at a time. Everything will turn out fine.”

You can lie to anyone and everyone, but yourself.
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ohh.. so sad fanfic...
keep it up!!
gambatte!
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Posted 7/7/08 , edited 7/7/08
you know.. i really don't like Ryo at first cos he hates Ueda...
and now i hate him even more! well it suits him! rawr!

*please excuse me, Ryo fans*

Yamapi made a big mistake! but i want Akame!!!

yay! yaoi-ness!!!
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