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Black Heart
MA-This story is recommended for more mature readers. Contains Strong Violence and Gore, Strong Launguage((Censored)), Sexual Themes, and use of alcohal.

Genres: Adventure/Action/Pirate/Fantasy/Romance/Drama/Comedy
The age of pirates, was also the age of terror. The seven seas are conquered by the ruthless demon Razor Fang who is lord of the seas. Razor Fang declared another victory on the coastal city of Runda and one of the commeners is a young boy, son of the great pirate lord who battled Razor Fang, this boy is Hanson. Seeking revenge for the loss of his home and the rest of his family, Hanson and his two remaining friends Sin and Zen set out to take down the demon lord but require a crew, and a ship bigger than a fishing boat. Hanson with his two friends, a grand crew, a bandit who is known as the vicious Ice, and a ship created in the name of Hanson's father. Setting sail into the seas ready to seek the beast and send him back to the bottom of the sea, if they can.

Opening: Make Some Noise~Back-On
Ending:Believer~Back-On

Episode 1:Begining of the Journey


Episode 2:Ice


Episode 3:Dual of Spirit


Episode 4:Feelings


Episode 5:Hostage Island


Episode 6:Bloody Chains


Episode 7:Stench of Death


Episode 8:The 2nd Assassin


Episode 9:Gifted Youngin

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Posted 8/2/08
Dude, you haven't got any comments? I'll fix that up tomorrow...
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Posted 8/3/08
I read episode 1.

The story is simple and nice. The characters are well-defined and easy to differentiate.

Another excellent thing is that the grammar and spelling are good enough that I have absolutely no trouble figuring out what's going on.

I have nothing else to say right now. I need to read more first.
Posted 8/8/08
On Episodes 1-4...

Nice introduction for the characters and the setting... It's clear... I can imagine them move in my head as I read...

Does Sin have a family background of some sort?
Cool character...

So Ice and Hanson have different abilities, huh?
I wonder how his would-be opponents' abilities will be... Hm...

I'm curious on how Zen's skill at guns would be shown...

The Hanson-Sin tandem is great.

It's good that humor is not left behind.

I enjoy stories of such kind...
I'm looking forward to reading more...

Keep it up.
Great job.
Posted 8/9/08
By the way... the name Sin...
I remember it now... Final Fantasy X...
hahaha...
That's why it sounded familiar...
Posted 8/11/08
Wow... Rot knows what a good fight is.
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Posted 8/15/08
Hehe, thanks.

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Posted 8/16/08

OKIJIN wrote:

Hehe, thanks.

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I see...
That's cool...
I'll wait for the next eps...
Posted 10/1/08
The story is getting better and more interesting...
With new characters, more information on the current characters and good fight scenes, the story is a blast...
Keep it up...
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Posted 10/6/08
cool i've read 1-5 and all i have to say is IT'S GREAT. The story is awesome. Great your good at describing. *smile* I really love yours. Maybe I'll post mine but just maybe.
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Posted 8/18/09
You've put up ten episodes and you've gotten less than a page of feedback? Oh God, I feel like crap. I've been devoting so much time to my own stories that I forgot that I need to look at the works of my fellow writers. Sorry. I'll read a bunch of it tomorrow and comment.
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Posted 8/21/09
AHHH! Don't read 10 people! It got cut off. I need to get my work and repost it.
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Posted 8/22/09

The_8th_Sin wrote:

You've put up ten episodes and you've gotten less than a page of feedback? Oh God, I feel like crap. I've been devoting so much time to my own stories that I forgot that I need to look at the works of my fellow writers. Sorry. I'll read a bunch of it tomorrow and comment.


Wow, this promise was pretty fail. Sorry.
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Posted 8/22/09
No problem No need to rush or anything.
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Posted 9/4/09
Episode 10-The Predator and its Captain

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