~Hidden Sanctuary~| Fanfic |
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Pls tell me what you guys think! :D


I didn't know who to partner up with hiro..So you can just imagine you guys are Miyuki Tenishi :D


~Chapter one ~

~ Love can often define a person. Yet many people in this world are un-definable. Though it's hard to explain, you can easily tell if a person is in love. Or if a person is lacking of love. At first I didn't know anything about love. But like other stories about love, it appears when you least expect it to appear.

~It's been 2 years from the last time we saw each other. If I look back at those days when you were still by my side. Those days were the happiest days of my life. But in those days I have never felt such sadness, fear, and pain all together, at one moment that I felt like it could kill me.

~"Flight A290 leaving for Tokyo, Japan in 5 minutes, prepare your boarding passes" The intercom said.
Miyuki Tenishi, how have you been doing lately?

~ 3 years ago~

~"Hiro! Did you see the new girl? She's so cuute dude"
~"Echo, I have no time for that" I said sarcastically.
~"Aw, you're gonna go after her? Aw dude c'mon you get all the girls" He Whined.
~"I'm irresistible, sorry dude." I patted him sympathetically on the shoulder. "Haha besides you have, what’s her name.. H-"
~"Hana!! S*** Dude I gotta run she's headed this way" He ranned outside of the school.
~"Oh Echo! Where is my baby going Hiro?" she tried to look cute, blinking her eyelashes.
~"Not sure" I walked away. I heard her chasing after him.

~"Hiro!" It was Shigure Sensei.
~"Shigure sensei"
~"Hiro, do you know we have a new transfer student?"
~"Yes sensei."
~"Since you're class rep, I'll leave her to you to be in charge of. Make her feel welcome. Oh BTW her father is the president of the chain of major banks in Japan, Royal Bank. Don't screw up we received large amounts of donations from her father."
~"Eeeh?! What's she doing in a public school? And there's only this year left"
~"The president said she saw something here once and has been attached to it ever since."
~"What's there to see at Elwick Gakuen?" This girl has all the money in the world..how stupid to go here.
~"Hiro I'm counting on you"
~"Yes sensei" I obeyed. I wonder where she could be. "Uh Sensei, where is Miyuki?"
~"Class is gonna start soon, you should go get her. She's outside still probably."

What a bother. This girl better be as cute Echo thinks she is. What could possibly be here that's not at their high class elite school? Where could she possibly be?

~"Excuse me!! Can you hear me?! Over here by the trees where the gate is!" I heard a voice.
~"Ms?! Where are you?!" I yelled.
~"I'm up here!" She yelled back
~What was she doing up there on that tree? "Are you Miyuki Tenishi?"
~"Yap" She smiled. She wasn't only cute, she was beautiful. She had the fairest skin I ever saw. Her eyes were bright, her hair was a long sleek black. She jumped down, before I knew what happened she landed in my arms. It seemed like an hour that we were gazing at each other, face to face. She smiled her perfect beautiful smile again.
~"You could let me down now" She laughed, and looked like she blushed for a moment.
~"Go-gomen" I think my face turned 5 different shades of pink. She was staring curiously at me. I think I could have died at that moment.
~"Who are you?"
~"H-Hiro Mizushi-shima" My words were not coming out right. Meow.
~"Bella got stuck up the tree" She had a kitten wrapped up in her sweater. "I climbed the tree..I didn't know that I didn't know how to get down, Thank you for coming."
~"No problem" Finally my words never stuttered.
~"Class is gonna start now right? I'm just gonna give her to my guards." She smiled again. If she had body guards why didn't she ask them to help her down? It looked like she read my mind. "I don't like to ask them for help, since they only do it because they are paid for it."
~I waited for her to come back. She walked gracefully back to me.
~"Let's go class is starting now right?"
~"Y-yes"
~She laughed. "Do you always stutter when you talk?" I avoided her gaze." ka-ka-Kawaii" She mocked. Miyuki entered the school, with me behind trailing after her. For the first time in my life I was speechless.

I didn't know that this would be the beginning of everything that has yet to happen...



~To be continued~

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hey hey good so far, keep it up hehe lol
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Posted 7/23/08

tokyodreamxx wrote:

hey hey good so far, keep it up hehe lol


HAHA thnks!! i have to think of ideas again XP
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Posted 7/24/08 , edited 7/24/08
You're a really good writer, I like your style and flow. Your point of view is great aswell. keep it up can't wait to read more.
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NewLight wrote:

You're a really good writer, I like your style and flow. Your point of view is great aswell. keep it up can't wait to read more. :)


Really?!?! LOL Thaaaank you!!
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Posted 7/25/08
hey sounds great.. now add the next chapter .. =P haha.
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