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Posted 8/4/08
Whoa! Nice!
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Posted 8/7/08

Sailormermaidsun13 wrote:

kk, i wrote this one poem based on the last chapter of eclipse. I want to know what you think of it (negative or positive). (ps. if ur jake hater, just try to understand what he's going through, don't just hate on him).

Eclipse Poem - Jacob's point of view

I see her clearly in my heart
Piecing me like a sharp dart

I see her smiling at the cold one
My life is officially over, it is done

The forest is now my only home
You were my protection, my dome

Darkness creeps over my life
Heartbreak is my greatest strife

Tears aren't in your eyes
The hope you gave me was my human disguise

That one last tender kiss
Is something I'll surely miss

Beneath my feet are shards of glass
As sweet memoreis of you pass

Sadness and remorse start coming
As what's left of my human heart stops drumming


woah o_O nice poem^_^
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Posted 8/9/08
That poem was really good! =)
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Posted 8/11/08
i love it
Posted 8/18/08
wow! that was such a beautiful poem!!!!!!!

now me feels so sorry for jacob
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Posted 8/18/08
its really good :]
Posted 8/20/08
i just literally just finished eclipse... and OMG!!!! i cried for jacob! i was like poor jacob! but your poem it was so right for jacob... it was beautiful
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Posted 8/23/08
AWESOME
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Posted 8/23/08
the poem is so sad
i love it
Posted 8/23/08 , edited 8/23/08
nice poem.... i feel kinda more sad than before for jacob...
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Posted 8/25/08

Sailormermaidsun13 wrote:

kk, i wrote this one poem based on the last chapter of eclipse. I want to know what you think of it (negative or positive). (ps. if ur jake hater, just try to understand what he's going through, don't just hate on him).

Eclipse Poem - Jacob's point of view

I see her clearly in my heart
Piecing me like a sharp dart

I see her smiling at the cold one
My life is officially over, it is done

The forest is now my only home
You were my protection, my dome

Darkness creeps over my life
Heartbreak is my greatest strife

Tears aren't in your eyes
The hope you gave me was my human disguise

That one last tender kiss
Is something I'll surely miss

Beneath my feet are shards of glass
As sweet memoreis of you pass

Sadness and remorse start coming
As what's left of my human heart stops drumming

that seems deep..
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