"Zombie" by atelier7
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After the cataclysm that shook the foundations of the world two decades ago, mankind has finally rebuilt its society. The world as of then live like the farmers and townsfolk of the past as past technology refuses to work, for unknown reasons. In order to combat this problem, several corporations reconstructed and created a new brand of technology, ultimately becoming the controllers of commerce, trade and market, each one seeking to crush the others.

"Power, glory, and immortality. That man is the key to it all."
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does anyone want to help me draw zombie? i don't want to screenplay it, since it reduces the effect. i assure you that i have already laid a plot out, complete with cliffhangers and plot twists. kind of.
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"Man finds life because of the shadow of death."

"Funny, isn't it, that the ones who wish to live will eventually die, while the ones who want to die continue to survive."

"I'm not really a monster. I am man at his full potential."

"Damn you. Don't you know how hard it is regenerating a heart?!"
"Uh..."
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Is this a horror story?
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Posted 8/23/08

Rakensho wrote:

Is this a horror story?


overall, it's not. i'm no good at horror stories, maybe because i have too weird a mind to consider "horror" horror.
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cHapTer 1: Cash Cow

"Hey, mister, the bath is ready!"
The thud of an axe resonated throughout the air, and quickly subsided. The man turned to the child calling for him. "Yeah, yeah, just wait a bit, ok? I'll just put the lumber in the storage room."
The child grinned. "Don't worry, Onee-san's not in the tub. We don't want your nose to be broken again, do we?"

Saeko stared at the photograph, wishing that, somehow, her eyes were betraying her. And yet the longer she looked, the greater the hold fear had over her heart.
A cloaked stranger rested an elbow on the table and cupped his chin. "Well?"
She put the image face down on the table, and, in apprehensive voice, asked, "Are you sure he is..?"
"Positive, ma'am."
She had been dreading the answer. Right now, my sister...!
The stranger wore his hat and smirked. "Judging from the looks on your face, I guess you're ready to tell us where this bastard is."

Saeko entered the house quietly. The lights were off, the wind was calm, there was no sign of any --
"Hey, you sure took long!"
Saeko fumbled with the plastic bag she was holding. "I-I-I-idiot! Don't surprise me like that!"
The man had a fresh look about him, as though he had just taken a bath. "Don't tell me... you're still angry about the bathroom incident?" He laughed, but he immediately stopped. "Eh, Saeko? Ehehe.. He.. he?"
"Mo-mo-moron.." The woman emanated a demonic aura. She threw a punch that knocked him through the ceiling.

Ria was putting bandages around their guest's face. "Onee-chan, that's the third hole you've made in a week."
The older girl looked slightly annoyed. "It's not my fault he's such an annoying, little..." Her words drifted into nothingness, as her thoughts swirled around in her aching head. How could someone like him be--
Boom! The front door exploded into masses of smoke and burning debris. A shadowy figure was standing there.

Saeko motioned to shield Ria from the unknown danger. "Who's there?"
The voice that answered was terrifyingly familiar. "Lady, I'm sorry, but I can't let a bounty head like him get away." A gun swished out of the smoke and fired unto Saeko.
Bang.

"Oh? I thought you were unconscious." The figure seemed giddy.
The bandages on the man's head were coated with fresh blood. He ripped them off, and he poked around his forehead. After a few minutes, he managed to extract a bullet from his dome. "How could I be unconscious, when you're making this big a racket?" he replied.

The smoke cleared, revealing a mustached man with a plumed hat. "To still live after that... it would seem that my sources were right! What a rare opportunity fate has bestowed upon me!" He twirled a bronze revolver in his right hand.
The man glared at him. "You don't know who you're messing with."
"Don't I," Victory was painted all over the unknown gunman's face. "D. Zombie?"

notes: this is half-baked. pathetic, even. i really want to draw it... anyway, i thought i should give a sample of my story.
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atelier7 wrote:

notes: this is half-baked. pathetic, even. i really want to draw it... anyway, i thought i should give a sample of my story.


Eh? It's not so bad.

Two errors of clarity:
1. You didn't state the younger sibling's gender at first, so for whatever reason, I imagined that it was a boy. When Saeko spoke about her sister, it confused me.
2. The guest jumps in the way of the bullet aimed for Saeko, right? I would prefer it to be more clear.

In any case, if you ever draw this story, I would be all too happy to read it.
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atelier7 wrote:

notes: this is half-baked. pathetic, even. i really want to draw it... anyway, i thought i should give a sample of my story.


Eh? It's not so bad.

Two errors of clarity:
1. You didn't state the younger sibling's gender at first, so for whatever reason, I imagined that it was a boy. When Saeko spoke about her sister, it confused me.
2. The guest jumps in the way of the bullet aimed for Saeko, right? I would prefer it to be more clear.

In any case, if you ever draw this story, I would be all too happy to read it.


those errors you mentioned are just a slice of the pie. in word form it lacks impact.. i'm accustomed to visual aids and cinematics. anyhow, that chapter is scrapped, as i have a better intro planned out. thanks for pointing those unclear things, by the way.
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atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

notes: this is half-baked. pathetic, even. i really want to draw it... anyway, i thought i should give a sample of my story.


Eh? It's not so bad.

Two errors of clarity:
1. You didn't state the younger sibling's gender at first, so for whatever reason, I imagined that it was a boy. When Saeko spoke about her sister, it confused me.
2. The guest jumps in the way of the bullet aimed for Saeko, right? I would prefer it to be more clear.

In any case, if you ever draw this story, I would be all too happy to read it.


those errors you mentioned are just a slice of the pie. in word form it lacks impact.. i'm accustomed to visual aids and cinematics.


Surely, all of our stories have exactly that problem!
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The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:


The_8th_Sin wrote:


atelier7 wrote:

notes: this is half-baked. pathetic, even. i really want to draw it... anyway, i thought i should give a sample of my story.


Eh? It's not so bad.

Two errors of clarity:
1. You didn't state the younger sibling's gender at first, so for whatever reason, I imagined that it was a boy. When Saeko spoke about her sister, it confused me.
2. The guest jumps in the way of the bullet aimed for Saeko, right? I would prefer it to be more clear.

In any case, if you ever draw this story, I would be all too happy to read it.


those errors you mentioned are just a slice of the pie. in word form it lacks impact.. i'm accustomed to visual aids and cinematics.


Surely, all of our stories have exactly that problem!


but u guys are coping with it better, imo. :))

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i might be posting a new intro to zombie. it's always like this, i always work out the middle before i work out the start. :))
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Cover: "Fated to forever tread the path of tomorrow"

Chapter 1: Prologue to Death

The little mountainside town was blanketed by its usual silence, reveling in the moonlight borne down from the star-studded sky. The air was a still, unmoving part of the darkness that was slightly tainted with homespun threads of light. The streets were void of life, save for a small white cat lying down beside a fly-ridden dumpster, seemingly not bothered by the pit-pattering of a leaky faucet.
A door creaked open in the vicinity.

A white-haired teenager stepped out, closing the door in such a way that it makes minimal noise. He rubs his hands together, pleading for warmth against the cold nighttime breeze. After a few seconds of slight shivering, he sighed in defeat, pulled a battered hood over his head, and began to make his way into the main road.

"You're awfully quiet for someone who's been making a ruckus all week."
The person stopped, his youthful face surprised. He had to chuckle. "You had to badger me until this moment."
The black-haired girl crossed her arms and pouted. "I'm that kind of person." Her eyes seemed distant. "Are you sure about leaving?"
"I dunno," he teased. "How could I, a wanderer, ever think of leaving a town I've lived in for only one week? "
She pulled a rolling pin out of nowhere and smacked his head. "Bastard," she murmured to him while he was rolling and kicking up clouds of dust.
"Ow, ow, I'm sorry, I'm sorry..." He glanced up to a melancholic face.
The girl looked like she wanted to cry. "Don't you want to stay?"
"I'd love to," he replied, sitting up and resting his elbows on his knees. "But--" he stood up "-- Fate never meant for me to be idle."
"You're not making sense."
"Well, I guess I'm that type of person." He turned around. "Say goodbye to the little one for me, will ya?" he muttered blankly, as he took a few steps forward.

Minutes later, the white-haired boy, his hood covering his eyes, began to venture outside the town. He sensed something was stalking him. It made him grin. When are you guys going to stop trying to catch me?

In a clearing not too far away, a computer screen flashed to life, alerting a party of four persons.
A middle-aged blonde with a cleft chin spat out his cigarette and grinded it with the heel of his left boot. "What's the deal, Frieda?"
"To be honest, I don't know," replied the girl who was bent over the monitor.
"What the hell?" grumbled a lanky man, waving what seemed to be a robotic arm. "Want me to carve you some new scars?"
"Hey!" screamed Frieda, clutching her face. "I just got these wounds filled in."
"Now, now," remarked a tall, attractive woman, a hint of threatening in her voice. "I know you're bored, Gino, but that's no excuse for harassing a comrade."
Gino rebuked, his eyes looking the other way, "You're only saying that because you're both girls."
The cleft-chin laughed. "C'mon, dude, get over the whole "Our-boss-is-a-girl" deal."
"You tell him, Gerard!" cried Frieda. "And, FYI, Oriole's our boss 'cause she's better than you!" They continued their argument heatedly.
Oriole ignored them and looked at the computer. New recruits are such a--- Her eyes widened in shock; she had never seen anything like it before. This is what they meant by 'You'll know when you see' huh?
"Frieda, Gino, contact the Beta and Charlie regiments. We're going to move out."
Gino's face broke into a wide grin. "Finally-- so, who are we going to rip up?"
Their boss did not seem to hear, still relaying orders. "Beta, go to coordinates 131, 432. Charlie, head to break-even point. Code WASP-3."
"WASP-3?" gaped Gerard.
Frieda fell over while trying to wear her boots. "No way, what--"
"--in carnation are we facing?" finished Gino. "Aliens?"
"Nah, must be the undead," quipped Gerard.
"You know," said Oriole, staring at the monitor. "He might as well be one."

Notes: WASP-3 stands for Weapon-Armor Set Protocol.
For fuller details pester me about it. Hah.
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