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I haven't really wrote anything for a long time and this is pretty much on whim like all my stories. It probably will suck since I'm dead tired right now. I don't have a plot line written for it and am thinking it up as I write so don't ask for spoilers since even I don't know how it's gonna end up.

The title might not fit the story and if you're wondering, it means to keep secret or something.

Here's the disclaimer:
This is a work of fiction, any relation to anything real or other works of fiction are entirely coincidental and are in no way intentional. HOWEVER, some of the people described and named here ARE real and I don't own any of the Mangas/Animes/books mentioned in the story nor the people that are real.
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I, Jennifer, am having my 15th birthday celebrated. There was cake, candles, ribbons, the whole 9 yards. Plus something I didn't expect. My sister, Amy's wedding. My sister got married on my birthday. The good side was that everyone's focusing on them so I could get away. The bad thing was the her newly wed husband, Raymond(aka Ray), was my mortal enemy. Older then me by ten years, arrogant, hates children, and a total prick.

Amy is sweet, kind, caring, and way better then my stupid new brother-in-law. If it wasn't for him, Amy would've gone to Med-school and became a doctor. He convinced her to stay and get married. I sighed as I looked down at the celebration that was still going on. My sister's bright red dress stood out like a rose upon the weeds of guests. That's what these people are to me. Weeds. Unneeded and unwanted but impossible to be fully rid of. But then again, I guess I'm a weed too. A poisonous weed that no one wants to get close to. The type that people try not to disturb unless they know what they're handling.

"Jen!!!" a girl's voice yelled. The girl wore a light blue dress that embraced her slim, hourglass form with wild, curly, dirty blond hair. Her freckles stood out from her white skin even from about fifty feet above her, where I sat. She waved up at me and yelled, "Get down here already! We're getting outta here!"
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its sweet^^ but its weird the way you say that she was fifty feet above her. maybe just explain^^ but otherwise I like it^^ and I simply love the title
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itz started out quite good^-^ me lyke how nicely u compared da weeds 2 da ppl!! how they're unneeded nd unwanted but impossible 2 be fully rid of^-^
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I grinned for the first time that day at her words and yelled back, "Be right there!" and ran down from my perch at the roof of the church. "So who's car are we taking Seren?" Seren, better known as Serenity outside of my group of friends, is wild and weird. She gives names to her pens, notebooks, and even people.

My other friends are Julie, Lili, and Kat. Julie is the person who's lazy and doesn't give a shit about anything. Lili is the that likes to provoke people and take risks. Kat is the neutral ground person with good ideas and probably follow more rules then the rest of us added together. And me? I'm the schemer with a quick and nimble body. The person that ask what others want and go along with what I wanted in the first place anyways. All in all, they're like me. Crazy and poisonous to people who don't know what they're doing.

"We're hotwiring Ray's," Seren grinned wider.

"Even better," I smirked, "And it's pretty fast too."

"Isn't that the point?" A pale faced girl with short, wavy, brown hair asked, "To get on peoples nerves while kidnapping the birthday person."

"Like hell you'll be able to kidnap me Lili," I said, "And where's Julie and Kat?"

"Kat's backed out and Julie's over there, eating all the good food and reading manga." Seren said cheerfully.

"Let's just go and get her," I said, pulling the other two along toward the only person who was sitting and reading. Julie. Her chin-lengh black hair fell across her face as she bent her head to read the book. All three of us grinned and crept up silently on her. On a silent three, we all pounced on her. She gave a choked yell as we all hugged her hard at the same time. "Time ta go, Julie."

She managed to get us off her and walked off to the large parking lot. We followed close behind and reached a sleek, electric blue van. Julie sighed, "Do I hafta come? Kat didn't come."

"No," all three of us answered at once. I opened the door to the driver's seat and slipped down till I could see the part right below the wheel, opened it and looked around for the right wires. After finding them, I snipped off a bit of the rubber binding and twisted them together with practice.

"Done!" I called out after resealing the wires.
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That's all I could think of for now. And that IS how you hotwire cars XP. Don't try it unless you own the car. And thanks for the reviews!
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aww so cool^^ its a really good story^^ but how could she just run off the rooof of the church thats the only thing bugging me maybe just explain more of that part saying that she ran down stairs or something
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SHE GOT MAGIC!!!!! .....kidding. I'm kinda hyper right now. She secretly put a ladder on the side of the church building. But since I'm still debating on making this a fanfic or original, real-life style or fantasy so don't drop the magic part just yet.
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"If you really don't wanna come, you can go home and stay there while we get into trouble, sell the car, blame it on you and break you outta jail, kidnap Kat, then forge fake passports and go to Egypt." I said cheerfully.

"Why Egypt?" Seren asked just as Julie said in an unconvincing voice, "You wouldn't do that."

The other two looked at her and she rolled her eyes in defeat as they all said at the same time, "Yeah she would."

"Damn right peoples!" I crowed, "Now get in. Egypt cause I've always wanted to get one of those cursed mummified cat things and almost legal grave robbing sounds fun! I've always wondered about the curses and stuff in the pyramids and how they seem to come true since all those people die mysterious deaths. And right now, we're going to pick up Kat weather she wants to or not and heading to Vegas." I can just feel the shock in the air as I drove off at almost 90mph down a local street.

The car was still pretty silent, like no one was breathing, when I screeched to a stop at Kat's house. Kat came running out the moment the car came to a full stop. "I knew it would be you at the driver's seat. Only you got the ability to make a car screech so loud."

"Get in Kat," I put urgency into my voice, "Emergency." Her eyebrows went up but she got in anyways. Inwardly I grinned, my plan's going very well.
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.... I demand to sue for violation of rights. WHO GAVE YOU PERMISSION TO USE US?! Damn right you down own ME.

-mumble-

And if I'ma gonna be readin' something, it'd better be YAOI. Or shonen-ai. And on another note, too much dialouge and too little description. You're not giving the moment enough description. You're making it all fly by. Unless the fun is up ahead, you should be more descriptive.
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((Yes the fun part comes later, what can you expect when we're going to Vegas!!!! Pretend to be old enough to gamble, become rich, and grave rob people!!!!! I'm still thinking on if I should add supernatural crap but it's not sticking very well. Besides, I'm not even sure if it'll be a story I'd finish. This is just the skeleton and the tendons. Maybe some major organs but definately not the whole body.))

Right after Kat go in, the silence in the car broke as Julie choked out, "Vegas?"

"Are, you s-serious?!?!" Seren gasped.

"No. Fricken. Way." Lili muttered.

"Wait!" Kat exclaimed, "We're going to Las Vegas? ........then isn't this considered kidnap? And WHY are we going there?"

"Yes Kat," I cheered, "We're going to LAS VEGAS!!!!! I already called up some of my connections and they said that we can stay at Hilton. As for why, cause it's fun. Besides, you can consider this my present to you peoples. Or you can consider this your present to me by humoring me!" I pressed my foot down even harder on the gas pedal when we hit the freeway, going up to 110mph.

"This is kidnap! KIDNAP!!!! Besides, how are you gonna explain this to our parents?!" Julie demanded.

"Oh," I said smugly, "I already sent your parents mail about it last month. Told them it's a school field trip to Yosemite Village for a week or so to look at the schools and their way of education and I already contacted our high school and told them that we're all going to go on a group vacation to Nevada. They're not lies. We will stop by Yosemite Village to get some food and Las Vegas is in Nevada."
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Kidnapping! Help! I'm gonna be harrased!

God, you don't know how much I love Vegas. Went back there last month. Can I help write the Vegas part? PWEASE?!
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((.....that's a GREAT idea Julie! You will get harassed by random guys on the street!!! and sure i guess. I've written a lot of stories working with others. Oh yeah, I have no idea whats so ever what Yosemite Village is really like so I'm just gonna cut the details a bit.....or a lot and add stuff there.))

".....you really do things throughly don't you," Seren said, laughing as Lili yelled, "WE'RE GOING TO VEGAS!!!! YEAH!!!" Kat laughed softly and Julie sulked a bit in her back seat. I just grinned back at them and floored the gas pedal on the almost empty freeway.
~~several hours later~~
"This is Yosemite Village peoples," I said, "We're taking a break here. You have half an hour to wander around, use the bathrooms, buy stuff you like, and so on. Please don't get lost cause I'll abandon you here if you're not back in time. I'm gonna get some food, chips, and drinks."

I walked off to the shops near by, grabbed a cart, and began dumping chips, cookies, sodas, sandwiches and things you can eat straight from the package into it. When I was satisfied with the large heap of edibles, I went to the cashier and paid off the load. Then I refilled the car's gas and sat on the roof to wait for the others to come back. I took out The Host and began reading.



Just then, Kat came back along with Julie and Seren. I raised an eyebrow, "Where's Lili?"

"Bathroom," was their reply.

"FOOD!!!!!" Seren cried out happily as she peeked into the trunk of the van and she tore open several bags of cheetos. I leaned over and snatched a bag out of her hands, popping a piece into my mouth as she yelled, "Hey! That's mine bitch!!!"

I laughed and yelled back, "Too bad! Mine now!"

After Lili came back and things calmed downed a bit, we started to get moving again. It was past four and three out of the five in the van were asleep. I sat in the passenger seat as Seren, the only one with an actual lisense, drove. She just got her lisense and she sure as hell was careful not to get into trouble. I sighed and told her to pull over. She threw me a questioning look and did what I asked.

I got out of the passenger's seat and made her switch with me so I was driving again. "You drive too slow. There's no one on the road, much less police cars." was all I said before getting in the drivers seat. It took us another 3 hours to finally get to Vegas and when we did, everyone was awake and alert.
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The first thing we did when we got to Hilton was collapse on the nice and soft beds in our rooms. Well, I didn't but everyone else did. 'Let's see,' I thought to myself as I rummaged through the preprepared luggage, 'Where did I put them?' "AHA!!!" I yelled, pulling out several people size bags, "People!!! Get in here and "

The others trudged into my room and Julie said, "What now?"

"Here's the question," I said happily, "We can stick together or split. Because it's pretty damn obvious we're not over 20, we can't go see any of the more......mature shows and maybe certain clubs and stuff BUT, we can pass off as 18 year olds. That means the gambles are open for us and so are most of the crap here. So, whaddaya peoples wanna do tonight?"

Seren raised her hand and almost yelled, "SLOT MACHINE!!! And sticking together. It's easier that way."

Kat raised a hand, "I vote sticking together and watching a show or something."

Julie took one look at my grinning face and said, "I vote for Kat's opinion but gambling sounds fun too I suppose." I grinned wider at the last part of her comment.

"Lili?"

"Black Jack and cards and I dun care if we split or not," she said without hesitation.

I hned and said, "We're splitting. There's no way that Kat would comply to gambling and Julie doesn't seem to even want to leave the room. Everyone's got their keys and there's always people to ask if you get lost. Here," I handed each of them one of the large bags, "take these. They might come in useful later. There's purses in there with cash if you wanna gamble and don't worry, I got them legally. That means it's not stolen money or made by smuggling, randsoms, selling illegal stuff, or human slave trade."

And so began our 12 day vacation in Vegas.

((Godime? Wanna take over? You can write in other people's POV's or 3rd person. Just make sure that they're still at Vegas at the end of the 12 days and no one's died or get severly injured.))
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((I thought the legal gambling age was 21.))

Julie snatched her bag away from Jenny, tossing it on the bed she sat on. "Okay, got it. We all get to do whatever the hell we want. And I," she started, scooting further into the bed and finally stopped to lean back on the backboard, "Am going to take over your room as of now, Jenny. Have fun!"

"Huh? Since when did I give you permission to take my room?" Jenny demanded, feigning offense.

"Oh, come on. As if you didn't know I was gonna do this." Julie retorted with a froen. "Now shoo! You all can do what you want. This is Vegas-- there's a ton of things to do here. If you come back even ONCE before midnight, then you haven't seen a bit of what Vegas has to offer."

".... and what about you?" Seren asked hesitantly. "You probably know a lot about Vegas... you've been here more than most of us. Why aren't you gonna go out?" Everyone else nodded in agreement. Of course, this was most like Julie. Whenever they went somewhere 'exciting', she was usually the one sitting on her ass and not giving a damn. But this was Vegas. No one came here and just sat on their ass all day.

Julie shook a finger, eyeing the rest of the girls mischeviously. "You're such a noob, Seren. I hope you haven't forgotten where we are just yet. It's over 100 freaking degrees. I ain't going out NOW. I'm going out later at night. When it's COOLER and more bearable. And the lights are prettier, too."

Jenny roller her eyes at her words. 'Prettier'. "You know, of all the things you could've said about Vegas' night life, that was probably the stupidest." She commented with an accusing look.

"L-Let's just go!" Kat said, dragging the rest out the door. "Julie's obviously not going to move-- let's just give her some space, huh?"
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((I dun know. I just assumed that it's 18 since we're considered "adults" at that age. Even if it isn't, I just changed the law in the story. So HA! My logic is my stories. My sweet, twisted and beautiful logic XD. And WTF. Prettier? The hell! What happened to creative words??? And it feels weird reefering to myself as 3rd person.......that's why I like to use Kisa so much. Kisa, wanna help??? She said no very rudely T_T))

Jenny pouted as Kat dragged her out her room. Just as she passed through the doorway, her hand shot out, forming a firm grip on the door frame. "You lazy anti-social bitch! When we get back, you're coming with us!!!"

"Whatever! Now SHOO!" Julie replied, pulling out a manga, "I'm going to READ okay? And if you're not out of this room in 5 seconds, I'm gonna throw something at you."

"Hmph," Jenny huffed then grinned, "You're no fun at all. You're coming with me to shop and gamble when I come back later on!" and she walked out the door with the others.

"So, where are we going?" Lili asked.

"Where do you wanna go? Everybody can go do their own thing and that's what I'm gonna do! So, I'll see you guys in a few hours. Be back here by midnight. We're gonna drag Julie out weather she wants to or not." With that, Jen darted off alone.

"So, uh" Kat started, "What do you guys want to do?"

"Why don't we all stick together?" Seren suggested, "We can watch a show first, then play with the machines or vice versa."

"Okay then," Lili declared, "Lets go watch that one show with the snow tiger!"

"That's tomorrow Lili," Seren said.

"Oh." There was a pause.

"How bout the one with the puppets? I think there's magic tricks too," Kat said, "It looked pretty interesting."

"Alright then!" the other two said at the same time.
~~~meanwhile, with Jen~~~
"Okay," she muttered to herself as she walked out of Hilton, "Got them far from San Leandro. Now what? I can't drag them into anything else. Shit. 15 days isn't much time." she sighed. 'I need to get my mind off of that for a bit.......Vegas huh. This just might be fun.' She grinned and walked into a nearby casino.

((This really is turning into an RP >_>;; And whut is 'Julie' planning? Wanna tell me Godime??? And I'm controlling 'Jenny' for now. I gots plans *rubs hands together and grins evily* for ALL of the characters!!! It'll be fun ^_^. And YES!!!! There WILL be the supernatural crap later on!!!))
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