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Posted 7/30/08 , edited 9/25/08
Minna~san~♥~! Please give your thoughts on the posted stories/Poems
Posted 8/1/08
I love all the storys posted so far ^_^ !!! Can't wait to read more !!!! ^_^ You all did a good job
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93bridget wrote:

I love all the storys posted so far ^_^ !!! Can't wait to read more !!!! ^_^ You all did a good job


hmmm......hmmmm......Well,as long as Bridget likes it....I do too...
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Review of Friends by yared02


There are a lot of things I like about this story. First, the opening is interesting, because it creates a hint of mystery about the machine. I enjoyed the pacing--nothing felt like it was dragging out. I think there's an interesting overall mood established with the main characters that is good (not always friendly, but good). The action in Chapter 3 was cool.

Aside from a lot of grammatical mistakes (which are easily fixed), I do have one major recommendation. I am not familiar with the anime that this was tributing, and I didn't see it listed anywhere. It probably would be a good idea to assume that the reader is ignorant (like me!! lol), and doesn't know anything about the characters or the world. Basically, just list which anime the characters are from (at the beginning of the story), so the reader can check it out if they are interested. Also, a minimal description of the characters (again, for those of us who are not "in the know" hehe) would be nice, so we know what the characters look like.

I hope you keep writing this story--I'd like to read more of it!
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Posted 9/25/08

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Review of Friends by yared02


There are a lot of things I like about this story. First, the opening is interesting, because it creates a hint of mystery about the machine. I enjoyed the pacing--nothing felt like it was dragging out. I think there's an interesting overall mood established with the main characters that is good (not always friendly, but good). The action in Chapter 3 was cool.

Aside from a lot of grammatical mistakes (which are easily fixed), I do have one major recommendation. I am not familiar with the anime that this was tributing, and I didn't see it listed anywhere. It probably would be a good idea to assume that the reader is ignorant (like me!! lol), and doesn't know anything about the characters or the world. Basically, just list which anime the characters are from (at the beginning of the story), so the reader can check it out if they are interested. Also, a minimal description of the characters (again, for those of us who are not "in the know" hehe) would be nice, so we know what the characters look like.

I hope you keep writing this story--I'd like to read more of it!


I knew it! I should have uploaded the pics... I'll do that later, And it's not from an anime, it's a video game series. (Though Some of them did have anime scenes...). Anyway thanks, and I'll try to do my best.
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